Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢游泳的观点，但句子结构不够清晰，存在语法错误和重复，影响了表达的自然流畅。建议注意句子完整性，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和介词。

例: Yes, I like swimming very much. I learned to swim by myself 10 years ago and even taught my classmates how to swim. I enjoy it because it gives me a sense of freedom and helps me relax when I am in the water.

提案: 回答中有重复和未完成的句子，影响表达的完整性和连贯性。建议练习完整表达观点，避免重复，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: For me, learning to swim was not difficult. The first step is to get familiar with the water. For example, you can try floating on the water and practicing strokes to move forward.

提案: 回答内容较好，但存在语气词过多和表达不够简洁的问题。建议减少口头语，使用更准确的词汇，并适当使用连接词增强逻辑性。

例: People in my country usually like to swim in swimming pools because the water is clean and it is safe. However, some people prefer swimming in the sea because it is more exciting, although it requires better skills.

提案: 回答中存在发音错误和语法错误，且内容不完整，缺乏具体细节。建议加强发音练习，注意语法正确性，并提供更具体的比较细节。

例: There are several differences between swimming in a pool and swimming in the sea. Firstly, the water quality in the pool is usually better. Secondly, swimming in the pool is safer. Finally, swimming in the sea can be more exciting due to the natural environment.

× I learned swim by myself 10 years ago and even taught my classmates how to swim.

✓ I learned to swim by myself 10 years ago and even taught my classmates how to swim.

动词learn后面接动词不定式to swim，而不是直接接动词原形swim。这里需要使用不定式形式。

× I enjoy swimming because it gives me a sense of freedom and I feel relaxed when swim, when swim in the water and.

✓ I enjoy swimming because it gives me a sense of freedom and I feel relaxed when swimming in the water.

动词feel后面接形容词或动名词作状语，不能直接接动词原形swim。这里应使用动名词形式swimming。

× For example, umm, you can try, you can try float on the water and stroke, stroke and try to move forward.

✓ For example, umm, you can try floating on the water and stroking, and try to move forward.

动词try后面接动名词表示尝试做某事，不能直接接动词原形float和stroke。

× People in our country like to go swimming in swimming pool, because the water in the swimming pool is usually very clean, and it is uh, safe to swim in the pool.

✓ People in our country like to go swimming in swimming pools, because the water in the swimming pool is usually very clean, and it is uh, safe to swim in the pool.

复数名词pools表示多个游泳池，更符合一般情况。

× Sometimes people like to swim in the sea, uh, because it is more exciting, but it needs more skills.

✓ Sometimes people like to swim in the sea, uh, because it is more exciting, but it requires more skills.

动词need后面接名词时，表示需要某物；表示需要做某事时，应使用require或need to do。这里用requires更合适。

× There are several differences between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea. Firstly, the water quality in the spammy in the swimming pool is uh, higher than in the say and umm.

✓ There are several differences between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea. Firstly, the water quality in the swimming pool is uh, higher than in the sea and umm.

单词spammy和say是拼写错误，应为swimming和sea。

× Secondly, it is more safer umm in the swimming pool and finally is exciting.

✓ Secondly, it is safer umm in the swimming pool and finally it is exciting.

more safer是双重比较级，比较级safer前不能加more。句子缺少主语it。