Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like 'how to deal' twice.

例: Yes, I have a friend named Aisha whom I've known since primary school. She is very kind and often advises me on how to handle and avoid problems effectively.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more complete. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'prefer go' to 'prefer to go'.

例: I usually play football and tennis with my friends because I enjoy sports. However, as a busy mom, I don't have much free time, but when I do, I prefer to go out with my friends.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use linking words for coherence. Be specific about the activities and correct grammar errors like 'are often meet' to 'often meet'.

例: We often meet on the street and then go to my house, which has a big garden. There, we enjoy playing football and volleyball together, which is very entertaining.

提案: Your answer is good but can be more natural by combining sentences and using linking words. Also, use plural 'friends' consistently.

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends, especially on Fridays since it's my only day off. I enjoy these outings because they help me relax and get some fresh air.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural. Use correct grammar and avoid incomplete sentences. Explain why friends are important with specific reasons.

例: Friends are very important to me because I always consult them when I face big problems. Their advice is very valuable and helps me a lot.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and avoid repetition like 'we we'.

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because we can share different opinions and advice. Getting advice from several people is usually more helpful.

提案: Make your answer more fluent by correcting repetitions and using linking words. Be specific about activities you do together.

例: Yes, I like inviting my friends to my home to create good memories. We often watch TV, play PlayStation, or cook together.

提案: Use correct grammar and more natural expressions. Explain the difference clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, there is a big difference because nowadays we use social media and advanced technology to meet friends, which was not available in the past.

提案: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and avoid question forms in answers.

例: Some places are not suitable for meeting because they are crowded and noisy. This makes it difficult to have a proper conversation or make good decisions.

× My favorite person from the primary school, her name is Aisha.

✓ My favorite person from primary school is Aisha.

The sentence incorrectly uses a comma and a pronoun 'her' to connect two clauses, which is grammatically incorrect. Instead, the sentence should be combined properly without the pronoun to avoid redundancy and improve clarity.

× She is very kind person which always used to advise me and tell me how to deal with my problems and how to avoid it and how to deal.

✓ She is a very kind person who always used to advise me and tell me how to deal with my problems and how to avoid them.

The sentence misses the article 'a' before 'very kind person' and uses 'which' instead of 'who' for a person. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'problems' (plural). These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× But in my free time I prefer go with my friends to.

✓ But in my free time I prefer to go with my friends too.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by 'to' plus the base verb 'go'. Also, 'to' at the end is incorrect; it should be 'too' to mean 'also'. This correction fixes verb form and word choice errors.

× We are often meet in the street and after that going to my house as I have a big garden in my house and it is full of an entertainment as football, volleyball and we are also happy to do like this practice together.

✓ We often meet in the street and then go to my house because I have a big garden full of entertainment like football and volleyball, and we enjoy practicing these together.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms ('are often meet', 'going'), awkward phrasing, and unclear structure. Correcting verb forms and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I often go out with my friend, especially on Friday as it's my holiday.

✓ Yes, I often go out with my friends, especially on Friday as it's my holiday.

The singular 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context of social outings. This correction aligns the noun number with the intended meaning.

× Friends are very important for me, it is a vital thing as when I being in a big problem I always go and consult them for their advice and they all. Substantial for me.

✓ Friends are very important to me; they are vital because when I am in a big problem, I always go and consult them for their advice, and they are all substantial to me.

The sentence has incorrect verb form 'being' instead of 'am', incorrect pronoun use, and fragmented structure. Correcting verb tense and sentence structure improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I prefer to spend time with a group of friends and we we make a different decisions or advices for each other and when you take the advice from more than one person it will be good.

✓ I prefer to spend time with a group of friends, and we make different decisions or give advice to each other. When you take advice from more than one person, it is better.

The sentence has repeated words ('we we'), incorrect plural forms ('advices' should be 'advice'), and inconsistent pronouns ('you' instead of 'we'). Correcting these improves grammatical correctness and coherence.

× Yes I I like to invite my friends to my home and share a good memories with each other and maybe watching TV or play PlayStation, maybe cooking.

✓ Yes, I like to invite my friends to my home and share good memories with each other, maybe watching TV, playing PlayStation, or cooking.

The sentence has repeated words ('I I'), incorrect article use ('a good memories' should be 'good memories'), and inconsistent verb forms ('watching' and 'play'). Correcting these improves fluency and grammar.

× Yes, there's a big difference as nowadays social media and technology be more advanced and in the past there is no like that.

✓ Yes, there's a big difference because nowadays social media and technology are more advanced, and in the past, there was nothing like that.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'be' instead of 'are' for present tense plural and 'there is no like that' which is ungrammatical. Correcting verb forms and phrasing improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Are some places maybe crowded and full of people and there is a noise? So when you speak or when you discuss some problems there is a lot of noise that prevent to take the good decision?

✓ Some places may be crowded and full of people, and there is noise. So when you speak or discuss problems, the noise prevents you from making good decisions.

The original sentences have incorrect question forms, preposition use ('prevent to take'), and awkward phrasing. Correcting these improves grammatical correctness and clarity.