Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific details about your friendship. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases.

例: Yes, I have a close friend whom I have known since 2019. We keep in touch regularly and share many interests, which makes our friendship very strong.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific activities you do with your friends in a natural way.

例: Usually, my friends and I go for walks in the park or visit coffee shops. We enjoy spending time together because it is both fun and relaxing.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks structure. Respond directly by stating where you meet your friends and provide specific details to clarify.

例: I often meet my friend Christina at school since we are in the same class. Sometimes, I also meet other friends after my English course.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains many filler words. Try to give a concise response with clear linking words and specific activities.

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends. We usually walk in the park, visit cafes, or go shopping together. Sometimes, we drive to different places for fun.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use clear and correct language to explain why friends are important, with specific reasons.

例: Friends are very important to me because they support me and make me feel happy and comfortable in my life.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Clearly state your preference and explain your reasons using linking words.

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because it is more fun and lively. However, sometimes I enjoy one-on-one time if I want a quiet conversation.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Provide a direct response and explain why you invite certain friends to your home with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I invite one close friend to my home because she is very important to me and we have a strong bond.

提案: Your answer is confusing and does not address the question properly. Clearly state if there is a difference and provide specific examples.

例: There is not much difference between where I meet my friends now and in the past. We usually meet at the same places, like parks or cafes.

提案: Your answer is too brief and lacks detail. Explain clearly why some places are suitable for meetings and give examples to support your point.

例: Some places are suitable for meetings because they provide a quiet and professional environment, such as offices for business meetings. Others, like noisy cafes, may not be appropriate.

× Yes, I have one friend I have now for a long time.

✓ Yes, I have one friend whom I have known for a long time.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I have now for a long time' which is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'whom I have known for a long time' to indicate a friend known over a period. This corrects the singular/plural and verb usage.

× We communicate since 2019 years and so we.

✓ We have been communicating since 2019.

The phrase 'We communicate since 2019 years' is incorrect because 'communicate' should be in present perfect continuous tense to indicate an action started in the past and continuing now. Also, 'since 2019 years' is incorrect; 'since 2019' is correct.

× I love you.

✓ I love them.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here as the student is talking about friends, so 'them' is appropriate.

× I wish my friends usually umm, drive a car and some go to the coffee or walk in the park.

✓ My friends usually drive cars, and some go to coffee shops or walk in the park.

The modal verb 'wish' is incorrectly used here. The sentence should describe habitual actions using simple present tense without 'wish'. Also, 'go to the coffee' is incorrect; it should be 'go to coffee shops' or 'go for coffee'.

× Also uh, we spend time uh, funny and uh, comfortable.

✓ Also, we spend time having fun and feeling comfortable.

'Funny' is an adjective meaning 'causing laughter' and is incorrectly used to describe spending time. The correct expression is 'having fun'. 'Comfortable' is an adjective and should be used with 'feeling' to describe the experience.

× I with my friends, uh, Christina, umm, meets uh, in the school uh, we study in one grade and some umm, boyfriend uh, I meet some after school after my English course.

✓ I meet my friend Christina at school; we study in the same grade. I also meet some boyfriends after school, after my English course.

The verb 'meets' does not agree with the subject 'I'. It should be 'I meet'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs to be split for clarity.

× I often go out with my friends, umm, every day we are walk in the park and uh, go to the cafe, uh, go to the shop.

✓ I often go out with my friends; every day we walk in the park, go to the cafe, and go to the shop.

The phrase 'we are walk' is incorrect; the correct form is simple present 'we walk' for habitual actions.

× Also we drive a car, uh, because, uh, my friends, uh, have.

✓ Also, we drive cars because my friends have them.

'Drive a car' is singular, but referring to multiple friends, plural 'cars' is appropriate. Also, 'have' needs an object 'them' to be complete.

× My friends are very important to me because they are proud in my life and I feel with the more comfortable and happiness.

✓ My friends are very important to me because they are proud in my life, and I feel more comfortable and happy with them.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'proud'; it should be 'proud of'. Also, 'feel with the more comfortable and happiness' is ungrammatical; it should be 'feel more comfortable and happy with them'.

× If I said I prefer to spend time with one friend, umm, if I funny and some let me call him uh, I prefer spend time with a group of friends.

✓ If I said I prefer to spend time with one friend when I am having fun and want to call him, I prefer to spend time with a group of friends.

The pronoun usage and sentence structure are unclear. 'If I funny' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am having fun'. Also, 'prefer spend' needs 'to' after 'prefer'.

× I invite on my one friends to my home because she is important more in my life and I now I hear bigger than they.

✓ I invite one of my friends to my home because she is very important in my life, and I now feel closer to her than to others.

'On my one friends' is incorrect; it should be 'one of my friends'. 'Important more' should be 'very important'. The phrase 'I now I hear bigger than they' is unclear and corrected to 'I now feel closer to her than to others'.

× Notes or don't difference between where I meet friends now and where you, umm, to meet them in the past because, umm, I, we drive a car and, uh, spend time finding.

✓ There is no difference between where I meet friends now and where I used to meet them in the past because we drive cars and spend time together.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct verb forms.

× Because if it's a business meeting, uh, set needs more serious place.

✓ Because if it's a business meeting, it needs a more serious place.

The pronoun 'set' is incorrect; it should be 'it'. Also, 'more serious place' needs the article 'a' before it.