Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は内容的に分かりやすいですが、流暢さと文法、語順で改善が必要です。例えば過度の会話の埋め詞（uh）が多く、同じ表現（"my wife is my closest friend"）を繰り返しています。また時制と前置詞の誤り（"who I know since" → "who I have known since"、"closest friends each other" → "closest friends to each other" または単に "closest friend"）を直すべきです。改善方法：発話前に一文でトピックを明確に述べ、その後1つか2つの具体的な補足（結婚年や一緒にいる理由）を短く述べる練習をしてください。練習時は"uh"を減らすために一呼吸置くことを意識してください。

例: I don't have any childhood friends, but my closest and longest-lasting friend is my wife. We married about eight years ago, and since then we've been very close because we share many daily routines and hobbies.

提案: 答えは直接的で具体的な趣味（BJJ）を挙げており良いです。しかし、繰り返しや言い淀みが目立ちます。自然な流れのために最初に主文（何をするか）を述べ、その後で趣味の詳細や頻度を述べるとよいです。接続詞（for example, also, sometimes）を使って情報を整理してください。

例: I usually stay at home with my wife and we often do things together. For example, we practice Brazilian jiu-jitsu (BJJ) a few times a week, which is a hobby we both enjoy.

提案: 答えは意図は分かりますが冗長で文法や語順の誤り（"I stay at home every days" → "I stay at home every day"、"shared dinners time" → "share dinner"）が多いです。場所を問う質問には最初に簡潔に「家で会う」と答え、その後具体例（夕食、読書、裁縫）を1～2つに絞って述べてください。

例: We usually meet at home. We often have dinner together and spend time doing quiet activities like reading or sewing.

提案: 内容は具体的で良いですが、発話の流れが乱れています（語順や冗長なフレーズ）。頻度や場所を明確に述べ、余計な言い淀みを減らしましょう。また単数複数の一致（"we go out sometimes with my friend" → "we sometimes go out together"）を確認してください。接続語（usually, often, for example）を使うとより自然になります。

例: Yes, we go out quite often. For example, every weekend we usually go to a restaurant or cafe and sometimes visit the shopping mall nearby to hang out.

提案: この回答は主旨が不明瞭で、言い淀みや語彙の誤用（"match rent"など誤認）によって意味が伝わりにくいです。質問の意図は友人の重要性を問うものなので、まず直接に意見を述べ（重要/そうでもない）、その理由を2つ以内の簡潔な具体例で補足してください。不要な繰り返しを避け、一文ごとに明確に区切る練習をしましょう。

例: Friends are important to me, but I have a small circle. My wife is my closest friend, and I rely on her for emotional support and company outside of work.

提案: 意見ははっきりしていて良いですが、語彙選択と流暢さを改善してください（"I'm a bit into about it"は不自然、"small circle of friends"の表現修正）。理由（親密さを深めたい）を簡潔に述べ、例や結果を一つ加えるとより説得力が増します。

例: I prefer spending time with one close friend rather than a large group. This lets me build a deeper relationship and have more meaningful conversations.

提案: 理由は明確で自然ですが、不要な言い淀みと一部意味不明な語（"Azam"）が混じっています。理由を時系列で整理し（まず頻度、その理由：掃除・片付け、忙しさ）短く分かりやすく述べてください。また"recently"と現在形の組合せに注意して表現を整えましょう。

例: I rarely invite friends to my home because I need time to clean and organize it first. Lately I've been quite busy, so it's hard to find time to prepare for guests.

提案: 答えの主旨は明確ですが文法（"invite my friend"→"invite my friends"、"after I getting married"→"after I got married"）や冗長な語句が目立ちます。過去と現在の違いを対比する形で簡潔に述べ、影響（配偶者の同意が必要）を一つ具体的に示すとよいです。

例: When I was single, I often invited friends to my house. Since I got married, I usually meet friends outside because my wife and I share the home and we prefer to agree before having guests.

