Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并正确使用词汇，如'skills'和'swimming'。

例: Yes, I love swimming, but I only know basic skills and can swim about 20 meters. I really want to improve my swimming techniques because it is important for me.

提案: 回答中语法混乱，表达不连贯，词汇使用不准确。建议理清句子结构，使用恰当的词汇，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, learning to swim is difficult because it requires strength, flexibility, and good techniques. You need to practice regularly to improve these skills.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的词汇，如'swimming pool'，并简洁明了地描述地点。

例: Most people in my country like to swim in swimming pools or indoor facilities. In my hometown Wuhan, many people prefer swimming in the Yangtze River, which is the longest river.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇误用，如'skiers'应为'swimmers'。建议使用正确词汇，结构清晰，并用连接词增强逻辑。

例: There are many differences between swimming in the sea and in a pool. Swimming in the sea is more dangerous and requires skilled swimmers, while pools offer clean and safe water for everyone.

× I don't have a very practical skills or some good skiers at swimming

✓ I don't have very practical skills or good swimming skills

这里'skills'是复数，前面不需要加'a'，且'skiers'应为'skills'，表示技能。应去掉'a'，并将'skiers'改为'skills'。

× because I I just can swim for about 20 meters.

✓ because I can just swim for about 20 meters.

句中重复了'I'，应删除多余的'I'。

× I prefer I'd love to.

✓ I'd love to.

'I prefer I'd love to'结构不正确，应直接说'I’d love to'。

× I am eager to learn a better skiers but it caused a bond for me.

✓ I am eager to learn better skills but it causes a problem for me.

'a better skiers'中'skiers'应为'skills'且不加冠词，'caused a bond'表达不当，应为'causes a problem'。

× I think the swimming not only need your strength and but also your organization and your flexibility.

✓ I think swimming not only needs your strength but also your coordination and flexibility.

'the swimming'不需要定冠词，'need'应为第三人称单数'needs'，'organization'用词不当，应为'coordination'。

× I think the swimming not only need your strength and but also your organization and your flexibility.

✓ I think swimming not only needs your strength but also your coordination and flexibility.

'not only... and also...'结构错误，应为'not only... but also...'。

× So it requires a lot of your physical body and also manning techniques.

✓ So it requires a lot from your physical body and also many techniques.

'manning techniques'用词错误，应为'many techniques'，且表达更自然。

× Techniques is needed or needed in the sport.

✓ Techniques are needed in the sport.

'Techniques'为复数，谓语应为'are'，且句子应简洁。

× So sometimes I want to hire.

✓ So sometimes I want to hire a coach.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，导致表达不清。

× I believe the majority of people love to go to swimming in swimming poor or some indoor infrastructure infrastructures.

✓ I believe the majority of people love to go swimming in swimming pools or some indoor infrastructures.

'swimming poor'应为'swimming pool'，'infrastructures'复数形式正确，但前面不应加'some indoor infrastructure infrastructures'重复。

× But I come from Wuhan so people living will happen is preferred to prefer to swimming as Johns are evil which is the longest river.

✓ But I come from Wuhan, so people living there prefer swimming in the Yangtze River, which is the longest river.

原句语序混乱，'will happen is preferred to prefer to swimming'不合语法，'Johns are evil'应为'Yangtze River'。

× Oh, there are too many difference between these two aspects,

✓ Oh, there are too many differences between these two aspects,

'difference'应为复数形式'differences'。

× because we mean in the sea is more dangerous and requires a high proficient skiers.

✓ because swimming in the sea is more dangerous and requires highly proficient skills.

'we mean in the sea'表达错误，应为'swimming in the sea'，'high proficient skiers'应为'highly proficient skills'。

× Instead of swimming in the pool or some indoor infrastructure facilities, you can enjoy the convenient and clean water.

✓ When swimming in the pool or some indoor facilities, you can enjoy convenient and clean water.

'Instead of'用法错误，句意应为'在游泳池或室内设施游泳时'，应使用'When'。