Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I do have" and "really good friends till that" which is unclear. Try to use a simple, direct sentence and add a little detail to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I have a friend I've known since kindergarten, and we've remained close ever since.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and somewhat unclear. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "usually" and "enjoy" multiple times. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific activities you do together.

例: I usually hang out with my childhood friend who attends college with me. We enjoy going to cafes or watching movies together.

提案: Your answer is a bit fragmented and unclear. Try to form complete sentences and explain why the railway station is your meeting point. Use linking words for coherence.

例: We often meet at the railway station because it's a convenient spot for us since we both travel to college from there.

提案: Your answer conveys your feelings well but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Simplify your sentences and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends because spending time with them helps me relax and feel better when I'm stressed.

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but could be more organized and concise. Avoid fragmented sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Friends are an integral part of my life because we've shared many joyful and difficult moments together, and I trust them with my secrets.

提案: Your answer is good but has some repetition and filler words. Try to speak more fluently and avoid repeating phrases like "being with" and "that that."

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because it creates a lively atmosphere where we can share different opinions and enjoy ourselves.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains repetition and hesitations. Try to avoid repeating words and use more precise language to express your ideas.

例: Yes, I invite my friends to my home so they can meet my family, and this helps build a close, family-like relationship between them.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid repeating phrases. Provide specific examples of how meeting places or times have changed.

例: Yes, now we meet less often because everyone is busy with work or studies, unlike before when we met more frequently at school or parks.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is a bit disorganized and contains some errors. Try to organize your answer clearly and use correct vocabulary, avoiding repetition.

例: Some places are suitable for meetings because their atmosphere fits the purpose. For instance, a coffee shop is good for hanging out, while a conference hall is better for business meetings.

× We have been friends since kindergarten and we are really good friends till that.

✓ We have been friends since kindergarten and we have been really good friends since then.

The phrase 'till that' is incorrect here. The correct preposition to indicate a point in time from the past until now is 'since then'. This clarifies the duration of friendship from kindergarten to the present.

× I often go out with my friends, one of my friends that has been with me since my childhood.

✓ I often go out with my friends, including one friend who has been with me since my childhood.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'one of my friends that has been with me'. 'That' should be 'who' when referring to people, and the sentence structure is awkward. Using 'including one friend who has been with me' improves clarity and grammar.

× We really go to college together.

✓ We actually go to college together.

The word 'really' is awkward in this context. 'Actually' better conveys the intended meaning of emphasizing that they attend college together.

× We enjoy going out, we enjoy our companies.

✓ We enjoy going out; we enjoy each other's company.

'Our companies' is incorrect when referring to spending time together. The correct phrase is 'each other's company' to express mutual enjoyment of being together.

× We frequently meet each other at the railway station since we go to.

✓ We frequently meet each other at the railway station since we go there together.

The phrase 'since we go to' is incomplete and incorrect. Adding 'there together' completes the prepositional phrase and clarifies the meaning.

× Since we attend college together, it is our uh meet up point.

✓ Since we attend college together, it is our meeting point.

'Meet up point' is informal and awkward. 'Meeting point' is the correct noun phrase to describe a place where people meet.

× Yes, I often go out with my friends because the hangout with my friends is the kind of therapy for me.

✓ Yes, I often go out with my friends because hanging out with them is a kind of therapy for me.

'The hangout with my friends' is incorrect; 'hanging out with them' is the correct gerund phrase. Also, 'a kind of therapy' is more natural than 'the kind of therapy'.

× Whenever I feel stressed or depressed, the friend, the friend circle of mine is the my only go to option.

✓ Whenever I feel stressed or depressed, my friends, my friend circle, are my only go-to option.

The original sentence has redundant and incorrect pronouns and articles. 'The friend, the friend circle of mine' is awkward; 'my friends, my friend circle' is clearer. Also, 'the my only' is incorrect; it should be 'my only'.

× I would say friends are integral part of my life.

✓ I would say friends are an integral part of my life.

The phrase 'integral part' requires an article 'an' before it. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× Or it has become very important 'cause we have shared a lots of joyful moments together, we have shared our sorrows, our good times together and we have shared our secrets, which I don't want to leak to anyone else.

✓ It has become very important because we have shared lots of joyful moments together, our sorrows, our good times, and our secrets, which I don't want to leak to anyone else.

'A lots of' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'lots of' without 'a'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech.

× I prefer spending time with my group of friends because it creates a lively and dynamic atmosphere being with being with lots of people together.

✓ I prefer spending time with my group of friends because it creates a lively and dynamic atmosphere being with lots of people together.

The phrase 'being with being with' is a repetition error. Removing the duplicate improves clarity.

× We enjoy our time and we share our different perspectives, different opinions with each other and that that enrich our, uh, time together.

✓ We enjoy our time and share different perspectives and opinions with each other, and that enriches our time together.

The phrase 'that that' is a repetition error. Also, 'enrich' should be 'enriches' to agree with singular subject 'that'.

× Yeah, I do invite my friends to my home because because my friends get to know my family, my family gets to know my friends.

✓ Yes, I do invite my friends to my home because my friends get to know my family, and my family gets to know my friends.

The repetition of 'because' is an error. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow.

× And likewise I introduced my friend, my family to my friends and it creates a kind of what do we say family type relation with them among our family and friends.

✓ Likewise, I introduce my family to my friends, and it creates a kind of family-type relationship among our family and friends.

'Introduced' should be 'introduce' to maintain present tense. The phrase 'my friend, my family' is confusing; it should be 'my family'. Also, 'relation' should be 'relationship'.

× Yes, there is a huge difference between a meeting then and now.

✓ Yes, there is a huge difference between meeting then and now.

The article 'a' before 'meeting' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× Nowadays everyone has got busy in their day-to-day life or their schedule.

✓ Nowadays, everyone is busy with their day-to-day life or schedule.

The phrase 'has got busy in' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'is busy with'.

× Everyone has grown up and everyone has a lot of a lot of, a lot of on their plates.

✓ Everyone has grown up and has a lot on their plates.

The phrase 'a lot of a lot of, a lot of' is repetitive and incorrect. Simplifying to 'a lot' is correct.

× And managing everything and handling everything at the same time is not possible for everyone.

✓ Managing and handling everything at the same time is not possible for everyone.

The sentence is wordy with repeated 'everything'. Combining the actions improves clarity.

× So so the times of meet up or the number of meetups.

✓ So, the times or number of meetups have decreased.

The original sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.

× Some places are suitable for meeting because the ambience of that plate place might meet our expectations.

✓ Some places are suitable for meeting because the ambience of that place might meet our expectations.

The word 'plate' is a typo and should be 'place'.

× For example, if you are meeting for a hangout, we cannot go to the conference hall, we have to go to the coffees movie, movie theater.

✓ For example, if you are meeting for a hangout, you cannot go to a conference hall; you have to go to a coffee shop or movie theater.

The phrase 'the coffees movie, movie theater' is incorrect and confusing. Correcting to 'coffee shop or movie theater' and adjusting articles improves clarity.

× Likewise, if you are meeting for a business meeting, you cannot go to movie theater for that.

✓ Likewise, if you are meeting for a business meeting, you cannot go to a movie theater for that.

The article 'a' is missing before 'movie theater'.

× So so the every place has their own.

✓ So, every place has its own.

'The every place' is incorrect; it should be 'every place'. Also, 'their' should be 'its' to agree with the singular noun 'place'.