Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Javobingizda grammatik xatolar va noaniq so'zlar mavjud. Masalan, "for them" va "with my furnace" iboralari noto'g'ri ishlatilgan. Javobni aniq va tabiiy qilish uchun, so'zlarni to'g'ri tanlang va qisqaroq, aniq gaplar tuzing.

例: Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it helps me relax and refresh both my body and mind. When I swim with my friends, I feel more energetic and happy. Also, swimming is a healthy activity that improves fitness and is a fun way to spend time together.

提案: Javobingizda gaplar mantiqsiz va grammatik xatolar ko'p. So'zlarni to'g'ri joylashtiring va fikrlaringizni aniq ifoda eting. Oddiy va tushunarli gaplar tuzishga harakat qiling.

例: Learning to swim can be easy if you are determined and physically strong. However, some people find it difficult to learn quickly because they are afraid of water or lack confidence.

提案: Javobingizda gaplar chalkash va ma'nosi noaniq. Aniq va mantiqiy gaplar tuzing, savolga to'g'ridan-to'g'ri javob bering va misollar keltiring.

例: In my country, people usually like to swim in lakes during the summer. Many also enjoy visiting local swimming pools, especially popular ones at summer camps.

提案: Javobingizda gaplar to'liq emas va mantiqiy bog'lanish yo'q. Savolga aniq javob bering, farqlarni tushuntiring va bog'lovchi so'zlardan foydalaning.

例: There are several differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. Firstly, swimming pools are safer and more controlled, which is better for children and older people. On the other hand, swimming in the sea can be more challenging due to waves and currents.

× Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it's a great way to relax and refresh both the body and mind for them.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it's a great way to relax and refresh both the body and mind for me.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to themselves. The correct pronoun should be 'me' to match the subject 'I'.

× Though when I swim with my furnace, it helps me feel more energetic and happy.

✓ Though when I swim with my friends, it helps me feel more energetic and happy.

The word 'furnace' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'friends'. Using the correct noun 'friends' makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× It's been some institution.

✓ It has been some instruction.

The original sentence is unclear and likely a misstatement. 'Institution' is incorrect in this context; 'instruction' fits better to indicate learning. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs clarification.

× If you have the strong, strong minded and strong the body you have, you can learn easily to swim.

✓ If you are strong, strong-minded, and have a strong body, you can learn to swim easily.

The original sentence misuses adjectives and word order. 'Strong minded' should be hyphenated as 'strong-minded'. Also, 'strong the body you have' is incorrect; it should be 'have a strong body'. The adverb 'easily' should come after the verb phrase.

× However in some kind of way, the people cannot learn in easily this too soon because they are they are.

✓ However, in some cases, people cannot learn to swim easily or quickly because of various reasons.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('they are they are'). It lacks clarity and proper structure. The correction provides a clearer and grammatically correct sentence.

× Right. And the local people usually go to the go to the like to swimming to go on the other lake.

✓ Right. Local people usually like to go swimming in the nearby lake.

The original sentence is repetitive and confusing with phrases like 'go to the go to the like to swimming'. The correction simplifies and clarifies the intended meaning.

× And I don't like in some kind of local swimming pools such as in a microarray on swimming pool.

✓ And I don't like some local swimming pools, such as the microarray swimming pool.

The prepositions 'in' and 'on' are incorrectly used. Also, 'microarray on swimming pool' is unclear; it should be 'microarray swimming pool'. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition use and clarity.

× It's a famous it's a popular pool in a summer camp.

✓ It's a famous and popular pool at a summer camp.

The sentence is repetitive and lacks conjunction. Adding 'and' connects the adjectives properly. Also, 'in a summer camp' should be 'at a summer camp' to indicate location.

× OK, there are several kind of differences in a post area.

✓ OK, there are several kinds of differences in this area.

'Several kind' should be 'several kinds' to agree in number. 'Post area' is unclear; likely meant 'this area'. The sentence is corrected for number agreement and clarity.

× And 1st the swimming in the pool, it's a safe people and to people who are older and young people and in swimming is yeah is likely to the strong.

✓ First, swimming in the pool is safe for both older and young people, and swimming there is suitable for strong swimmers.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and is fragmented. 'It's a safe people' is incorrect; it should refer to the activity being safe for people. The correction clarifies meaning and corrects pronoun use.