Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases such as 'norms from our childhood' and 'flu thick and thin'. Try to use clearer expressions and correct grammar to make your answer more natural and effective. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

例: Yes, I have a good friend whom I've known since childhood. We grew up in the same community and attended the same school. We have supported each other through thick and thin, sharing many life experiences. Thanks to WeChat, we still keep in touch regularly.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting sentence structures and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, use 'because' properly and avoid abrupt sentence starts. Also, try to be more specific about activities you do with friends.

例: I usually hang out with my friends at cafes or restaurants because they are convenient and have a relaxing atmosphere. We enjoy chatting over coffee and meals, which gives us a great chance to relax and unwind. Moreover, there are many cafes nearby, so it's easy for us to find a nice spot.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'checks with each other' and 'so does we can enjoy'. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: I usually meet my friends at cafes because they are comfortable and relaxing places where we can chat freely. Sometimes, we meet at restaurants to enjoy a meal together, and afterwards, we often go for a walk.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and focus on directly answering the question.

例: Not often, because I prefer spending time alone at home. I enjoy pursuing my hobbies like reading books or watching videos on my computer during my free time.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has unclear phrases like 'hard disk lines reading'. Try to complete your thoughts and use clearer vocabulary. Also, balance your ideas about friendship and alone time more smoothly with linking words.

例: Friends are quite important to me because I value friendship. However, I also cherish my alone time to do activities like reading, singing, or watching movies at home. I rely on friends mainly for social activities and support.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and has some grammatical errors. Try to finish your sentences and use correct verb forms. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

例: I prefer spending time with one friend because it allows us to have deeper and more meaningful conversations. Also, it's easier to coordinate plans and make decisions when there are fewer people involved. When I meet one friend, we can focus on each other without distractions.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by combining sentences and correcting grammar. Avoid starting sentences with 'Because' and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: No, I don't usually invite friends to my house because it is quite small and not ideal for hosting guests. Instead, we prefer to meet at cafes or restaurants where we can enjoy coffee or meals. We also like to do various activities outside in the park.

× Yes, I have my good friend.

✓ Yes, I have a good friend.

The phrase 'my good friend' is incorrect here because it implies possession without an article. The correct form is 'a good friend' to indicate one friend among others. Use the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns when mentioning them for the first time.

× Since we have norms from our childhood, we grew in the same community and attended the same school.

✓ Since we have known each other since our childhood, we grew up in the same community and attended the same school.

The phrase 'have norms from our childhood' is incorrect; it should be 'have known each other since our childhood' to express a long-term acquaintance. Also, 'grew in the same community' should be 'grew up in the same community' because 'grow up' is the correct phrasal verb for maturing in a place.

× We have supported with each other along the way.

✓ We have supported each other along the way.

The verb 'support' does not require the preposition 'with' when used with 'each other'. The correct form is 'support each other'.

× We share our life experiences and flu thick and thin.

✓ We share our life experiences through thick and thin.

The phrase 'flu thick and thin' is incorrect. The correct idiom is 'through thick and thin', meaning in good times and bad. Also, 'flu' is a typo for 'through'.

× Now, thanks to WeChat, we still can keep in touch with each other.

✓ Now, thanks to WeChat, we can still keep in touch with each other.

The modal verb 'can' should be followed by the base verb 'keep'. The adverb 'still' is better placed after 'can' for natural word order: 'can still keep'.

× Usually hang out with my friends as cafes or restaurants because it's very convenient and the atmosphere there is very relaxing.

✓ I usually hang out with my friends at cafes or restaurants because it's very convenient and the atmosphere there is very relaxing.

The original sentence lacks a subject and uses 'as' incorrectly. The correct preposition for places is 'at'. Also, the sentence needs a subject 'I' to be complete.

× On the other hand, there were so many cafes nearby, it's easy for us to find a nice spot.

✓ On the other hand, there are so many cafes nearby, so it's easy for us to find a nice spot.

The tense should be present 'are' to match the context. Also, 'so' is needed to connect the two clauses properly.

× Cafes is a very nice and comfortable place, very relaxing there and so that we can checks with each other freely.

✓ Cafes are very nice and comfortable places, very relaxing there so that we can check with each other freely.

'Cafes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'checks' should be 'check' to agree with the plural subject. The phrase 'and so that' is redundant; 'so that' alone suffices.

× We sometimes it is meets at restaurants so does we can enjoy catching up over a meal and after that we always go for a visit.

✓ Sometimes we meet at restaurants so that we can enjoy catching up over a meal, and after that, we always go for a visit.

The original sentence has unnecessary pronouns and incorrect verb forms. 'It is meets' is incorrect; it should be 'we meet'. 'Does we can' is incorrect; it should be 'so that we can'. Commas are added for clarity.

× Knows as I don't because I prefer some along time so that I can stay at home and spend some time with myself to choose my pursuit such as to do my hobbies such as reading books or watching videos on my computer and I was also like some.

✓ No, I don't because I prefer some alone time so that I can stay at home and spend time by myself pursuing my hobbies such as reading books or watching videos on my computer, and I also like that.

'Knows as' is incorrect; it should be 'No'. 'Along time' should be 'alone time'. 'Spend some time with myself' is better as 'spend time by myself'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Friends are somewhat important for me because I value friendship, but I also cherish my alone time so that I can spend some time with myself to do my hard disk lines reading or singing or watching movies at home.

✓ Friends are somewhat important to me because I value friendship, but I also cherish my alone time so that I can spend time by myself doing hobbies like reading, singing, or watching movies at home.

'Important for me' should be 'important to me'. 'Spend some time with myself' is better as 'spend time by myself'. 'Hard disk lines reading' is unclear and replaced with 'doing hobbies like reading' for clarity.

× I also rely on friends for social activities but.

✓ I also rely on friends for social activities.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'but' without completing the thought. Removing 'but' completes the sentence properly.

× I prefer meeting one friend because it's it would allow us to have a deeper and meaningful conversation.

✓ I prefer meeting one friend because it would allow us to have a deeper and more meaningful conversation.

'It's it would' is redundant; only 'it would' is needed. Also, 'meaningful' should be preceded by 'more' to compare depth of conversation.

× On the other hand, it's easier to coordinate, plan, and make decisions when they're when there are fewer people involved.

✓ On the other hand, it's easier to coordinate, plan, and make decisions when there are fewer people involved.

The phrase 'when they're when' is redundant and incorrect. Removing 'they're when' corrects the sentence.

× When I meet one friends, we can focus on each other without distractions, which can make.

✓ When I meet one friend, we can focus on each other without distractions, which is nice.

'One friends' is incorrect; 'friend' should be singular. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'which is nice' completes the thought.

× No, I don't want to invite friends to my house.

✓ No, I don't want to invite friends to my house.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× Because my house is so small, it's not as ideal place to host guests.

✓ Because my house is so small, it's not an ideal place to host guests.

The phrase 'not as ideal place' is incorrect; it should be 'not an ideal place' using the indefinite article 'an' before a vowel sound.

× On the other hand, we would like to go out to meet us with each other at cafe or restaurant so that we can enjoy some coffee or meals as we can also have a wide range of activities outside in the park.

✓ On the other hand, we would like to go out to meet each other at a cafe or restaurant so that we can enjoy some coffee or meals, and we can also have a wide range of activities outside in the park.

The phrase 'meet us with each other' is incorrect; it should be 'meet each other'. 'Cafe' needs the article 'a'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct conjunction use.