Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Следует избегать грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений, а также использовать связующие слова для логичности. Например, начните с утверждения, затем добавьте детали о длительности дружбы и значении этой дружбы.

例: Yes, I have a close friend whom I have known for 11 years. We became friends in first grade and have kept in touch ever since. Having such a long-lasting friendship is very important to me because it provides support and comfort.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и логичным, избегать повторов и ошибок. Используйте связующие слова для перечисления действий и конкретизируйте виды совместных занятий.

例: Usually, we spend time together doing activities like watching films, drinking coffee, and reading. We share many similar hobbies, which makes our time together enjoyable and meaningful.

提案: Ответ содержит много ошибок и неясностей. Следует использовать правильную грамматику и структуру предложения, а также уточнять места встреч с использованием связующих слов.

例: We often meet at school and at coffee shops because we enjoy drinking coffee together. Sometimes, we also go shopping together.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для объяснения причин редких встреч и уточните ситуацию.

例: Actually, we used to meet often two years ago, but now we are preparing for exams, so we don't meet as much as before.

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и грамматически правильным. Следует избегать непонятных выражений и использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: Friends are very important to me because they are like a second family. We always support and help each other. My best friend shares similar hobbies, and I can talk to her when I have problems.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для объяснения причин и избегайте повторов.

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because it is nice to have many people who support your views and share similar hobbies. It feels like having a second family.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Следует чётко объяснить причины приглашения друзей домой, используя связующие слова.

例: Yes, I would invite my friends to my home because I prefer private places where we can talk face to face. We can watch films together, bring our own food, and pause the movie to discuss it.

× Her name is just mean that we know each other for 11 years.

✓ Her name is [Name], and it means that we have known each other for 11 years.

The original sentence is unclear and lacks proper structure. It seems the student tried to say the friend's name and the duration of their acquaintance in one sentence without proper connectors. The correction separates the ideas and uses the present perfect tense 'have known' to indicate the duration up to now.

× We become friends in first class and we always first each other at I keep touch with him with her right now and it's really it's really good for us for me to have a good friend.

✓ We became friends in first grade and we always kept in touch. I keep in touch with her right now and it's really good for me to have a good friend.

The verb 'become' should be in past tense 'became' because the action happened in the past. 'First class' is better expressed as 'first grade'. The phrase 'we always first each other' is unclear and likely meant 'we always kept in touch'. The sentence is fragmented and needs to be split for clarity.

× We visit coffee which which film together and drink coffee together, read together and we have a lot of similar hobbies.

✓ We watch films together and drink coffee together, read together, and we have a lot of similar hobbies.

The phrase 'visit coffee which which film together' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'watch films together' and 'drink coffee together'. The preposition 'visit' is not used with 'coffee' or 'film' in this context.

× I am a studio right now so we are meet each other at school and at Caffey because we love to drink coffee together to shopping.

✓ I am a student right now, so we meet each other at school and at cafes because we love to drink coffee together and go shopping.

'Studio' should be 'student'. 'Are meet' is incorrect; it should be 'meet'. 'Caffey' is a misspelling of 'cafes'. The phrase 'to shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping'. Prepositions and verb forms are corrected for proper usage.

× Actually, to be honest, we have to maintain each other often two years ago.

✓ Actually, to be honest, we maintained contact often two years ago.

The phrase 'have to maintain each other' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'maintained contact'. The past tense 'maintained' is used because the time reference is 'two years ago'.

× So right now we we preparing to pass the exam.

✓ So right now we are preparing to pass the exam.

The verb phrase 'we we preparing' is missing the auxiliary verb 'are'. The present continuous tense requires 'are' + verb-ing to indicate an ongoing action.

× My friends like the second family for me and we're always support each other.

✓ My friends are like a second family to me and we always support each other.

The phrase 'like the second family for me' should be 'are like a second family to me'. The verb 'support' needs to be in base form after 'we always'. The preposition 'to' is used to indicate relationship.

× She. Is my best friend and I can talk with her when I'm investigation.

✓ She is my best friend and I can talk with her when I'm investigating.

The phrase 'when I'm investigation' is incorrect; it should be 'when I'm investigating' using the present participle form to indicate ongoing action.

× I prefer spent time with a group of friends because it's really good when you have a lot of people who can support your view of life, who can only hope can always support you to being friends and when a lot of people have simulate similarity hobbies like you and when a lot of people like your second family.

✓ I prefer spending time with a group of friends because it's really good when you have a lot of people who can support your view of life, who can always support you as friends, and when a lot of people have similar hobbies like you and feel like your second family.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the gerund 'spending' not the past tense 'spent'. The sentence is long and contains unclear phrases like 'only hope can always support you to being friends' which is corrected to 'can always support you as friends'. 'Simulate similarity hobbies' is corrected to 'similar hobbies'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I would invite my friends to my home because I prefer private places when it snows that no easy when you can talk face to face and watching film together in private places when you can bring your food when we can just stop the movie and talk with talk about movie and.

✓ I would invite my friends to my home because I prefer private places when it snows. It's easier to talk face to face and watch films together in private places where you can bring your own food and we can pause the movie to talk about it.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect prepositions and verb forms. 'When it snows that no easy' is unclear and corrected to 'when it snows. It's easier'. 'Watching film' is corrected to 'watch films'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct preposition use.