Talents— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating words like 'several' twice in one sentence and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to limit your answer to about 3-4 sentences for better effectiveness.

例: Yes, I have talents in engineering, mechanical design, and singing. I've received compliments from my friends and family, and I've even participated in some competitions where I was recognized.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain the difference between skills mastered early and those still being developed. Also, avoid awkward phrasing like 'working on it on them.'

例: It depends on the skill. I mastered some, like singing, when I was a child, but others, such as mechanical design, I am still improving now.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it can be improved by adding linking words and more specific details. For example, explain why these skills are in demand or how you plan to use them in your career.

例: Definitely, I believe my talents will be useful in my future work because engineering and design skills are highly sought after in many industries. For instance, companies need experts to develop innovative products and improve manufacturing processes.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a clearer explanation of how your mother influenced you.

例: Yes, my mother has similar talents, especially in singing. I learned to love singing from her, which helped me develop my own skills.

× I have received compliments from my friends, family and several during several competitions I participated in.

✓ I have received compliments from my friends, family, and several others during several competitions I participated in.

The sentence is missing a word after 'several' to specify what 'several' refers to. Adding 'others' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× It depends, some of the skills were mastered when I was a little child, but some I'm still working on it on them.

✓ It depends; some of the skills were mastered when I was a little child, but some I'm still working on.

The phrase 'working on it on them' is redundant and incorrect. Removing 'it on them' corrects the sentence structure and makes it clear.

× Yes, in fact my mother has same skills as me almost.

✓ Yes, in fact my mother has almost the same skills as me.

The phrase 'has same skills' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'same skills'. Also, 'almost' should precede 'the same skills' for correct word order.