Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些冗长且语法不准确，建议简洁明了地表达，并注意时态和语法的正确使用。

例: No, I don't wear a watch now, but I got my first watch when I was in junior high school. Unfortunately, I lost it within three days.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够连贯，建议使用完整句子并注意所有格和时间表达的正确使用。

例: Yes, my father gave me my first watch as a gift for my first birthday, but I lost it within three days.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，建议使用更准确的词汇和正确的主谓一致。

例: In my opinion, expensive watches can represent a person's status. For example, presidents often wear expensive watches to show their authority.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，建议简洁表达观点并使用正确的句子结构。

例: I don't think wearing a watch is important anymore because we can check the time on our phones nowadays.

× No I don't, but I had a watch long time ago if in my junior high school I got my first watch but I lose it in within three days.

✓ No, I don't, but I had a watch a long time ago. When I was in junior high school, I got my first watch, but I lost it within three days.

句子中时态混用，描述过去事件时应使用过去时态。'lose' 应改为过去式 'lost'。此外，句子结构混乱，需拆分成更清晰的句子。

× Yes, my first watch was given by my father's.

✓ Yes, my first watch was given by my father.

'my father's' 是所有格形式，缺少名词，导致表达不完整，应改为 'my father'。

× It is my 1st. First years old birthday but I just lost it within three days after that.

✓ It was on my first birthday, but I lost it within three days after that.

句子结构不完整且混乱，'1st. First years old birthday' 表达不正确，应改为 'my first birthday'。时态应统一为过去时。

× So for example, the president always have expensive watch in order to show her authority.

✓ So for example, the president always has an expensive watch in order to show her authority.

主语是单数 'the president'，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式 'has'。'watch' 前应加不定冠词 'an'。

× I don't think so as as before I think have watch can make people know what time is it now.

✓ I don't think so because before, I thought having a watch could help people know what time it is now.

句子中缺少主语，时态和语序错误，'have watch' 应改为 'having a watch'，'what time is it now' 应改为 'what time it is now'。

× But nowadays we all have cell phones, so we don't have youth watch to understand the.

✓ But nowadays we all have cell phones, so we don't need watches to know the time.

'youth watch' 表达错误，应为 'watches'，句尾 'to understand the' 不完整，应改为 'to know the time'。