Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical errors and unclear pronouns which affect clarity. Try to use correct pronouns and verb forms, and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I met her at school when she was my classmate' and 'he always motivates me'.

例: I have many friends whom I have known for a long time, but I want to talk about one close friend I've known for about 15 years. I first met her at school when she was my classmate. I talk about him because he is very helpful and always motivates me to build a successful career.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and relevant, but avoid adding unrelated comments like 'That's really interesting' which can seem unnatural. Also, use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: When I was younger, I enjoyed playing cricket and participating in debates with my friends because these activities helped us bond and develop important skills. Nowadays, I usually spend time talking with my friends about our careers and future plans, so we can support each other. For example, one close friend often gives me advice during difficult times.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains filler words like 'uh' and some awkward phrasing such as 'safe time'. Try to avoid fillers and use clearer expressions like 'safe and convenient'.

例: We often meet in different places depending on our free time. For example, we usually go to parks or other quiet places because they provide a peaceful environment for meaningful conversations. Sometimes, we also meet at each other's offices when we are busy, as it is more convenient and safe.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'makes her burned even stronger'. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and check your sentence structure carefully.

例: To be honest, I don't go out with my friends very often, but whenever I have free time, I enjoy spending time with them. Usually, we play cricket in the field because it's a fun way to relax and strengthen our friendship. Besides cricket, we sometimes chat and share stories, which makes our bond even stronger.

提案: Your answer shows good understanding but has some awkward phrasing like 'forget stress more about my friends'. Try to express ideas more clearly and avoid redundancy.

例: Friends are extremely important to me because they are people I can trust and share my feelings and ideas with. For example, spending time playing games or chatting with them helps me relax and forget my stress. They also support me when I am in trouble and give valuable advice to overcome difficulties.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors like 'a complex topics' and repeated words 'because because'. Also, the last sentence is unclear. Try to proofread your answers to avoid such mistakes.

例: It depends on the situation and my mood. For example, when I want to understand a complex topic, I prefer spending time with a knowledgeable friend. However, after a hectic day, I enjoy relaxing and chatting with a group of friends because it helps me feel happy and refreshed. Overall, spending time with friends is a great way to relax.

提案: Your answer is good but contains some grammatical errors like 'I have friend invite'. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to use correct sentence structures.

例: Yes, I often invite my friends to my home, especially during holidays when I have more free time. We usually spend time chatting and relaxing together. Sometimes, I also invite them to enjoy delicious desserts prepared by my mother or my wife, which helps strengthen our friendship and have fun.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains errors like 'In when we were younger' and 'catch a better offices'. Use correct prepositions and vocabulary to improve clarity.

例: Yes, there is definitely a difference between where we meet friends now and in the past. When we were younger, we often met in classrooms or cafes where we could enjoy refreshments and chat. However, these days we usually meet at offices or parks because it is more convenient and relaxing after work.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and repeated words like 'prefer prefer'. Also, 'get a breathing, full and peaceful discussion' is unclear. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: Suitable places for meeting depend on people's mood and the purpose of the meeting. For example, I usually prefer quiet places where I can have a calm and peaceful discussion with my friends. On the other hand, noisy places are not suitable because it is difficult to concentrate and communicate properly.

× I first bet her at the school when he was my classmate.

✓ I first met her at the school when she was my classmate.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect because it does not agree with the female friend referred to as 'her'. The correct pronoun should be 'she' to match the subject. Also, 'bet' is a typo and should be 'met'.

× he's really helpful and always motivate me to establish a lucrative career.

✓ he's really helpful and always motivates me to establish a lucrative career.

The verb 'motivate' should be in the third person singular form 'motivates' to agree with the singular subject 'he'.

× I first bet her at the school when he was my classmate.

✓ I first met her at the school when she was my classmate.

The verb 'bet' is incorrect in this context; the correct past tense verb is 'met' to indicate the first meeting in the past.

× he's really helpful and always motivate me to establish a lucrative career.

✓ he's really helpful and always motivates me to establish a lucrative career.

The pronoun 'he' is used but the friend is referred to as 'her' earlier, causing inconsistency. The pronoun should be consistent; if the friend is female, use 'she' and 'motivates'. If male, use 'he' and 'motivates'.

× When I was younger, I enjoyed playing cricket and participating in debates with my friends because these activities helped us bond and develop important skills.

✓ When I was younger, I enjoyed playing cricket and participating in debates with my friends because these activities helped us bond and develop important skills.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct in past tense.

× Nowadays, I usually spend time talking with my friends about our career and future plans, which helps us support each other.

✓ Nowadays, I usually spend time talking with my friends about our careers and future plans, which helps us support each other.

The word 'career' should be plural 'careers' because it refers to multiple friends' careers, matching plural subject 'friends'.

× one of my close friends often gives me further advice during difficult times. That's really interesting.

