Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is enthusiastic but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to use a simple, direct sentence structure and correct verb forms. For example, say 'Swimming is my favourite hobby and it also improves my life skills and well-being.'

例: Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it is my favourite hobby and it helps improve my fitness and overall well-being.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but the grammar and vocabulary need improvement for clarity. Use simpler, correct phrases and avoid repetition. For example, say 'I think learning to swim is not difficult if you have a good teacher. My mother enrolled me in a high-quality course where the teachers have a lot of experience.'

例: I believe learning to swim is quite easy, especially with a good instructor. For instance, my mother signed me up for a quality swimming course taught by experienced teachers.

提案: Your answer covers the main points but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct prepositions and clearer sentence structure. For example, say 'People in my country like to swim in pools and at the beach. Young people prefer pools because they are more convenient and safer after school.'

例: People in my country enjoy swimming in both pools and beaches. However, young people usually prefer pools since they are safer and more convenient after a long day at school.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Avoid repetition and use linking words to compare. For example, say 'Swimming in a pool is usually for students and is safer, while swimming in the sea is more challenging because it is larger and less safe.'

例: I think the main difference is that swimming in a pool is generally safer and often used by students, whereas swimming in the sea is more difficult due to its size and potential dangers.

× Absolutely, I really love swimming because swimming not only is my favorite hobby but also its enhance my life skill and it's very good for well-being of almost people.

✓ Absolutely, I really love swimming because swimming is not only my favorite hobby but also enhances my life skills and it's very good for the well-being of almost everyone.

The pronoun 'its' is incorrectly used; it should be 'it' as the subject of the verb 'enhances'. Also, 'life skill' should be plural 'life skills' to match the context. 'Almost people' is incorrect; 'almost everyone' is the correct phrase. Additionally, 'swimming not only is my favorite hobby' is better as 'swimming is not only my favorite hobby' for natural word order.

× For example, my mother involves me a high quality course, then all teachers in here have some have many experience to students.

✓ For example, my mother enrolled me in a high-quality course, and all the teachers here have a lot of experience with students.

The verb 'involves' is incorrectly used; 'enrolled me in' is appropriate for courses. 'High quality' should be hyphenated as 'high-quality' when used as an adjective. 'Have some have many experience to students' is ungrammatical; it should be 'have a lot of experience with students'. Also, 'in here' is better as 'here'.

× Of course, people in my country have various places to swimming, especially pool and beaches, and young people prepare swimming on the pool than in the beach because it's very convenient and safety after a long day at school.

✓ Of course, people in my country have various places to swim, especially pools and beaches, and young people prefer swimming in the pool rather than at the beach because it's very convenient and safe after a long day at school.

The phrase 'places to swimming' is incorrect; it should be 'places to swim' (infinitive form). 'Pool and beaches' should be plural 'pools and beaches'. 'Prepare swimming on the pool' is incorrect; 'prefer swimming in the pool' is correct. 'In the beach' should be 'at the beach'. 'Safety' is a noun; the adjective 'safe' is needed here.

× In my opinion, I think the difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea is swimming the pool is more for especially for student and swimming in the sea is large and it don't safer than swimming in the pool.

✓ In my opinion, I think the difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea is that swimming in the pool is especially for students, and swimming in the sea is more extensive and not as safe as swimming in the pool.

The phrase 'swimming the pool' is missing the preposition 'in'. 'More for especially for student' is ungrammatical; it should be 'especially for students'. 'Swimming in the sea is large' is incorrect; 'more extensive' or 'larger' is better. 'It don't safer' is grammatically wrong; it should be 'it is not as safe'.