Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや言葉の繰り返しがあり、流暢さが不足しています。より自然で効果的な表現を使い、具体的な詳細を加えると良いでしょう。例えば、なぜその広告が印象に残ったのかを説明してください。

例: Yes, I remember an advertisement for the Pokémon game when I was in elementary school. It caught my attention because I really wanted to play the game, so it left a strong impression on me.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤り（複数形や冠詞の使い方）や冗長な表現があります。より正確な文法を使い、理由を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains, subways, and buses. I find them quite annoying because they are everywhere and can be distracting.

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。より簡潔で正確な表現を使い、具体的な理由を明確に述べることが必要です。

例: No, I don't like advertisements because they are annoying. For example, I often get advertisement emails and I can't tell if they are important or not.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。比較の表現を正しく使い、具体的な例を加えると良いでしょう。

例: I like emotional advertisements because they can touch people's feelings. Sometimes I see them on TV, but there are fewer of them here compared to other countries.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや繰り返しがあります。より自然な表現を使い、理由を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone, especially when I use free apps. There are so many ads that I find it quite annoying.

× The only thing that I remember uh, the advertisement of Pokémon game, uh, I want uh, the game when I was a elementary school student.

✓ The only thing that I remember is the advertisement of the Pokémon game. I wanted the game when I was an elementary school student.

The sentence has singular and plural issues: 'the advertisement of Pokémon game' should be 'the advertisement of the Pokémon game' to specify the game, and 'I want uh, the game' should be 'I wanted the game' to match past tense and correct article usage. Also, 'a elementary' should be 'an elementary' because 'elementary' starts with a vowel sound.

× Yes, I can see a lot of advertisement on train or subways and the buses.

✓ Yes, I can see a lot of advertisements on trains, subways, and buses.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. Also, 'train' should be plural 'trains' to match 'subways' and 'buses' which are plural. The preposition 'on' is correct here.

× Uh, there are too much advertisement I think so it's annoying for me.

✓ Uh, there are too many advertisements, I think, so it's annoying for me.

'Too much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'advertisements' is countable, so 'too many' is correct. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the quantifier.

× I know I don't like them because it's these are annoying.

✓ I know I don't like them because they are annoying.

The phrase 'it's these are annoying' is incorrect. 'They are annoying' correctly refers to 'them' (advertisements) and is grammatically correct.

× I sometimes receive advertisement emails, but uh, I usually confuse, uh, the e-mail is we, whether it's important or not.

✓ I sometimes receive advertisement emails, but I usually get confused about whether the email is important or not.

The phrase 'I usually confuse, uh, the e-mail is we' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I usually get confused about whether the email is important or not.' This corrects pronoun and verb usage.

× I like emotional advertisement.

✓ I like emotional advertisements.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to ads in general. Also, 'emotional' correctly modifies 'advertisements'.

× Sometimes I can see them on TV's, however there are. Not so many compared them on them in other countries.

✓ Sometimes I can see them on TVs; however, there are not so many compared to those in other countries.

'TV's' should be plural 'TVs' without an apostrophe. The phrase 'compared them on them' is incorrect; it should be 'compared to those' to correctly compare advertisements in different countries.

× I usually see them on my phone especially I installed free apps.

✓ I usually see them on my phone, especially when I install free apps.

The sentence needs a conjunction 'when' to connect the clauses properly. 'Installed' should be 'install' to match the habitual present tense.

× There are so many advertisements so I feel it's annoying.

✓ There are so many advertisements that I feel it's annoying.

The sentence needs a conjunction 'that' to connect the cause and effect properly. The quantifier 'so many' is correct here.