Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. "She is very open minded personality" yerine "She has a very open-minded personality" demek daha doğru olur. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha kısa ve net tutarak, gereksiz tekrarları önleyin. Örneğin, "we can hang out with a concert, in concerts and parties" ifadesi yerine "we often hang out at concerts and parties" diyebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I have a best friend from my master's degree. She has a very open-minded personality and is a people person. We often hang out at concerts and parties, and she easily connects with others.

提案: Cümlenizi daha açık ve tutarlı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, zaman ifadelerini doğru kullanarak anlatımınızı güçlendirin. Örneğin, "last last month" yerine "last month" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlenizi tamamlayarak anlamı netleştirin.

例: We like to work out at the gym, especially following a powerlifting schedule. For example, last month we went to the gym every single day, which was very special for us.

提案: Daha akıcı ve doğal bir konuşma için gereksiz duraklamalardan kaçının. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha net ve kısa tutarak anlatımınızı güçlendirin. Örneğin, "in her space" ifadesi yerine "at her place" demek daha yaygındır.

例: We usually hang out at her place because she has a huge, cozy, and clean terrace. It's important to me, and we often watch films and enjoy funny moments together.

提案: Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları ve duraklamaları azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, zaman kiplerini doğru kullanarak cümlenizi tamamlayın. Örneğin, "I like to being outside" yerine "I like being outside" demelisiniz.

例: If I have the chance, I prefer to go out with my best friends because I have a strict schedule. I enjoy being outside, chatting, and sharing moments with them.

提案: Cümlenizi daha net ve tamamlanmış hale getirmek için son cümlenizi tamamlayın. Ayrıca, "peer" kelimesi yerine "siblings" veya "brothers or sisters" kullanmak daha uygun olur. Cümlelerinizi daha akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanın.

例: Friends and family are very important parts of my life. Since I don't have any siblings, I rely on my friends to share my emotions and feelings, which is very meaningful to me.

提案: Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve doğal yapmak için tekrarları ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin. "General" yerine "Generally" kullanın ve "different perspectives" ifadesini çoğul yapın. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha net bağlaçlarla bağlayın.

例: Generally, I prefer spending time with just one friend because my friends have different perspectives in life. I think they cannot connect with each other or share special moments and difficulties.

提案: Cümlenizdeki tekrarları ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin. "Prepare a dishes dish" yerine "prepare dishes" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanın.

例: Yes, I might invite friends to my home because I live alone. I enjoy preparing dishes with them and watching movies, especially romantic ones. I like this connection.

提案: Cümleniz karışık ve bazı kelimeler yanlış kullanılmış. Daha net ve doğru bir anlatım için cümlenizi basitleştirin ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin. Örneğin, "bef before" yerine "before" ve "in outside" yerine "outside" kullanın.

例: I can't say there is a big difference. Before my master's degree, I lived in Izmir and usually met my friends outside because I lived with my family.

提案: Cevabınız çok belirsiz ve dolgu kelimelerle dolu. Daha net ve doğrudan cevap vermeye çalışın. Örneğin, uygun yerlerin insanların ruh haline ve günün durumuna bağlı olduğunu belirtebilirsiniz.

例: I think some places are suitable because they match people's mood and the situation of the day. For example, a quiet café is good when I want to relax, but a lively park is better for socializing.

× Yes, I have my best friends from my master's degree.

✓ Yes, I have my best friend from my master's degree.

The phrase 'best friends' should be singular 'best friend' because the student refers to one specific person later as 'she'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× She is very open minded personality and she's a people person because we can hang out with a concert, in concerts and parties and she can connect.

✓ She has a very open-minded personality and she's a people person because we can hang out at concerts and parties and she can connect.

The phrase 'open minded personality' needs the adjective 'open-minded' to describe 'personality' correctly. Also, 'hang out with a concert' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at concerts'. This is an adjective and preposition usage issue.

× We like to workout at the gym and we like a powerlifting schedules.

✓ We like to work out at the gym and we like powerlifting schedules.

The verb 'workout' should be two words 'work out' when used as a verb. Also, 'a powerlifting schedules' is incorrect because 'schedules' is plural and should not have 'a'. This is a preposition and singular/plural issue.

× We try to follow this schedule. For example, last last month we went to we went every single day in this month.

✓ We try to follow this schedule. For example, last month we went every single day this month.

The phrase 'last last month' is redundant and should be 'last month'. Also, 'we went to we went every single day in this month' is confusing and should be 'we went every single day this month'. This is a sentence structure and singular/plural issue.

× We generally hang out, uh, in her, uh, space, uh, because she has a huge terrace and it's very cozy and, uh, clean area.

✓ We generally hang out in her space because she has a huge terrace and it's a very cozy and clean area.

The phrase 'in her space' is correct but the commas are unnecessary. Also, 'it's very cozy and, uh, clean area' needs an article 'a' before 'very cozy'. This is an article and preposition usage issue.

× It's very important for me and we can watch a film and other, uh, funny moments.

✓ It's very important to me and we can watch films and have other funny moments.

The phrase 'important for me' should be 'important to me'. Also, 'watch a film and other funny moments' is awkward; better to say 'watch films and have other funny moments'. This is a preposition and sentence structure issue.

× Right. If I had a chance, umm, I prefer to uh, go out with my best friends because I have a strict schedule, uh, but I like to being outside and with my friends, uh, chat, chatting and you know, uh, share.

✓ Right. If I had a chance, I would prefer to go out with my best friends because I have a strict schedule, but I like being outside and chatting with my friends and, you know, sharing.

The conditional sentence requires 'would prefer' instead of 'prefer'. Also, 'like to being' is incorrect; it should be 'like being'. The verbs 'chat, chatting and share' should be in parallel gerund form. This is a modal verb and verb form usage issue.

× It's very important part of my life, my friends and my families.

✓ They are very important parts of my life: my friends and my family.

'It's' refers to singular but 'friends and families' are plural. Also, 'families' should be 'family' in this context. This is a singular and plural issue.

× It's important because I don't have a peer and I don't have a brother and a sister, you know?

✓ It's important because I don't have any peers and I don't have a brother or a sister, you know?

'A peer' should be plural 'any peers' to indicate no friends of similar age. Also, 'and' should be 'or' when referring to siblings. This is a pronoun and conjunction usage issue.

× General, I prefer only one because my friends have a different perspectives in life.

✓ Generally, I prefer only one because my friends have different perspectives in life.

'General' should be 'Generally' as an adverb. 'A different perspectives' is incorrect; 'different perspectives' is correct without 'a'. This is an adverb and singular/plural issue.

× I think they they cannot connect with each other, they can not share some special moments and some difficulties because of this.

✓ I think they cannot connect with each other; they cannot share some special moments and difficulties because of this.

Repeated 'they' is a mistake. Also, 'can not' is better written as 'cannot'. This is a pronoun and spelling issue.

× Yes, I might because I live live alone and I want to prepare a dishes dish with my friends and I like watching movies, especially romantic movies with my friends.

✓ Yes, I might because I live alone and I want to prepare dishes with my friends and I like watching movies, especially romantic movies with my friends.

'A dishes dish' is incorrect; it should be 'dishes' without 'a'. Also, repeated 'live' is a typo. This is a singular/plural and typo issue.

× I can't say I lived in Izmir bef before my master's degree and I I met my friends in outside generally because I lived my I lived with my family.

✓ I can't say. I lived in Izmir before my master's degree and I generally met my friends outside because I lived with my family.

'bef before' is a typo and should be 'before'. 'I I' is repeated. 'in outside' is incorrect; should be 'outside'. 'I lived my I lived' is a repetition error. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue.