Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and provide specific details using correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: I often visit YouTube, especially YouTube Music, because I enjoy listening to a wide variety of songs there.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and more natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

例: My favourite website is YouTube because it offers a wide variety of content. For example, I often listen to music and watch many videos there.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your point clearly and logically.

例: Yes, websites often update their content. For instance, when I visit a website after a week, I usually notice some changes or new features.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples with correct grammar and linking words.

例: In my country, popular websites include Instagram, Facebook, Twitter, and YouTube. Many people enjoy watching videos and sharing content on these platforms.

× I often don't use any type of using, but my favorite website is a YouTube.

✓ I often don't use any type of website, but my favorite website is YouTube.

The article 'a' before 'YouTube' is incorrect because 'YouTube' is a proper noun and does not require an article. Also, 'type of using' is unclear and should be 'type of website' to make sense.

× YouTube Music available.

✓ YouTube Music is available.

The sentence lacks a verb. Adding the verb 'is' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× My favorite website is YouTube because of this is a wide variety available about it.

✓ My favorite website is YouTube because there is a wide variety of content available on it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'there is' and restructuring the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Play music.

✓ You can play music.

The original is a fragment without a subject or verb. Adding 'You can' makes it a complete sentence.

× So I'm listening in music and I'm watching a lot of video.

✓ So I'm listening to music and watching a lot of videos.

The correct preposition with 'listening' is 'to'. Also, 'video' should be plural 'videos' to match the context.

× Yeah, often they are giving you so in a week.

✓ Yeah, often they update it within a week.

The original sentence is unclear and incorrect. Using 'update it within a week' correctly expresses the intended meaning with proper modal verb usage.

× So when I'm going to the website after a week, so I I notice that there are some changes on the website.

✓ So when I visit the website after a week, I notice that there are some changes on the website.

The sentence has redundancy and awkward phrasing. Removing extra 'so' and correcting 'going to the website' to 'visit the website' improves clarity and grammar.

× In my country whole side of more popular like Instagram, Facebook, Twitter and YouTube also is very popular in my country.

✓ In my country, websites like Instagram, Facebook, Twitter, and YouTube are very popular.

The phrase 'whole side of more popular' is incorrect. Also, 'is' should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject 'websites'.

× Lot of peoples are you know watching their video and videos.

✓ A lot of people are watching their videos.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the correct plural is 'people'. Also, 'lot of' should be 'a lot of'. 'Video and videos' is redundant; 'videos' suffices.