Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误和重复表达，句子应更连贯自然。可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节丰富内容。

例: Yes, I have two best friends named London and Anna. I met them at school after I immigrated to Canada a year ago. We often talk about our favorite sports and hobbies.

提案: 回答应更简洁且避免重复，使用连接词使句子更流畅，具体说明活动内容。

例: At school, we usually talk and sometimes play games together. We often discuss sports and interesting things happening at school.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。应使用正确时态和连词，结构更完整。

例: We usually meet at school. Sometimes I go to London's house, but I have never been to Anna's house because she hasn't invited me yet. We used to be in the same class last year, but now I'm in grade 7 and she is in grade 8.

提案: 回答语法错误多，表达不清晰。应简洁明了地说明是否经常外出，并具体描述活动。

例: I don't often go out with my friends. Sometimes I stay at home or go to Quinton Mall with my mom and son. We also like to hang out at the park and play games.

提案: 回答应避免语法错误，表达更自然流畅，内容具体且有逻辑。

例: Friends are very important to me because without them, school would be boring and lonely. I try to make friends so we can talk and enjoy our time together.

提案: 回答应更连贯，避免重复，使用连接词，表达清晰具体。

例: I prefer spending time with one friend because I am shy and don't talk much. When there are many friends, I usually just listen while they talk.

提案: 回答中语法和表达需改进，句子应更自然，内容更具体。

例: Yes, I like inviting my friends to my house so we can play together. However, they are often busy, so it doesn't happen very often.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，应明确表达观点并使用连词。

例: No, there is no big difference. We usually meet at her house or sometimes hang out at the park with Anna.

提案: 回答应更完整，避免断句，使用连接词，具体说明原因。

例: Some places like parks or houses are suitable for meeting because they are comfortable and quiet. However, restaurants are not always good because they can be noisy and crowded.

× I have two best friends. Their names are London and Anna and like, I just immigrated to Canada one year ago.

✓ I have two best friends. Their names are London and Anna, and I just immigrated to Canada one year ago.

句子中“and like”用法不当，且逗号缺失。这里“and like”应去掉，逗号用于连接两个独立分句。

× I meet them from the school sometime.

✓ I met them at school sometime.

动词时态应为过去式“met”，且介词应为“at school”表示在学校，而不是“from the school”。

× We're talking about the things we like or the sport.

✓ We talk about the things we like or sports.

此处描述习惯动作，应使用一般现在时“talk”，而非进行时“are talking”。“sport”应为复数“sports”，表示多种运动。

× when we're in the school we're always talking, but sometimes we're playing some games and we talk about the sport or the things we like or the something interesting from the school.

✓ When we're at school, we always talk, but sometimes we play some games and talk about sports or things we like or something interesting from school.

习惯性动作用一般现在时，去掉多余的“the”，介词用“at school”更自然。

× So we're always meet at school, sometimes I'll going to London's house, but I never went to Anna's house before.

✓ So we always meet at school, sometimes I go to London's house, but I have never been to Anna's house before.

“we're always meet”应为“we always meet”，去掉“'re”；“I'll going”错误，应为“I go”或“I'll go”；“never went”应为现在完成时“have never been”。

× She never invite me.

✓ She never invites me.

动词时态应为第三人称单数“invites”，且“never”后动词需加s。

× She never invite me.

✓ She never invites me.

主语是第三人称单数，动词应加-s。

× But we're also the good, the good friend, umm, because we're in the same class one year ago, but now I'm grade 7, she's grade 8.

✓ But we're also good friends because we were in the same class one year ago, but now I'm in grade 7, and she's in grade 8.

“the good, the good friend”表达不自然，应为“good friends”；“we're in the same class one year ago”时态错误，应为过去时“we were”；“I'm grade 7”应加介词“in”。

× I'm not usually go out with my friends like sometime I'll stay at home and going to Quinton Mall with my mom, uh son and with hang out at the park and we play games like grinders.

✓ I don't usually go out with my friends. Sometimes I stay at home or go to Quinton Mall with my mom and son, and hang out at the park where we play games like grinders.

“I'm not usually go out”应为“I don't usually go out”；“sometime”应为“sometimes”；“I'll stay”改为一般现在时“I stay”；“going”改为“go”；句子结构需调整使表达更清晰。

× So I have to, I must to find some friends and we can talk so you can make my school time not that bored.

✓ So I have to, I must find some friends and we can talk so that my school time is not so boring.

“must to find”错误，must后不加to；“make my school time not that bored”表达不当，应为“my school time is not so boring”。

× So if I only talk with one friend, they only can talk with me.

✓ So if I only talk with one friend, he or she can only talk with me.

“one friend”是单数，代词应使用“he or she”而非复数“they”。

× Yes I love their to come to my house and we can play but they're always busy so not usually but I'm pretty sure they love to come to my house.

✓ Yes, I love them to come to my house and we can play, but they're always busy so not usually. But I'm pretty sure they love to come to my house.

“their”应为宾格“them”；句子需加逗号分隔，表达更清晰。

× No, like when we hang out we always meet at her house so and we hang out at the park with sometimes with Anna.

✓ No, when we hang out, we always meet at her house, and sometimes we hang out at the park with Anna.

“with sometimes with Anna”结构错误，应调整为“sometimes we hang out at the park with Anna”。

× Uh, because that's suitable for a meeting place like the park or at the house, but somewhere like. The restaurant is not that good.

✓ Uh, because suitable meeting places are like the park or the house, but somewhere like a restaurant is not that good.

“suitable for a meeting place”表达不自然，应为“suitable meeting places”；“somewhere like. The restaurant”断句错误，应连贯表达。