Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh lặp lại từ 'swimming' quá nhiều lần trong câu trả lời để làm cho câu nói mượt mà hơn. Bạn cũng có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy it. It's one of my favorite outdoor sports because it keeps me healthy and helps me unwind after school. When I was younger, it even contributed to my growth.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt cho tự nhiên hơn, ví dụ câu đầu nên sửa lại để rõ nghĩa và đúng ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Learning to swim was quite challenging for me at first because I was afraid of water. However, after practicing regularly, I gained confidence and by the age of seven, I was able to swim 100 meters.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, câu cuối bị bỏ dở. Bạn nên chia câu rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ để nối các ý, đồng thời hoàn thiện câu cuối để câu trả lời đầy đủ và mạch lạc.

例: People in my country enjoy swimming both in pools and at the beach. Many prefer the sea because it's refreshing, while others like pools due to their convenience and cleanliness.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'convenient' nên được dùng đúng cách trong câu. Ngoài ra, câu cuối có lỗi và chưa rõ nghĩa, bạn nên sửa lại để câu trả lời rõ ràng và logic hơn.

例: For me, the main difference is convenience. Pools are easier to access anytime but require an entrance fee. On the other hand, swimming in the sea is free, but it can be less safe and there is a risk of drowning.

× Just learn how to swim was very difficult for me because I am afraid of water.

✓ Just learning how to swim was very difficult for me because I am afraid of water.

The phrase 'Just learn how to swim' is incorrect because 'learn' should be in the gerund form 'learning' to function as the subject of the sentence. Using the base form 'learn' here is a tense and form error. The correct form is 'Just learning how to swim'. This is a common mistake when using verbs as subjects; the gerund (-ing form) is required.

× People in my country like to go swimming in swimming pools and at the beach many people prefer swimming in the sea because it is refreshing, but other people often like swimming in pools because it.

✓ People in my country like to go swimming in swimming pools and at the beach. Many people prefer swimming in the sea because it is refreshing, but other people often like swimming in pools because it is safer.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, causing confusion. It should be split into two sentences for clarity. Also, the last clause 'because it' is incomplete and needs a complement to make sense. Adding 'is safer' completes the thought. Proper sentence structure and punctuation are essential for clear communication.

× For me, the main difference between swimming in the pool and in the sea is convenient.

✓ For me, the main difference between swimming in the pool and in the sea is convenience.

The word 'convenient' is an adjective, but here a noun is needed to complete the sentence after 'is'. The correct noun form is 'convenience'. Using the adjective instead of the noun causes a grammatical error. This is a common mistake when choosing between adjectives and nouns in predicate positions.

× Pools are usually easier to go swimming when we want, but we must buy an entrance fee.

✓ Pools are usually easier to go swimming in when we want, but we must buy an entrance fee.

The phrase 'easier to go swimming' is missing the preposition 'in' after 'swimming' to indicate location. The correct phrase is 'easier to go swimming in'. This is a prepositional error related to the use of articles and prepositions together. Including 'in' clarifies the meaning.

× On the other hand, swimming in sea is free, but this can be less safe and easy to draw.

✓ On the other hand, swimming in the sea is free, but this can be less safe and easy to drown in.

The phrase 'swimming in sea' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'sea'. The correct phrase is 'swimming in the sea'. Also, 'easy to draw' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'easy to drown in'. This is a vocabulary and article usage error. Using the correct article and phrase improves clarity and correctness.