✓ one of my close friends often gives me further advice during difficult times. That's really helpful.

The phrase 'That's really interesting' is not appropriate here; 'helpful' better fits the context of receiving advice.

× we usually go to parks or other quiet places, uh because they provide a peaceful environment where we can have meaningful conversations.

✓ we usually go to parks or other quiet places because they provide a peaceful environment where we can have meaningful conversations.

The filler 'uh' is unnecessary and interrupts the sentence flow; removing it improves clarity.

× Sometimes, we also meet at each other's offices when we are busy as it is more convenient and safe time.

✓ Sometimes, we also meet at each other's offices when we are busy as it is more convenient and safer.

The phrase 'safe time' is incorrect; 'safer' is the correct comparative adjective to describe convenience and safety.

× Besides cricket, we sometimes chat and share stories, which makes her burned even stronger.

✓ Besides cricket, we sometimes chat and share stories, which makes our bond even stronger.

The phrase 'makes her burned even stronger' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is that the friendship bond becomes stronger, so 'makes our bond even stronger' is correct.

× friends are extremely important in my life because they're the persons I can trust and share my feelings and ideas with them.

✓ friends are extremely important in my life because they're the people I can trust and share my feelings and ideas with.

The word 'persons' is less natural than 'people' in this context. Also, 'with them' is redundant after 'share my feelings and ideas with'. Removing 'them' improves sentence clarity.

× which helps me relax and forget stress more about my friends.

✓ which helps me relax and forget stress about my friends.

The phrase 'forget stress more about my friends' is incorrect. 'Forget stress about my friends' is the correct form without 'more'.

× Others support me whenever I'm in trouble and give me valuable suggestions and advice to overcome difficulties.

✓ They support me whenever I'm in trouble and give me valuable suggestions and advice to overcome difficulties.

The pronoun 'Others' is vague; 'They' refers clearly to friends mentioned earlier, improving coherence.

× whenever I want to understand a complex topics, I prefer spending time with a friend who is more knowledgeable about that subject.

✓ whenever I want to understand a complex topic, I prefer spending time with a friend who is more knowledgeable about that subject.

The word 'topics' is plural but preceded by 'a complex', which is singular. Changing 'topics' to singular 'topic' corrects the quantifier agreement.

× However, after a hectic day, I enjoyed relaxing and chatting with a group of friends because because it helps me feel happy and refreshed.

✓ However, after a hectic day, I enjoy relaxing and chatting with a group of friends because it helps me feel happy and refreshed.

The verb 'enjoyed' is past tense but the sentence refers to a habitual action, so present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate. Also, duplicate 'because' should be reduced to one.

× Overall, friends today a great way to spend time.

✓ Overall, friends are a great way to spend time today.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' and the adverb 'today' is misplaced. Correcting the sentence structure improves clarity.

× Yes, I have friend invite my friends to my home, especially during holidays when I have more free time.

✓ Yes, I invite my friends to my home, especially during holidays when I have more free time.

The phrase 'I have friend invite my friends' is incorrect. The correct form is 'I invite my friends'.

× Sometimes I also, uh, invite them to enjoy some delicious desserts prepared by my mother or my wife, which helps us strengthen our friendship and have fun.

✓ Sometimes I also invite them to enjoy some delicious desserts prepared by my mother or my wife, which helps us strengthen our friendship and have fun.

The filler 'uh' is unnecessary and interrupts the sentence flow; removing it improves clarity.

× In when we were younger, we often met in classrooms or cafes where we could enjoy some refreshments and chat.

✓ When we were younger, we often met in classrooms or cafes where we could enjoy some refreshments and chat.

The phrase 'In when' is incorrect; removing 'In' corrects the preposition usage.

× However, these days we usually catch a better offices or parks because it's more convenient and relaxing after work.

✓ However, these days we usually meet at better offices or parks because it's more convenient and relaxing after work.

The verb 'catch' is incorrect in this context; 'meet at' is the correct phrase. Also, 'a better offices' is incorrect; 'better offices' without 'a' is correct.

× Well, suitable places for meeting difference on the people's mood and purpose of the meeting.

✓ Well, suitable places for meeting depend on people's mood and purpose of the meeting.

The word 'difference' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'depend' to express that suitability varies based on mood and purpose.

× I usually prefer prefer quiet places where I get a breathing, full and peaceful discussion with my friends.

✓ I usually prefer quiet places where I get a breathing space and have full and peaceful discussions with my friends.

The phrase 'get a breathing, full and peaceful discussion' is awkward and unclear. Adding 'breathing space' and pluralizing 'discussions' clarifies meaning.

× On the other hand, uh noisy places are not suitable because it is difficult to concentrate and communicate properly.

✓ On the other hand, noisy places are not suitable because it is difficult to concentrate and communicate properly.

The filler 'uh' is unnecessary and interrupts the sentence flow; removing it improves clarity.