Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and add a little more detail to enrich your answer.

例: I don't have any close friends at the moment, but I had one good friend when I was a child. We used to play together and share many happy memories.

提案: Make your sentences clearer and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' properly to connect ideas. Be specific about activities you did with friends.

例: When I had friends, we usually chatted a lot and had fun together. We also liked going to the cinema to watch new movies.

提案: Avoid filler sounds like 'UH' and improve grammar, for example, use 'contacted' correctly. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details.

例: I met my best friend at school, and we spent almost 12 years together. However, after graduate school, we lost contact and haven't spoken since.

提案: Try to avoid repeating phrases and use linking words like 'because' and 'but' correctly. Also, express your feelings clearly and keep your answer concise.

例: I don't often go out with friends because I don't have many at the moment. Sometimes it feels boring to be alone, but I am trying to make new friends.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words. Make your opinion clear with a topic sentence and support it with reasons or examples.

例: Friends are not very important to me. In the past, I didn't have many friends because I prefer spending time alone.

提案: Good use of personal opinion. To improve, try to use linking words like 'because' more smoothly and add a little more detail to explain your feelings.

例: As an introvert, I prefer spending time with one friend because in groups I often feel lost and uncomfortable.

提案: Clarify your sentences to avoid confusion, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I would invite only one or two friends to my home because it feels safe and comfortable, and we can do things that are difficult outside.

× Nowadays I don't uh, have friends.

✓ Nowadays I don't have any friends.

The sentence lacks a quantifier before 'friends' when negating. Adding 'any' clarifies the plural noun in negative context, which is grammatically correct.

× Uh, I had only 1 friend when I was umm, child.

✓ Uh, I had only one friend when I was a child.

The noun 'child' requires an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct. Also, '1' should be written as 'one' in formal speech.

× When I had friends, we usually chatted with each other and also we had fun and talking a lot.

✓ When I had friends, we usually chatted with each other, had fun, and talked a lot.

The verb 'talking' is incorrectly used after 'and' without auxiliary verb. It should be in past tense 'talked' to match the previous verbs in the sentence.

× Also we like to go to the cinema also working.

✓ Also, we liked to go to the cinema and work.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'also' twice and 'working' without proper structure. 'Also' should be used once, and 'working' should be changed to 'work' to parallel 'go'.

× I met my best friend at school.

✓ I met my best friend at school.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× But after a Graduate School we stopped contacted UH with each other.

✓ But after graduate school, we stopped contacting each other.

The phrase 'stopped contacted with each other' is incorrect. The verb 'stop' should be followed by gerund 'contacting' and 'with' is unnecessary here.

× No, I don't often go out with my friends because I don't have a friend that's that's why I don't go out with my friends and somehow it is boring to stay a lot of time with myself.

✓ No, I don't often go out with my friends because I don't have any friends; that's why I don't go out with them, and somehow it is boring to spend a lot of time by myself.

The sentence has inconsistency between singular 'a friend' and plural 'friends'. Also, 'stay a lot of time with myself' is awkward; 'spend a lot of time by myself' is correct.

× Friends are not important for me and I was not important in past.

✓ Friends are not important to me, and they were not important in the past.

The phrase 'I was not important in past' is incorrect; it should refer to 'friends' as the subject and use 'were' for plural. Also, 'important for me' should be 'important to me'.

× If it's it's it was important for me.

✓ If it were important to me,

The sentence is incomplete and has repeated words. The correct conditional form is 'If it were important to me,' using subjunctive mood for unreal condition.

× I would would have friends but I don't.

✓ I would have friends, but I don't.

The word 'would' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× As an introvert, I prefer to spend time with the one friend because when I am in a group of people and a group of friends, I feel somehow lost and it's sad.

✓ As an introvert, I prefer to spend time with one friend because when I am in a group of people or a group of friends, I feel somehow lost and it's sad.

The article 'the' before 'one friend' is unnecessary here. Also, 'and' should be 'or' to indicate either group causes the feeling.

× I would invite friends to my home, but not friends.

✓ I would invite friends to my home, but not many friends.

The phrase 'but not friends' is contradictory. Adding 'many' clarifies the meaning that only a few friends would be invited.

× I would invite only one or two friends because when you are at home you feel somehow safe and you can do other stuff you can't do.

✓ I would invite only one or two friends because when you are at home, you feel somehow safe and can do things you can't do elsewhere.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'other stuff you can't do' is vague. Changing to 'things you can't do elsewhere' improves clarity and correctness.