提案: 回答は概念的すぎて曖昧で、語彙選択（"aptitude"や"price"）が不適切です。まず直接に基準を述べ（便利さ、安全さ、静かさなど）、その後に理由や短い具体例を一つ示してください。簡潔で具体的な語彙を使う練習をして、抽象的な単語の誤用を避けましょう。

例: Some places are suitable because they are convenient and comfortable. For example, a quiet cafe is good for chatting, while a noisy market is not ideal for conversation.

× I don't have a friend, uh, who I know since I was a child, but uh, my most durable friend is my wife.

✓ I don't have a friend who I have known since I was a child, but my closest friend is my wife.

The original sentence mixes present clause 'I know' with a time reference 'since I was a child'. Use the present perfect 'have known' to show an action that began in the past and continues to the present. Also 'most durable friend' is unnatural; 'closest friend' or 'longest-standing friend' is better. Suggestion: Use present perfect for relationships that started in the past and continue (have known), and prefer natural collocations like 'closest friend'.

× My wife and I got married about 8 years ago and since then we are uh, we are the closest friends each other.

✓ My wife and I got married about eight years ago and since then we have been very close to each other.

After 'since then' use present perfect ('have been') to describe a state continuing from the past to now. Also 'the closest friends each other' is ungrammatical; use 'close to each other' or 'closest friends'. Suggestion: Use 'have been' with 'since' and correct phrase order 'close to each other'.

× I typically uh stay at home with my wife, as I mentioned, my wife is my uh closest friend and also sometimes we uh have uh shared uh hobbies.

✓ I typically stay at home with my wife; as I mentioned, she is my closest friend, and sometimes we share hobbies.

Remove unnecessary 'have' before 'shared' and use 'share hobbies' (verb + object). Also streamline pronoun repetition: use 'she' instead of repeating 'my wife'. Suggestion: Use verbs directly ('share hobbies') and replace repetitive nouns with pronouns for natural flow.

× Uh, it is a Brazilian jiu jitsu or BJJ. We practice together BJJ sometimes.

✓ It is Brazilian jiu-jitsu, or BJJ. We sometimes practice BJJ together.

Word order and adverb placement: 'sometimes' typically goes before the main verb. Also use hyphenation 'jiu-jitsu' and place 'together' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: Place frequency adverbs before the verb ('sometimes practice') and order adverbials naturally.

× My wife, as I mentioned, she is a my closest friend and I uh, stay uh, at home, uh, every days and uh, shared uh, dinners time and also, uh, shared the time, uh, in which we do uh, what we would like to do like reading and sewing.

✓ My wife, as I mentioned, is my closest friend and I stay at home every day; we share dinner time and also the time when we do things we enjoy, like reading and sewing.

Remove the extra article 'a' before 'my closest friend'. Use 'every day' (two words) for frequency. 'Shared dinners time' is incorrect; use 'share dinner time'. Use 'when' for time clauses and 'things we enjoy' is more natural than 'what we would like to do'. Suggestion: Correct article usage, use 'every day', and use 'share' for habitual activities.

× We go out sometimes with my uh, friend, uh, actually, uh, each uh, weekend we go to Restaurant Cafe and the shopping center, uh, to hang out.

✓ We sometimes go out with friends; actually, each weekend we go to a restaurant or a cafe and the shopping center to hang out.

'Friend' should be plural if referring to going out with more than one person or general friends. Use articles before 'restaurant' and 'cafe'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural to meaning and include articles for countable nouns ('a restaurant').

× As I mentioned, my wife is the closest friend and uh, every Saturday are we go to the, uh, shopping mall in our largest in our district.

✓ As I mentioned, my wife is my closest friend and every Saturday we go to the largest shopping mall in our district.

Incorrect word order 'are we go' should be 'we go'. Also 'in our largest in our district' is ungrammatical; use 'the largest shopping mall in our district'. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb order and a clear noun phrase for the mall.

× Uh, in general, I don't have a match rent, Uh, so, uh, there apart, our friend, which shared in my life is not so, uh, large, but, uh, my wife is my closest friend.

