Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect clarity. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I always wear a watch, especially at work, because as a nurse, I need to monitor patients' heart rates and birth rates accurately. Additionally, I like to wear a watch when I go on trips to keep track of time easily. Therefore, wearing a watch is essential for both my job and daily life.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by combining sentences smoothly and providing more detail. Use linking words to make your response more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I have. Three years ago, my husband bought me an expensive watch as a birthday gift, and I really liked it because it was both beautiful and practical.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has repetition and grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking phrases to connect ideas logically. Also, explain your points clearly and concisely.

例: I believe some people wear expensive watches because they are interested in fashion and want to show off their status. Wearing such watches can boost their confidence and demonstrate their success to others.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes that make it difficult to understand. Focus on giving a clear opinion with supporting reasons, using correct grammar and linking words to improve coherence.

例: I think wearing a watch is a matter of personal preference. Although many people use their phones to check the time nowadays, some prefer watches because they are convenient and stylish.

× Yes, I always wear a watch the dress code for our workplace because since I work in nurse we have to check and monitor heart rate and birth rate of our patient and is it necessary for us to very watch.

✓ Yes, I always wear a watch as part of the dress code for our workplace because since I work as a nurse we have to check and monitor the heart rate and birth rate of our patients and it is necessary for us to wear a watch.

The sentence lacks the preposition 'as' before 'part of the dress code' and 'as a nurse' to indicate roles or functions. Also, 'very watch' is incorrect; it should be 'wear a watch'. Additionally, 'patient' should be plural 'patients' to match the context. Correct preposition use clarifies meaning and improves sentence flow.

× Yes, I always wear a watch the dress code for our workplace because since I work in nurse we have to check and monitor heart rate and birth rate of our patient and is it necessary for us to very watch.

✓ Yes, I always wear a watch as part of the dress code for our workplace because since I work as a nurse we have to check and monitor the heart rate and birth rate of our patients and it is necessary for us to wear a watch.

The word 'patient' should be plural 'patients' because the nurse monitors multiple patients. Using the correct singular or plural form ensures subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× Yes, I always wear a watch the dress code for our workplace because since I work in nurse we have to check and monitor heart rate and birth rate of our patient and is it necessary for us to very watch.

✓ Yes, I always wear a watch as part of the dress code for our workplace because since I work as a nurse we have to check and monitor the heart rate and birth rate of our patients and it is necessary for us to wear a watch.

The phrase 'work in nurse' is incorrect; it should be 'work as a nurse' to correctly express the occupation. Prepositions like 'as' are used to indicate roles or professions.

× Yes, I always wear a watch the dress code for our workplace because since I work in nurse we have to check and monitor heart rate and birth rate of our patient and is it necessary for us to very watch.

✓ Yes, I always wear a watch as part of the dress code for our workplace because since I work as a nurse we have to check and monitor the heart rate and birth rate of our patients and it is necessary for us to wear a watch.

The original sentence is a run-on with missing conjunctions and auxiliary verbs. Adding 'as part of', 'as a nurse', and 'it is' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I always use it when I go to my workplace and I like to wear watch when I go on a trip and when I.

✓ I always use it when I go to my workplace, and I like to wear a watch when I go on a trip.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks proper punctuation. Adding a comma and completing the thought by removing the unfinished phrase improves clarity and sentence structure.

× Yes, I recall that. If I'm not mistaken, it was three years ago my husband bought. Expensive watch for me as my birthday gift and I loved, I liked it.

✓ Yes, I recall that. If I'm not mistaken, it was three years ago that my husband bought an expensive watch for me as my birthday gift, and I liked it.

The sentence has a misplaced period and missing article 'an' before 'expensive watch'. Also, 'loved, I liked it' is redundant; 'liked it' suffices. Correct past tense usage and punctuation improve readability.

× Actually, I believe that is really the interest. Some people are interested interested in buying expensive clothes.

✓ Actually, I believe that is really an interest. Some people are interested in buying expensive clothes.

The phrase 'the interest' should be 'an interest' to indicate a general interest. Also, the word 'interested' is repeated twice; removing the duplicate corrects the error.

× Some people like to buying watches because they sometimes want to brag about their watches and show off and it's raised their confidence, so they like to show their abilities.

✓ Some people like to buy watches because they sometimes want to brag about their watches and show off, and it raises their confidence, so they like to show their abilities.

The phrase 'like to buying' is incorrect; it should be 'like to buy' (infinitive form). Also, 'it's raised' should be 'it raises' to match present tense and subject-verb agreement.

× Nowadays most people have access their cell phone, so they sometimes prefer to check their time with their cell phones.

✓ Nowadays, most people have access to their cell phones, so they sometimes prefer to check the time on their cell phones.

The phrase 'have access their cell phone' is missing the preposition 'to' and 'cell phone' should be plural 'cell phones' to match 'most people'. Also, 'check their time' is better expressed as 'check the time on'.

× Is really depends on people's preference and their interest.

✓ It really depends on people's preferences and their interests.

The sentence is missing the subject 'It'. Also, 'preference' and 'interest' should be plural to match 'people's'. Correct preposition use and subject inclusion improve sentence correctness.

× Some people like to very much compared to check their time with their cell phone because it's they are used to using their watch if they don't.

✓ Some people like it very much compared to checking the time with their cell phone because they are used to using their watch.

The phrase 'like to very much compared to check' is incorrect; it should be 'like it very much compared to checking'. Also, 'it's they are used to' is incorrect; 'they are used to' suffices. The sentence is restructured for clarity.