Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to start directly with your opinion, avoid unnecessary phrases like "In the corner," and use correct verb tenses. Also, explain your reasons more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I like swimming because it is a great way to stay active during the summer. Moreover, being in the water reduces pressure on my body, which makes it very comfortable and relaxing.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating phrases like "to to" and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, try to provide a more complete explanation.

例: I don't think learning to swim is very difficult because once you find the most efficient method and have a good teacher, it becomes much easier to master the skills.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating words like "enjoy" and use more varied vocabulary.

例: People in my country usually prefer public swimming pools because they are affordable and open daily. However, some choose private pools to swim alone and have a peaceful, undisturbed experience.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words like "firstly" and "also" to organize your points clearly. Avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Firstly, swimming in the sea provides more buoyancy, which makes floating easier. Also, the water tastes salty, unlike the fresh water in swimming pools.

× it gave less pressure to my body in the water because it flows me up

✓ it gives less pressure to my body in the water because it floats me up

The verb 'gave' is in the past tense, but the sentence is describing a general fact, so present tense 'gives' is appropriate (Problem Type 5). Also, 'flows me up' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'floats' to describe buoyancy (Problem Type 9). Use 'floats me up' to express the water supporting the body.

× You just need to know what's the best way, what's the most efficient way to to really learn how to swim

✓ You just need to know what the best way is, what the most efficient way is to really learn how to swim

The sentence structure is awkward and incorrect. The embedded questions should be structured as 'what the best way is' rather than 'what's the best way' in this context (Problem Type 26). Also, the repeated 'to' is a typo and should be corrected.

× they enjoy the swimming by themselves and just enjoying the time without any disturbance

✓ they enjoy swimming by themselves and just enjoy the time without any disturbance

The phrase 'the swimming' is incorrect; 'swimming' as a gerund does not need 'the' here (Problem Type 11). Also, parallel structure requires 'enjoy' to match 'enjoy' earlier in the sentence.

× swimming in ocean you usually taste it salty

✓ swimming in the ocean you usually taste it as salty

The noun 'ocean' requires the definite article 'the' (Problem Type 17). Also, the phrase 'taste it salty' is incomplete; 'taste it as salty' is more correct to express the sensation (Problem Type 11).