✓ In general, I don't have many close friends, so the number of friends who have shared my life is not very large; but my wife is my closest friend.

Original sentence contains nonstandard phrases ('match rent', 'there apart') and incorrect relative clause 'which shared in my life'. Use 'friends who have shared my life' or 'friends in my life' and 'not very large' for quantity. Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary for quantity ('many close friends') and correct relative clauses ('friends who').

× So in, in that sense, uh, my work is quite important for me and the closest friend is quite important for me.

✓ So in that sense, my work is quite important to me, and my closest friend is very important to me.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'important' ('important to me'). Repeat 'my' to clarify 'closest friend'. Also prefer 'very important' to avoid awkward duplication. Suggestion: Use 'important to me' and repeat possessive pronouns as needed for clarity.

× I'm a bit into about it. So I have a small cycle friend. So I don't like, uh, spending my time, uh, with a group of friend.

✓ I'm not very into that. I have a small circle of friends, so I don't like spending my time with a group of friends.

'Into about it' is incorrect; use 'not very into that'. 'Cycle friend' should be 'circle of friends'. 'Group of friend' needs plural 'friends'. Suggestion: Use common idioms ('not very into') and correct collocations ('circle of friends').

× So I would like to focus on one friend and uh, uh, make our relationship, uh, deeper, uh, as much as possible and it's my way to have a friend.

✓ So I would like to focus on one friend and deepen our relationship as much as possible; that's my way of having friends.

Streamline the sentence by using 'deepen our relationship' rather than 'make our relationship deeper'. Use 'that's my way of having friends' for the concluding idea. Suggestion: Prefer concise verb phrases ('deepen our relationship') and natural expressions ('my way of having friends').

× I rarely invite my friend to my home because it is a bit tricky for me to invite Azam I I have to, uh, clean up my house and, uh, organize everything.

✓ I rarely invite friends to my home because it's a bit tricky for me to do so; I have to clean up my house and organize everything.

Use plural 'friends' for general statement. Remove unclear name 'Azam I'. Use contraction 'it's' and 'do so' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general habits and avoid unnecessary names or repetitions.

× I'm a bit busy recently, so it is difficult for me to find time to, uh, do these things.

✓ I've been a bit busy recently, so it has been difficult for me to find time to do these things.

Use present perfect progressive or present perfect 'I've been' with 'recently' to show ongoing recent state. 'It is difficult' is acceptable but present perfect 'has been difficult' matches 'recently'. Suggestion: Use present perfect to describe recent ongoing situations.

× When I was single, I typically invite my friend to to my house, but after I getting married, my house is shared, of course, uh, with my wife.

✓ When I was single, I typically invited friends to my house, but after I got married, my house became shared with my wife.

Narration about past habits requires past tense 'invited' not 'invite'. 'After I getting married' is ungrammatical; use 'after I got married'. 'House is shared' should be 'became shared' for the change. Suggestion: Use past tense for past habits and correct past participle forms ('got married').

× So, uh, so it is a a bit difficult to invite my friends to my house so we have each other's permission.

✓ So it is a bit difficult to invite my friends to my house because we need each other's permission.

'Have each other's permission' is okay but 'so we have' is awkward with cause; use 'because we need each other's permission' to explain reason. Suggestion: Use conjunctions that express cause ('because') and natural collocations ('need each other's permission').

× It's very general questions actually as the each place has its aptitude and if these places are clear enough then it is a very convenient and access to that price is a great.

✓ That's a very general question; each place has its advantages, and if the facilities are good then it is convenient and accessible, which is great.

Original has many incorrect words: 'questions' → 'question', 'aptitude' → 'advantages', 'clear' unclear, 'access to that price' nonsensical. Use 'facilities' or 'advantages', 'convenient and accessible' to express suitability. Suggestion: Use appropriate vocabulary ('advantages', 'facilities', 'accessible') and clear sentence structure.