Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Улучшите грамматику и структуру предложения, избегайте пауз и повторов. Используйте связные слова для плавности речи.

例: Yes, I have a friend whom I have known since 2015. We have maintained a strong friendship over the years.

提案: Используйте более разнообразную лексику и добавьте связующие слова для улучшения связности.

例: We usually engage in various activities when we meet. For instance, we often go for walks or hang out at someone's house, where we play video games or card games. These activities help us relax and enjoy each other's company.

提案: Сократите излишние слова, исправьте грамматические ошибки и сделайте ответ более связным и логичным.

例: I often meet friends during school courses and volunteer activities, which offer great opportunities to socialize. Additionally, I sometimes see them at birthday parties, where the atmosphere is relaxed and friendly.

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки, избегайте непонятных фраз и говорите более чётко и связно.

例: Yes, I usually go out with my friends about twice a month. Since we study at different schools now, it is sometimes difficult to meet more often.

提案: Избегайте повторов и излишних слов, используйте более разнообразную лексику для выражения чувств.

例: Friends are very important to me because they offer constant support and trust, which boosts my confidence. I cherish many wonderful memories with them, and spending time together always makes me happy and relaxed.

提案: Улучшите грамматику, используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями.

例: I enjoy spending time with one friend for deep conversations or watching movies. However, I prefer being with a group of friends because we play games and do fun activities, which makes the time more lively and exciting. Both options are enjoyable depending on my mood.

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки, говорите более чётко и логично, избегайте пауз и повторов.

例: Usually, we visit each other's homes. I don't often invite friends to my house, but I do so occasionally, such as on my birthday or when friends from other countries visit.

提案: Улучшите связность и исправьте ошибки, используйте более точные выражения.

例: Yes, there is definitely a difference. In the past, I met friends mostly at school or in my neighborhood, sharing many childhood memories. Nowadays, I usually meet friends at cafes or public events, and these friends reflect who I am today rather than my past.

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки, сделайте ответ более связным и завершённым.

例: Some places are suitable for meeting because they offer a comfortable and quiet environment that facilitates conversation and interaction. For example, cafes or meeting rooms provide privacy and minimal distractions, helping people focus. In contrast, noisy or crowded places like busy streets are less appropriate as they interrupt communication.

× I have friend, uh, which I know for a long time.

✓ I have a friend, uh, whom I have known for a long time.

The noun 'friend' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'which' is incorrect for people; 'whom' or 'who' should be used. The verb tense should be present perfect 'have known' to indicate an action continuing up to now.

× I uh, like friends with them since 2015, umm.

✓ I have liked being friends with them since 2015.

The verb 'like' should be in present perfect 'have liked' to express an action starting in the past and continuing. Also, 'like friends with them' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'being friends with them'.

× We usually do different activities when you meet.

✓ We usually do different activities when we meet.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; it should be 'we' to refer to the speaker and friends.

× Sometimes also meet friends at birthday parties where the atmosphere is relaxed and friendly. Times.

✓ Sometimes I also meet friends at birthday parties where the atmosphere is relaxed and friendly.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'I' should be added. The word 'Times' at the end is unnecessary and should be removed.

× I'm an extroverted person, I find it easily to beat new connections in this social environments and.

✓ I'm an extroverted person; I find it easy to make new connections in these social environments.

The adverb 'easily' is incorrect; the adjective 'easy' should be used after 'find it'. 'Beat' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'make' new connections. 'This' should be plural 'these' to agree with 'environments'. The sentence was incomplete and needed correction.

× Yes, I often go to my friends it's like twice a month because today we studying at different schools so it just hard to meet them.

✓ Yes, I often go to my friends' places about twice a month because we are studying at different schools now, so it's just hard to meet them.

The sentence lacked possessive form 'friends'' to indicate their places. 'Today' is incorrect; 'now' fits better. 'We studying' needs auxiliary verb 'are'. 'It just hard' requires 'it's' (it is). Sentence structure was awkward and needed rephrasing.

× So but we start times native times we natively.

✓ But we try to meet as often as possible.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It was rephrased to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Spending time with one friends who can have deep conversation, watch movies together.

✓ Spending time with one friend who can have deep conversations and watch movies together.

'One friends' is incorrect; 'friend' should be singular. 'Conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to match the context.

× However, I prefer spending time with groups of friends because we when I am with a group of friends, we enjoy playing different games and doing various fun activities which makes me the time more lively and exciting.

✓ However, I prefer spending time with groups of friends because when I am with a group of friends, we enjoy playing different games and doing various fun activities which make the time more lively and exciting.

The phrase 'we when I am' is incorrect; 'because when I am' is correct. 'Makes me the time' is incorrect; it should be 'make the time' because the subject is plural 'activities'.

× We usually umm invited someone's homes.

✓ We usually visit someone's home.

'Invited someone's homes' is incorrect; the verb 'visit' is appropriate here. Also, 'homes' should be singular 'home' when referring to one person's place.

× I don't usually invite friends to my home, just sometimes when I'm when my birthday, when parents with no home was, when they living in different countries, I invite them.

✓ I don't usually invite friends to my home, only sometimes on my birthday or when my parents are not home, or when they are living in different countries, I invite them.

The sentence had multiple errors: 'just sometimes when I'm when my birthday' should be 'only sometimes on my birthday'; 'when parents with no home was' is incorrect and should be 'when my parents are not home'; 'when they living' needs auxiliary verb 'are living'.

× Yes, there is a definitely a difference between where I meet friends now and where I used to meet them in the past.

✓ Yes, there is definitely a difference between where I meet friends now and where I used to meet them in the past.

The phrase 'there is a definitely a difference' has an extra article 'a'. It should be 'there is definitely a difference'.

× Nowadays I usually meet friends of cafes or public events and these friends tend to be known as I am today rather than from my past.

✓ Nowadays I usually meet friends at cafes or public events, and these friends tend to be people I know today rather than from my past.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect; 'at' is correct for locations. 'Known as I am today' is incorrect; it should be 'people I know today'.

× Some places suitable for meeting because they offer a comfortable and quiet environment that facilitates conversations, interaction.

✓ Some places are suitable for meeting because they offer a comfortable and quiet environment that facilitates conversations and interaction.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' after 'Some places'. Also, 'conversations, interaction' should be connected with 'and'.

× Cafes or meeting rooms provide privacy and minimal distractions which help people focus in their discussion.

✓ Cafes or meeting rooms provide privacy and minimal distractions which help people focus on their discussions.

The correct preposition after 'focus' is 'on', not 'in'. Also, 'discussion' should be plural 'discussions' to match the context.

× On the other hand, noisy or crowded places like busy streets or loud distance are less appropriate signs they can interrupt communication and make it.

✓ On the other hand, noisy or crowded places like busy streets or loud discos are less appropriate since they can interrupt communication and make it difficult.

'Loud distance' is incorrect; likely intended 'loud discos'. 'Signs' is incorrect; 'since' fits better. The sentence was incomplete and needed 'difficult' at the end.