Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“let me be cool in a hard day”应改为“help me cool down on a hot day”。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，同时注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: Yes, I like swimming, especially in summer. It helps me cool down on hot days, so I usually go swimming on weekends when the weather is warm.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“learn how to swim isn't difficult”应为“learning to swim isn't difficult”，“my swimming pools it wasn't very correct”表达不清。建议使用正确的时态和句型，表达更清晰。

例: No, I think learning to swim isn't difficult because I learned it quickly when I was a child. However, I feel that my swimming technique was not very good, so I need to learn it again in a better way.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“there was a secure place”应为“it is a safe place”，“another people”应为“other people”，“monitor nature”表达不清。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构。

例: I think some people prefer swimming in swimming pools because they are safe places. Others like swimming in the sea because of the beautiful scenery and the chance to enjoy nature.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅的问题，如“most sense of security”应为“a greater sense of security”，“in when you swimming”应为“when you swim”，“have a more chance to see the wild wild”表达不清。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法和词汇。

例: Swimming in pools gives people a greater sense of security because of clear boundaries. However, swimming in the sea allows you to enjoy nature more and possibly see wildlife.

× Swimming is a very good choice to let me be cool in a hard day.

✓ Swimming is a very good choice to help me stay cool on a hot day.

这里动词短语使用不当，'to let me be cool'不符合习惯表达，应使用'help me stay cool'。另外，'in a hard day'应为'on a hot day'，介词和形容词使用错误。

× So I like to go swimming in the weekend when the day what is hot.

✓ So I like to go swimming on the weekend when the day is hot.

介词错误，表示时间应使用'on the weekend'，而不是'in the weekend'。此外，'the day what is hot'结构错误，应为'the day is hot'。

× No, I think learn how to swim isn't difficult because I learn it quickly when I was a child.

✓ No, I think learning how to swim isn't difficult because I learned it quickly when I was a child.

动词形式错误，'learn'应改为动名词'learning'作主语；过去时间应使用过去式'learned'。

× However, I think my swimming pools it wasn't very correct so I need to learning in the new way.

✓ However, I think my swimming technique wasn't very good so I need to learn in a new way.

代词使用错误，'swimming pools it'不合适，应改为'swimming technique'。'need to learning'应为'need to learn'，动词不定式形式错误。

× I think some people like to go swimming in the swimming pool because there was a secure place, but another people like to go swimming by the sea because there have a beautiful scenery and monitor nature so they can enjoy in the sea.

✓ I think some people like to go swimming in the swimming pool because it is a secure place, but other people like to go swimming by the sea because there is beautiful scenery and natural environment so they can enjoy the sea.

单复数错误，'there was'应为'there is'，'another people'应为'other people'，'there have'应为'there is'。'scenery'是不可数名词，前面不加冠词。

× I think some people like to go swimming in the swimming pool because there was a secure place, but another people like to go swimming by the sea because there have a beautiful scenery and monitor nature so they can enjoy in the sea.

✓ I think some people like to go swimming in the swimming pool because it is a secure place, but other people like to go swimming by the sea because there is beautiful scenery and natural environment so they can enjoy the sea.

介词使用错误，'enjoy in the sea'应为'enjoy the sea'，'by the sea'用法正确。

× Uh, however, in when you swimming in the sea, you can, uh, more enjoy in the nature and have a more chance to see the wild wild.

✓ However, when you swim in the sea, you can enjoy nature more and have more chances to see wildlife.

介词和动词形式错误，'in when you swimming'应为'when you swim'，'enjoy in the nature'应为'enjoy nature'，'have a more chance'应为'have more chances'。