Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be natural, concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid exaggerations and repetitions, correct grammar (e.g. 'a few', 'we've known each other since childhood'), and limit length to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail (how you keep in touch) using a linking word.

例: Yes. I have a few close friends whom I've known since childhood. Although we now live in different cities, we stay in regular contact through weekly video calls and a group chat, so we still feel very close.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and use correct verbs and vocabulary. Replace unclear words ('gospel') and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to connect activities and give a specific example (what you watch or cook).

例: We usually relax at home — for example, we watch TV series or just chat about our week. Sometimes we go shopping or have drinks, and occasionally we cook together; one friend often prepares Vietnamese dishes for us.

提案: Produce a clear topic sentence and correct grammar ('quiet environment'). Avoid repeating ideas; use a linking word to explain why and give a specific detail of a typical meeting place at home (living room, kitchen).

例: We usually meet at someone's home because we prefer a quiet environment. For instance, we often sit in the living room to watch shows together or cook in the kitchen.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use correct tense (I invited → I invite) and avoid repetition. Offer a reason for not going out and a specific example of an activity, using a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Not often. Since I moved to Vietnam I usually invite friends to my apartment, where we watch TV, practice yoga together and sometimes cook meals at home.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence and avoid hesitations. Use clear linking words to introduce an example, and make the example concise and specific. Fix small grammatical issues ('friends are', 'during both good and difficult times').

例: Friends are extremely important to me because they provide emotional support in both good and bad times. For example, during stressful exam periods my friends shared study tips and encouraged me, which helped me stay motivated.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and correct word order ('Personally, it depends on the situation'). Avoid repetition and use linking words to contrast choices. Give a brief, specific example for each preference.

例: Personally, it depends on the situation. I prefer one-on-one time when discussing private matters, but I enjoy being with a group when we're traveling or having a party.

提案: Good structure — keep answers concise and correct minor phrasing ('bond our relationship' → 'strengthen our bond'). Use one clear example and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I often invite friends to my apartment because I enjoy socializing in a relaxed, familiar environment. For example, we regularly have dinner and watch films together, which helps strengthen our bond.

提案: Answer clearly and use linking words (e.g. 'whereas') to contrast past and present. Provide one specific reason for the change to make the response more informative.

例: Yes. Nowadays I often meet friends at coffee shops or art museums because we like a relaxed atmosphere, whereas in the past we usually gathered outdoors in parks or at home.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence explaining the main reason and use correct grammar and vocabulary ('different places offer different atmospheres'). Use linking words and give two contrasted, specific examples with reasons (calm vs noisy). Keep it concise.

例: Some places are more suitable because they offer different atmospheres. For example, parks and libraries feel calm and relaxed, which is good for quiet conversation, whereas bars are noisy and better for lively socializing.

× I have few close friends and we've known each other since since childhood.

✓ I have a few close friends and we've known each other since childhood.

Missing the article 'a' before 'few' changes the meaning; 'few' implies almost none while 'a few' means some. Also duplicate 'since' removed. Use 'a few' to indicate a small number of friends.

× It almost it about 420 years, give or take.

✓ It is almost about 20 years, give or take.

The original has extra words ('it almost it') and an impossible number. Corrected to present simple 'is' for stating duration and a realistic number. Ensure verb 'is' agrees with subject and remove redundancy.

× We lived in a small hometown and grew up together.

✓ We lived in a small hometown and grew up together.

Sentence is acceptable if referring to past; no change needed. Included here to indicate no correction required for listed types.

× We usually watch TV or chat and gospel some others when we together.

✓ We usually watch TV or chat and talk about other things when we're together.

'Gospel some others' is incorrect and unclear. Replaced with 'talk about other things'. Added contraction 'we're' for 'we are' to correct sentence structure and verb usage.

× And one of my close friend close friends she really good at cooking so sometimes we also cook at home.

✓ And one of my close friends is really good at cooking, so sometimes we also cook at home.

