Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有重复和冗余。建议简化句子，使用更地道的表达，并注意时态和语法的正确性。

例: Yes, I love swimming, especially during holidays. I usually go to the city pool because it makes me feel free and relaxed.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，逻辑连接不够自然。建议使用更准确的词汇和句型，明确表达自己的观点。

例: Yes, when I first learned to swim, I was very afraid of the pool. However, once I overcame my fear, learning swimming skills became easier.

提案: 回答内容较为完整，但句子结构稍显复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: People in my country usually swim in local pools in the city center because they are convenient. However, during holidays or summer, many prefer going to coastal cities to swim in the sea.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够准确的问题。建议使用更准确的词汇，注意主谓一致，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Swimming in a pool is safer, but some people find it boring. On the other hand, swimming in the sea offers many water activities, but you must be careful because some of them can be dangerous.

× Yes, I love swimming very much, especially in holiday.

✓ Yes, I love swimming very much, especially on holidays.

这里应该使用介词'on'来表示特定的时间点或节假日，'in holiday'是不正确的表达。正确的搭配是'on holiday'或'on holidays'。

× I usually want to go to the city to swim can make me more freedom and it's make me very comfortable and relax myself.

✓ I usually want to go to the city to swim because it makes me feel freer, very comfortable, and relaxed.

原句结构混乱，缺少连接词，动词形式错误。需要用'because'连接原因，'make'应改为第三人称单数'makes'，'more freedom'应改为'freer'，'relax myself'应改为'feel relaxed'。

× Yes, when I first time to learn swimming, I was very fair the swimming pool.

✓ Yes, when I first learned to swim, I was very afraid of the swimming pool.

'first time to learn'表达不正确，应改为'first learned'，'fair'应为形容词'afraid'，且需要介词'of'。

× So I think the important is to overcome the fear and then I think it's easy to study the swim skills.

✓ So I think the important thing is to overcome the fear, and then I think it's easy to learn swimming skills.

'the important'应为'the important thing'，'study the swim skills'表达不自然，应改为'learn swimming skills'。

× I think the local swimming pool is more convenient for people that in the city center, but in holiday or in summer people prefer to choose a coastal city to go swimming in the sea.

✓ I think the local swimming pool is more convenient for people who live in the city center, but during holidays or in summer, people prefer to go to a coastal city to swim in the sea.

'people that in the city center'应改为'people who live in the city center'，'in holiday'应为'during holidays'，'prefer to choose'冗余，改为'prefer to go'更自然。

× I think in the swimming in the pool it's more safety for people, but many people think it's boring.

✓ I think swimming in the pool is safer for people, but many people think it's boring.

'more safety'错误，应使用比较级'adjective'形式'safer'，'in the swimming in the pool'结构重复，应简化为'swimming in the pool'。

× So in the sea you can experience many water projects but you need to pay attention to safety because some projects is dangerous.

✓ So in the sea you can experience many water activities, but you need to pay attention to safety because some activities are dangerous.

'water projects'用词不当，应为'water activities'，'some projects is'主谓不一致，应为'some activities are'。