Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较完整，但部分表达不够自然，如“we still have kept in touch very frequently”应改为“we still keep in touch frequently”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I have a close friend nicknamed Mushroom. She was my classmate and roommate in senior high school. We've been friends for over 10 years and still keep in frequent contact, maintaining a strong bond.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但句子结构重复，且最后一句不完整。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，并补充完整句子。

例: I usually chat with my friends on social media apps like WeChat and TikTok. We share our daily lives and exchange ideas and perspectives. Sometimes, we also share interesting videos and articles that we find engaging.

提案: 回答基本清晰，但句子较长且有重复。建议使用连接词优化句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

例: During senior high school, we met every day because she was my classmate and roommate. However, after graduation, we had less time to meet, so we usually arranged to go out for meals together.

提案: 回答内容具体且表达较好，但“purchase something interesting”用词稍显生硬。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意句子连贯。

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends in Shenzhen. On our days off, we usually visit a local shopping mall to enjoy a nice dinner or shop for interesting items. These activities help me relax and recharge.

提案: 表达有些重复且语法错误，如“a more informed people”应为“a more informed person”。建议简化句子，避免语法错误，并使用更自然的表达。

例: Friends are very important in daily life. When I feel down, I share my feelings with them, which helps me feel better. Moreover, they provide different information that helps me make wiser decisions.

提案: 回答思路清晰，但“Spending time with one friend separately is far easier than a group”表达不够自然。建议调整句子结构，使表达更流畅。

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends. Although it's easier to spend time with one friend, being in a group allows us to do various activities like playing games and sports, which strengthens our relationships and makes me feel connected.

提案: 句子较长且结构复杂，部分表达不够自然，如“have a long time talk”。建议拆分句子，使用更自然的表达。

例: Yes, sometimes I invite friends to my home to enjoy delicious food made by my parents. We also play computer games in my room and have long conversations. These activities help strengthen our relationships and make me feel connected.

提案: 回答内容具体且表达较好，但“have a face to face meeting”可改为“meet face to face”更自然。建议注意固定搭配的使用。

例: Yes, there is a big difference. When I was young, I could meet my friends almost every day in the community or at school because we lived close to each other. But now, since we live in different cities, we don't have many chances to meet face to face, which is a pity.

提案: 回答内容合理，但表达有些重复且不够简洁。建议使用连接词优化句子结构，避免重复。

例: Some places, like shopping malls and coffee shops, are suitable for meeting because we can do various activities and strengthen our relationships. However, places like libraries are not suitable since they require a quiet environment and speaking loudly is not allowed.

× but now we still have kept in touch very frequently and we have a tight bond.

✓ but now we still keep in touch very frequently and we have a tight bond.

这里使用了现在完成时态的错误形式“have kept”，应使用一般现在时“keep”，因为描述的是现在持续的状态。

× I usually chat with my friends on the social media and some other applications like WeChat and Tiktok.

✓ I usually chat with my friends on social media and some other applications like WeChat and TikTok.

“the social media”中的定冠词“the”不应使用，社交媒体作为不可数名词不加冠词。

× Sometimes we will also share some interesting videos and articles which we think.

✓ Sometimes we will also share some interesting videos and articles that we like.

原句“which we think”结构不完整，缺少宾语，改为“that we like”更符合表达习惯。

× During my Senior High School years, we met every day since she was my classmate as well as my roommate.

✓ During my Senior High School years, we met every day because she was my classmate as well as my roommate.

“since”用于表示从过去某时到现在的持续，句中应使用“because”表示原因。

× But after our graduation from Senior High School, we didn't have enough time to meet each other so we usually made an appointment with each other to go out to eat.

✓ But after our graduation from Senior High School, we didn't have enough time to meet each other so we usually made appointments with each other to go out to eat.

“made an appointment”应改为复数“made appointments”，因为通常多次约会。

× I usually go out with my friends in Shenzhen.

✓ I usually go out with my friends in Shenzhen.

此句无错误，保持原句。

× I usually go to a local shopping mall to have a nice dinner or purchase something interesting with my roommates if we have a day off.

✓ I usually go to a local shopping mall to have a nice dinner or purchase something interesting with my roommates if we have a day off.

此句无错误，保持原句。

× I think it is relaxing and comfortable for me to do such activities, which help me recharge my energy during the day.

✓ I think it is relaxing and comfortable for me to do such activities, which helps me recharge my energy during the day.

关系代词“which”指代单数“activities”，应使用单数动词“helps”。

× When we have a bad emotion, we can share our feelings with my friends so that they can help me relieve my pain.

✓ When we have a bad emotion, we can share our feelings with our friends so that they can help us relieve our pain.

主语是“we”，代词应保持一致，使用“our friends”、“us”和“our pain”。

× What's more, friends will also share different information so that I can be a more informed people and make wise decisions.

✓ What's more, friends will also share different information so that I can be a more informed person and make wise decisions.

“people”是复数，前面用“a more informed”表示单数，应改为“person”。

× Spending time with one friend separately is far easier than a group.

✓ Spending time with one friend separately is far easier than with a group.

比较结构中缺少介词“with”，应补充完整。

× If we are in a group, we can do various activities like playing group games and doing sports, which can help to enhance our relationship and make me feel connected.

✓ If we are in a group, we can do various activities like playing group games and doing sports, which can help to enhance our relationships and make me feel connected.

“relationship”应为复数“relationships”，因为涉及多个人之间的关系。

× Yes, sometimes I will invite some friends to my home to have some delicious food which is made by my parents and I will also invite my friends to visit my bedroom to play computer games as well as have a long time talk.

✓ Yes, sometimes I will invite some friends to my home to have some delicious food which is made by my parents and I will also invite my friends to visit my bedroom to play computer games as well as have a long talk.

“have a long time talk”表达不正确，应改为“have a long talk”。

× I think the activity help enhance our relationship and make me feel I'm connected.

✓ I think the activity helps enhance our relationship and makes me feel connected.

主语“activity”是单数，动词应加-s；“make me feel I'm connected”表达不自然，改为“makes me feel connected”。

× Yes, there is a big difference.

✓ Yes, there is a big difference.

此句无错误，保持原句。

× When I was young I could meet my friends almost every day in the community or in the school since we lived so near to each other.

✓ When I was young I could meet my friends almost every day in the community or at school since we lived so near to each other.

“in the school”应改为“at school”，表示在学校。

× But nowadays we live in different cities so we don't have so many chances to have a face to face meeting, which is a pity.

✓ But nowadays we live in different cities so we don't have so many chances to have face-to-face meetings, which is a pity.

“a face to face meeting”应为复数“face-to-face meetings”，且“face-to-face”需连字符。

× Yes, some places are suitable for meeting like shopping mall and a coffee shop where we can do various activities and strengthen our relationship.

✓ Yes, some places are suitable for meeting like shopping malls and coffee shops where we can do various activities and strengthen our relationships.

“shopping mall”和“coffee shop”应使用复数形式，且“relationship”应为复数。

× But some other places like libraries are not suitable because it requires comfortable and quiet environment and we are not allowed to speak out loud in that public places.

✓ But some other places like libraries are not suitable because they require a comfortable and quiet environment and we are not allowed to speak out loud in those public places.

主语“libraries”为复数，谓语动词应为“require”；“environment”前需加冠词“a”；“that public places”应为“those public places”。