Use plural 'friends' after 'one of my' and include the verb 'is' for third person singular. Added comma for clarity.

× We usually meet each other at home because we both like quite quite environment.

✓ We usually meet each other at home because we both like a quiet environment.

'Quite quite' is incorrect repetition; 'quiet' is the correct adjective. Added article 'a' before 'quiet environment'.

× We don't like to go shopping or do something outside, we prefer inside.

✓ We don't like to go shopping or do things outside; we prefer to stay inside.

Use plural 'do things' and add 'to stay' for clarity. Use semicolon or period to separate clauses. Preposition 'inside' needs verb 'stay' to be grammatical in this context.

× Especially after I moved to Vietnam, I usually invited my friend come to my apartment and we watch TV together and sometimes she cooked for me and she cooked for me.

✓ Especially after I moved to Vietnam, I usually invited my friend to come to my apartment, and we watched TV together; sometimes she cooked for me.

Mix of tenses: 'moved' is past, so accompanying verbs should be past ('invited', 'watched', 'cooked'). Added 'to' before 'come' and removed duplicate clause. Use commas and semicolon for clarity.

× Uh, and we also do some yoga at home.

✓ Uh, and we also do some yoga at home.

Sentence is correct; 'do some yoga' uses base verb 'do' correctly with noun phrase. Included to show no change required for listed types.

× The personal friends are extremely important to me because they provide emotional support during both good or difficult times.

✓ Friends are extremely important to me because they provide emotional support during both good and difficult times.

'The personal friends' is awkward; 'friends' suffices. Use 'and' not 'or' in 'both...and'. Removed unnecessary article 'the' and adjective 'personal'.

× For example, why? Why you know first of all stressful exam period.

✓ For example, during stressful exam periods, my friends help me by sharing study tips and keeping me motivated.

Original is fragmented and unclear. Rewrote to a complete sentence with correct structure, pluralized 'periods', and present simple for habitual action.

× A personal it really depends on the situation.

✓ It really depends on the situation.

Removed extraneous word 'A personal' which makes the sentence ungrammatical. The corrected sentence is a clear subject-verb clause.

× I prefer spend time with one friend if we have to discuss some personal and private things, but I prefer a house with group with a group of friends if we have a party or traveling.

✓ I prefer to spend time with one friend if we have to discuss personal and private things, but I prefer a house with a group of friends if we have a party or are traveling.

Add 'to' before 'spend' (infinitive). Remove duplicate 'with group' and add article 'a'. Use parallel verb forms 'are traveling'.

× I often invite friends to my apartment because I enjoy socializing in a relaxed, familiar environment.

✓ I often invite friends to my apartment because I enjoy socializing in a relaxed, familiar environment.

Sentence is correct; article usage is appropriate. Included to show no change needed.

× For example, we usually have dinner together or watch films together, which really helps us bond our relationship.

✓ For example, we usually have dinner together or watch films together, which really helps us strengthen our relationship.

'Bond our relationship' is not idiomatic. Use 'strengthen our relationship' or 'help us bond'. Adjusted to a natural verb-object pairing.

× Nowadays I usually meet friends at coffee shops or art museums when we can chat and stay relaxed.

✓ Nowadays I usually meet friends at coffee shops or art museums where we can chat and relax.

Use 'where' rather than 'when' for places. 'Stay relaxed' is awkward; 'relax' is more natural.

× Because I think a different places offer different atmosphere.

✓ Because I think different places offer different atmospheres.

Remove article 'a' before plural 'different places' and pluralize 'atmosphere' to 'atmospheres' to match plural subject.

× For example, for example if meet people meeting friends in parks or library, we usually felt calm and relaxed if we meet our friends at bar.

✓ For example, if we meet friends in parks or libraries, we usually feel calm and relaxed, but if we meet our friends at a bar, we feel more energetic.

Original repeats 'for example' and has incorrect verb forms and articles. Rewrote to parallel clauses: present simple 'feel' for habitual situations, plural 'libraries', and added contrasting clause for clarity.