Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子有主题但表达不够自然或准确，存在词汇和语法问题（例如“starting”、“attend online leaders”）。建议：1) 用更准确的动词（e.g. studying, doing work, attending online meetings）；2) 简化句子并用连词连接支持细节；3) 提供更具体的例子并保持不超过5句。练习要点：用一至两句主题句，然后用一两句细节说明工具和具体用途。

例: I use a computer for studying, working and staying in touch with people. For example, I write reports and complete tests on it, and I use WPS to join online meetings and take notes.

提案: 回答有时间信息，但语法和表达混乱（如“gave us our first license”，“tell tell”，“learning how to use a mouse”，“I'll type”）。建议：1) 直接给出时间并用过去时描述经历；2) 用清晰的短句说明学到的技能；3) 避免重复和不必要的未来时。

例: I first used a computer when I was ten. My primary school teacher taught us basic skills, like using the mouse and typing simple words, and I still remember practicing those exercises.

提案: 回答表达了观点但不够流畅，存在用词不当（“work starting”）和填充词（“umm”）。建议：1) 用清晰的因果结构陈述影响；2) 用更自然的替代表达（e.g. smartphones, public computers）；3) 删除犹豫词并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: My life would be much less convenient without a computer because I rely on it for work and keeping in touch with friends. I would probably rely more on my smartphone or use public computers, but those options are less efficient.

提案: 回答清晰且有原因，但用词可改进（“affiliate apps”不太自然），细节可更具体。建议：1) 用更准确的词汇如“third‑party apps”或“unnecessary features”；2) 给出一个具体例子或后果来丰富回答；3) 用连接词增强逻辑。

例: It would be hard for me to use a computer when the software has a complicated interface and too many unnecessary features. For example, when an app hides basic settings behind several menus, I feel overwhelmed and can't complete simple tasks.

× I use the computer in many different situations, especially for starting, working and communicating with others.

✓ I use computers in many different situations, especially for starting tasks, working, and communicating with others.

主谓一致和可数名词使用：原句中的 'the computer' 与句意不匹配，讲一般用途时应使用复数或无冠词复数形式 'computers'，并且列举动作时 'starting' 单独使用不明确，改为 'starting tasks' 更清晰。建议在谈论一般用途时使用复数或泛指用法，并确保并列项目形式一致。

× For example, I relied on it to write tests and the reports, using WPS to attend online leaders and take notes.

✓ For example, I rely on it to write tests and reports, using WPS to attend online lectures and take notes.

时态与词语选择错误：上下文为一般现在时，应该用 'rely' 而不是过去式 'relied'。'the reports' 中的定冠词不必要，改为复数 'reports'。'attend online leaders' 用词错误，应为 'attend online lectures'（参加线上课程/讲座）。建议保持时态一致并使用正确词汇。

× When I was 10 years old, my primary school teacher gave us our first license about how to use computer and she also tell tell us some basic computer skills.

✓ When I was 10 years old, my primary school teacher gave us our first lesson about how to use a computer and she also told us some basic computer skills.

过去时与词形错误：讲述过去经历应使用过去时，'gave' 正确但后面 'tell tell' 应为过去式 'told'，且重复词是笔误。'license' 用词错误，应为 'lesson'；'how to use computer' 缺少不定冠词 'a computer'。建议注意动词时态一致、避免重复并使用正确名词。

× I still remember the learning how to use a mouse.

✓ I still remember learning how to use a mouse.

句子结构问题：'remember' 后接动名词时不需要定冠词 'the'，正确表达为 'remember learning'。建议学习动词后接动名词和不定式的用法差异，常见搭配记住后接动名词。

× I'll type some simple words.

✓ I typed some simple words.

时态不一致：上下文在回忆过去的经历，应使用过去时 'typed' 而不是将来时 'I'll type'。建议在叙述过去事件时统一使用过去时。

× I think my life would be much less convenient without a computer because I use it for work starting and communicating with my friends.

✓ I think my life would be much less convenient without a computer because I use it for starting work and communicating with my friends.

词序与动名词搭配：'work starting' 词序不当，应为 'starting work'（开始工作）。此外保持 'use it for' 后接动名词结构。建议注意固定搭配 'start work/doing something' 的顺序。

× I would try to use umm, use others like smartphones and public computers.

✓ I would try to use other devices like smartphones and public computers.

词类与用法错误：'use others' 不明确，'others' 应替换为名词短语 'other devices'。'umm' 为口语填充语，书面表达可省略。建议使用明确名词并避免口语填充词。

× It would be difficult for me to use a computer if the software has a complicated interface and too many affiliate apps because I feel overwhelmed and I have no idea how to use them.

✓ It would be difficult for me to use a computer if the software had a complicated interface and too many affiliated apps because I would feel overwhelmed and have no idea how to use them.

条件句时态：与虚拟语气有关的第二类条件句应在从句中使用过去式 'had'，主句用 'would'。此外 'affiliate apps' 用词不当，应为形容词 'affiliated apps'；'I feel' 改为与条件句一致的 'I would feel'。建议学习虚拟条件句的时态配合，并注意形容词形式。