Talents— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is informative and relevant, but it could be more natural by avoiding repetition and improving sentence flow. Try to combine related ideas and use linking words to make your response smoother.

例: Yes, I am good at creative writing and have been a published author since 2016. I have published four novels at book fairs in Bangladesh and contributed articles to national newspapers and popular websites.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions to improve clarity and naturalness.

例: I started writing at a very young age, but I believe I have mastered the skill more recently. Now, I feel more confident and mature as a writer than I did before.

提案: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases like 'I think'.

例: Since I aspire to be a writer, my talent will definitely help me achieve this goal. Moreover, I want to continue improving and create more meaningful works.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Avoid awkward expressions and ensure your sentences are complete and clear.

例: Yes, my elder brother also has a talent for creative writing. I have read some of his short stories on his Facebook account, and I found them quite interesting.

× I have published 4 novels in book fair in Bangladesh from 2016 to 2020.

✓ I have published 4 novels in book fairs in Bangladesh from 2016 to 2020.

The phrase 'book fair' should be plural 'book fairs' because the time span from 2016 to 2020 implies multiple events, not just one.

× I think it has mastered recently, though I have started writing from a very early age.

✓ I think I have mastered it recently, though I started writing from a very early age.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'has mastered' without a subject and mixes tenses. 'I have mastered it recently' correctly uses present perfect tense with the subject 'I'. Also, 'have started' should be simple past 'started' to match the past time reference 'from a very early age'.

× I have published 4 novels in book fair in Bangladesh from 2016 to 2020.

✓ I have published 4 novels at book fairs in Bangladesh from 2016 to 2020.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to events like fairs. The correct preposition is 'at' to indicate participation or presence at an event.

× I have seen him writing piece of short stories in his Facebook account which I have found interesting from a neutral pers neutral part of.

✓ I have seen him writing pieces of short stories on his Facebook account which I have found interesting from a neutral point of view.

The phrase 'in his Facebook account' should be 'on his Facebook account' because content is posted 'on' social media platforms. Also, 'piece of short stories' should be plural 'pieces of short stories'. The phrase 'from a neutral pers neutral part of' is incorrect and should be 'from a neutral point of view'.