Swimming— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите прямо и грамматически правильно: используйте настоящее простое для общих фактов (I like swimming). Избегайте лишних слов и исправьте порядок слов. Добавьте связку и конкретную причину страха, чтобы ответ был более естественным и логичным.

例: Yes, I like swimming. I enjoy swimming in pools because I feel safer there, but I am afraid of going into the sea alone because I worry about encountering fish or other marine animals.

提案: Используйте правильные времена и более чёткую структуру: краткое утверждение + причина + заключение. Уберите повторы и слова-заполнители (uh, um). Дайте конкретное объяснение, почему сначала было трудно, а потом стало легче.

例: At first it was difficult for me because I was a child and scared of the water, but now it is easy because I practised regularly and learned basic techniques from a coach.

提案: Говорите более организованно: начните с общего утверждения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных примера с кратким описанием. Избегайте неверных или непонятных названий, если вы не уверены в произношении; уточните и используйте простые описания.

例: People in my country often swim in public pools and at popular spots like Gavai, which has restaurants, attractions and a beach. Many also visit a large lake called Capture Guy for open‑water swimming.

提案: Структурируйте ответ: давайте чёткое сравнение (pool vs sea) с 2–3 конкретными отличиями (безопасность, вода, движение). Используйте правильную лексику (chlorine, currents) и краткие предложения без повторов.

例: Swimming in a pool is safer and the water is treated with chlorine, so it is cleaner and calmer. The sea is more challenging because of waves, currents and marine life, which can feel frightening.

× If I will say about truth, I'm also kinda love to swimming but I'm very scared to be alone in the beach because I'm that person who really scare from fishes and the other animals but in a swimming pool I can swim better than my friends.

✓ To tell the truth, I also kind of love swimming, but I'm very scared to be alone on the beach because I'm the kind of person who is really scared of fish and other animals; however, in a swimming pool I can swim better than my friends.

Pronoun and determiner issues: 'If I will say about truth' is incorrect; use 'To tell the truth'. 'kinda love to swimming' mixes informal 'kinda' with wrong verb pattern; use 'kind of love swimming'. 'alone in the beach' should be 'alone on the beach' (preposition). 'I'm that person who really scare from fishes' has wrong pronoun/verb and preposition: use 'I'm the kind of person who is really scared of fish'. Use singular 'fish' or uncountable; 'the other animals' -> 'other animals'. Also punctuation and sentence structure improved. Suggestions: use correct pronouns ('the kind of person'), correct prepositions ('on' for places like beach, 'of' after 'scared'), and use gerund (swimming) after 'love'.

× Uh, it's, it was difficult for me because I was a child when I'm trying to learn how to swim.

✓ Uh, it was difficult for me because I was a child when I was trying to learn how to swim.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence mixes past ('I was a child') with present continuous ('I'm trying'). Use past progressive 'I was trying' to maintain past timeframe. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same past context when describing past events.

× But right now for me, it's really easy because I can, I can use my body and just swim, uh, into the pool.

✓ But right now, it's really easy for me because I can just use my body and swim in the pool.

Pronoun and preposition issues: 'for me' position adjusted; 'use my body and just swim' reordered for natural flow. 'into the pool' should be 'in the pool' when referring to swimming location. Suggestion: place adverbial phrases naturally and use 'swim in the pool'."

× And also, uh, from other people. I really don't know, but for chill child, it will be easy from.

✓ And also, because of other people I don't really know, but for a calm child it would be easier.

Fragment and sentence structure problems: 'And also, uh, from other people.' is a fragment lacking a verb or clear connection. 'for chill child' uses wrong adjective and article; use 'for a calm child'. 'it will be easy from' is ungrammatical; use 'it would be easier' to match hypothetical or general statement. Suggestion: avoid fragments and supply subjects and verbs; choose correct adjectives and modal tense.

× In my country we have a lots of swimming pools and the one very good place is Gavai where you can go.

✓ In my country we have a lot of swimming pools, and one very good place to go is Gavai.

Plural/quantifier error: 'a lots of' is incorrect; use 'a lot of' or 'lots of'. 'the one very good place' is awkward; use 'one very good place'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of' for quantity and correct article usage.

× There's so many attractions and the restaurants and the they had a beach also.

✓ There are many attractions and restaurants, and they also have a beach.

Adjective/adverb and agreement issues: 'There's so many' is singular contraction with plural noun; use 'There are many'. Remove extra 'the' before 'they'. Use 'they have a beach' rather than 'they had' if describing present features. Suggestion: match 'there is/are' to noun number and avoid redundant articles.

× And in my country we can go to capture guy. It's very Big Lake.

✓ Also, in my country we can go to a place called Capture Guy. It's a very big lake.

Sentence structure and capitalisation: 'capture guy' unclear and needs articles/capitalization if it's a proper name: 'a place called Capture Guy'. 'It's very Big Lake' lacks article and incorrect capitalization; use 'It's a very big lake.' Suggestion: use articles before singular countable nouns and correct capitalization.

× The difference is big because in a swimming pool they are had a chemical things, but in the sea it's really I think that more different and the difficult because I think that I scare you from the fishes and the other animals, but it's heavy for our body.

✓ The difference is significant because swimming pools have chemicals, but the sea is, I think, more different and more difficult because I am afraid of fish and other animals; also, the sea can be harsher on our bodies.

Pronoun, verb and article issues: 'they are had a chemical things' mixes verbs and articles; correct to 'swimming pools have chemicals'. 'it's really I think that more different and the difficult' is ungrammatical and repetitive; use 'the sea is, I think, more different and more difficult'. 'I scare you from the fishes' wrongly uses verb and preposition; use 'I am afraid of fish'. 'the other animals' -> 'other animals'. 'it's heavy for our body' unclear; 'harsher on our bodies' conveys meaning. Suggestion: use correct verb forms ('have'), adjective order, and 'afraid of' + noun; avoid literal translations.