Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by adding more specific details and using linking words to make it more natural and effective. Try to avoid repeating the word 'swimming' too often and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy swimming. On weekends, I usually go to the local pool with my friends because it helps me relax and stay fit.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Use proper tense and sentence structure, and add linking words to improve coherence. Also, try to provide a reason or example to support your opinion.

例: I don't think learning to swim is difficult because I started when I was five years old, and with regular practice, it became easier over time.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit vague and unnatural. Avoid saying 'to make them happy' as it sounds awkward. Instead, provide specific places and reasons why people like to swim there, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: In my country, people often swim in swimming pools and rivers because these places are easily accessible and provide a refreshing escape from the heat.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Avoid irrelevant information like 'swimming in AC'. Structure your answer clearly by stating the main differences and supporting them with specific details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: There are several differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. For instance, pools have fixed areas and depths, making them safer, whereas the sea has varying depths and waves, which can be more challenging.

× I think that it is not difficult to learn swimming because I learn swimming at the age of five years.

✓ I think that it is not difficult to learn to swim because I learned to swim at the age of five years.

The verb 'learn' should be followed by the infinitive form 'to swim' instead of the gerund 'swimming'. Also, since the action happened in the past, 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned'. This correction aligns with proper verb usage and tense consistency.

× In my country, people go for swimming in swimming pools and rivers to make them happy.

✓ In my country, people go swimming in swimming pools and rivers to make themselves happy.

The phrase 'go for swimming' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go swimming'. Also, the pronoun 'them' is incorrect here because it does not refer back properly; 'themselves' is the correct reflexive pronoun to indicate people make themselves happy.

× In my country, people go for swimming in swimming pools and rivers to make them happy.

✓ In my country, people go swimming in swimming pools and rivers to make themselves happy.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect because it does not refer back to the subject 'people'. The reflexive pronoun 'themselves' should be used to correctly indicate that people make themselves happy.

× There are not such kind of difference when you are swimming in AC and swimming in a swimming pool.

✓ There is no such kind of difference when you are swimming in the sea and swimming in a swimming pool.

The phrase 'in AC' is incorrect; it should be 'in the sea'. Also, 'There are not such kind of difference' is incorrect; the correct form is 'There is no such kind of difference' because 'difference' is singular.

× There are not such kind of difference when you are swimming in AC and swimming in a swimming pool.

✓ There is no such kind of difference when you are swimming in the sea and swimming in a swimming pool.

The noun 'difference' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'such kind of' is better expressed as 'such a kind of' or simply 'such'. The preposition 'in AC' is incorrect and should be 'in the sea'.

× But there are several differences. Like when you are swimming in the swimming pool you have a particular area and a particular depth. But when you are swimming in a sea then there are not particular area and not.

✓ But there are several differences. For example, when you are swimming in a swimming pool, you have a particular area and a particular depth. But when you are swimming in the sea, there is no particular area or depth.

The sentence 'Like when you are swimming...' is a fragment and should be connected properly. Also, 'a sea' should be 'the sea' because it refers to a specific sea. The phrase 'there are not particular area and not' is incorrect; it should be 'there is no particular area or depth' to maintain subject-verb agreement and clarity.