Talents— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more precise and natural by correcting sentence structure and avoiding exaggerations that seem unrealistic. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I have a talent for reading. I've enjoyed reading since I was young and can finish several books in a week, which helps me learn new things quickly.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Make sure to understand the question and respond with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting details. Avoid unrelated or confusing phrases.

例: I developed this talent when I was young. For example, I enjoyed studying biology, and learning about it made me happy and helped me perform well in exams.

提案: Your answer is brief and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain how your talent is useful in your career with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I believe my reading skills are very useful for my career. For instance, as a health science promoter, I need to read and understand medical information to educate others effectively.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I'm not sure if anyone else in my family has the same talent. However, my mother often talks about books, so I believe she might share this interest and passed it on to me.

× I do love reading a book so I think that I'm good at it.

✓ I do love reading books so I think that I'm good at it.

The phrase 'a book' should be plural 'books' because the context implies reading multiple books, not just one.

× I can read like in 20 book in one day since I was young.

✓ I can read like 20 books in one day since I was young.

The noun 'book' should be plural 'books' to agree with the number '20'.

× Was it mastered recently or when you were young?

✓ Did you master it recently or when you were young?

The question requires the simple past tense 'Did you master' instead of 'Was it mastered' to correctly ask about the subject's action.

× Ice Mother in the biologicals.

✓ I excelled in biology.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Ice Mother in the biologicals' seems to be a mishearing or miswriting. The corrected sentence conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× When I've learned this subject I feel happy and I did well on my exam.

✓ When I learned this subject, I felt happy and did well on my exam.

The past perfect 'I've learned' is incorrect here; simple past 'I learned' fits better. Also, 'feel' should be past tense 'felt' to maintain tense consistency.

× Yes I do. My talent support me well in my work career now and work as a Health Science promotion.

✓ Yes, I do. My talent supports me well in my career now, and I work in Health Science promotion.

The verb 'support' needs an 's' to agree with the singular subject 'talent'. Also, 'work as a Health Science promotion' is incorrect; it should be 'work in Health Science promotion' or similar.

× I'm not sure about it because we didn't share anything much but my mom, she always talk about the book so I think she has the same talent like me like she send this talent to me.

✓ I'm not sure about it because we don't share much, but my mom always talks about books, so I think she has the same talent as me, like she passed this talent to me.

The sentence has several pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'she always talk' should be 'she always talks'; 'like me like she send' is awkward and incorrect, corrected to 'as me, like she passed'. Also, 'didn't share anything much' is better as 'don't share much' for present relevance.