Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding repetition and improving sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'swimming pool' multiple times, use pronouns or synonyms. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'a swimming classes' to 'swimming classes'.

例: Yes, I enjoy swimming, especially in pools. When I was a child, my father enrolled me in swimming classes, and I used to attend lessons with my friends. I really enjoyed those sessions.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct expressions and linking words. For example, say 'front crawl' instead of 'front swimming' and 'breaststroke' instead of 'swimming on my chest'. Also, use linking words like 'however' to connect ideas.

例: For most people, learning to swim is not difficult. However, in my case, I found it easier to learn backstroke before mastering the front crawl or breaststroke.

提案: Avoid unlikely or confusing details such as swimming with cats, which may sound unnatural. Also, improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: In my country, many people like to swim in the sea, especially during weekends. They often go with their friends and family to enjoy the natural environment.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. For example, use 'man-made' instead of 'constructed by human being' and add 'whereas' to contrast the two.

例: The atmosphere is quite different. Swimming in a pool is in a man-made environment, whereas the sea is natural and offers a unique experience with its own ecosystem.

× my father registered me in a swimming classes

✓ my father registered me in swimming classes

The word 'classes' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used before it. 'A' is used with singular countable nouns. The correct phrase is 'in swimming classes' without 'a'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× I enjoyed the swimming inside the swimming pool

✓ I enjoyed swimming inside the swimming pool

The word 'swimming' here is used as a gerund (verb acting as noun), so the definite article 'the' is unnecessary. Saying 'the swimming' is incorrect because 'swimming' in this context is uncountable. This is a singular and plural issue.

× I did not learn how to swim front swimming

✓ I did not learn how to swim front crawl

The phrase 'front swimming' is incorrect. The correct term for swimming on the chest is 'front crawl'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and vocabulary.

× I learned back swimming on my back faster than swimming on my chest

✓ I learned backstroke swimming on my back faster than swimming on my chest

The phrase 'back swimming' is incorrect. The correct term is 'backstroke swimming'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and vocabulary.

× People in my country enjoy swimming inside the sea with their cats and their friends

✓ People in my country enjoy swimming in the sea with their cats and their friends

The preposition 'inside' is incorrect when referring to the sea. The correct preposition is 'in'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× During the weekend, a lot of men go to the swimming inside the sea

✓ During the weekend, a lot of men go swimming in the sea

The phrase 'go to the swimming inside the sea' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'go swimming in the sea'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and singular/plural issue.

× Swimming in the pool will be inside a developed area constructed by human being

✓ Swimming in the pool is inside a developed area constructed by human beings

The phrase 'human being' should be plural 'human beings' because it refers to people in general. Also, 'will be' is incorrect tense here; present tense 'is' fits better. This is an article and tense issue.