Talents— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better flow. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I consider myself creative and a fast learner. I taught myself game design, which helped me secure a full-time job as a game designer, a role that demands a lot of creativity.

提案: Your response is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar points. Also, correct minor grammar issues for clarity.

例: I began learning game design five years ago. Although I haven't mastered it yet, I've improved enough recently to land a full-time job in the field.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat repetitive and informal. Try to use more formal linking words and avoid filler words. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity and coherence.

例: Yes, being a fast learner is crucial for my future career because technology constantly evolves. Therefore, it's important to take the initiative to continuously learn new skills to stay competitive in the market.

提案: Your answer contains many fillers and some unclear phrases. Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh', and organize your ideas more clearly. Use linking words to connect your points and be more specific.

例: Yes, my mom is very creative. Although she currently teaches politics in middle school, she excels at dancing and singing. Sometimes, she even writes her own song lyrics and is a great storyteller.

× I learn self teaching game design and then I got a full time game designer job and I'm good at my job which requires many creative skills.

✓ I learned self-teaching game design and then I got a full-time game designer job and I'm good at my job which requires many creative skills.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past action. Also, 'self teaching' should be hyphenated as 'self-teaching' to correctly form a compound adjective. 'Full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× I started to learn it five years ago. I still wouldn't say I mastered it, but I think I get good enough that I am able to find a full time game designer job.

✓ I started to learn it five years ago. I still wouldn't say I have mastered it, but I think I have gotten good enough that I was able to find a full-time game designer job.

The present perfect tense 'have mastered' is appropriate to indicate an action that may still be relevant. 'Get' should be in the present perfect 'have gotten' to show progress up to now. 'Find' should be in the past tense 'was able to find' to reflect the past event of obtaining the job. 'Full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time'.

× I still wouldn't say I mastered it, but I think I get good enough that I am able to find a full time game designer job.

✓ I still wouldn't say I have mastered it, but I think I have gotten good enough that I was able to find a full-time game designer job.

The modal verb 'wouldn't' is correctly used to express hesitation. However, the verb tenses following it need adjustment for consistency and clarity as explained previously.

× If you want to catch up with the market, you have to self teaching a lot of new skills.

✓ If you want to catch up with the market, you have to self-teach a lot of new skills.

'Self teaching' is incorrect here because 'have to' should be followed by the base form of the verb. The correct form is 'self-teach' as a verb. Also, 'self-teach' should be hyphenated as a compound verb.

× I think especially fast learning is very helpful in my future career because if you imagine in any careers it's very important for you to take the initiative to keep learning new skills cause the technology just keep developing.

✓ I think especially fast learning is very helpful in my future career because if you imagine any career, it's very important for you to take the initiative to keep learning new skills because technology just keeps developing.

The preposition 'in' before 'any careers' is unnecessary and incorrect; it should be removed. 'Careers' should be singular 'career' to match 'any'. 'Cause' is informal and should be replaced with 'because'. 'Technology just keep developing' should be 'technology just keeps developing' to agree with singular subject 'technology'.

× Yeah, I think my mom is very creative, although she's umm, teaching politics in middle school right now, but she used to be and she is still very creative.

✓ Yeah, I think my mom is very creative, although she's, umm, teaching politics in middle school right now, but she used to be and she is still very creative.

No significant pronoun error here; the sentence is acceptable. Minor punctuation added for clarity.

× Uh, she is very good at dancing and singing songs and sometimes she will make it up lyrics, umm, to, to her own music and she is very good at telling story.

✓ Uh, she is very good at dancing and singing songs and sometimes she will make up lyrics, umm, to her own music and she is very good at telling stories.

'Make it up lyrics' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make up lyrics' without 'it'. 'Telling story' should be plural 'telling stories' because 'stories' is countable and plural is appropriate here.