Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be specific about the types of websites you visit and why.

例: I often visit various websites depending on my needs. For example, I use Google to search for information quickly, Amazon to shop online, and Twitter to keep up with current news and trends.

提案: Your answer has good points but contains some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, explain why you like the website with specific reasons, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: My favourite website is Google because it allows me to find a vast amount of information instantly. Moreover, its simple interface makes it easy to use, which helps me stay updated with the latest news and knowledge.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks clarity. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide specific examples of changes you have noticed on websites. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy.

例: The websites I visit have not changed much in terms of content, but they often update their design and colours. I appreciate these changes because they keep the websites fresh and prevent me from getting bored.

提案: Your answer contains many hesitations and unclear references, which affects fluency and coherence. To improve, prepare a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and provide specific examples of popular websites with reasons why they are popular. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: In my country, popular websites include Google for searching information, Digital for online shopping, and Opera for streaming videos. These websites are widely used because they offer useful services that meet people's daily needs.

× Actually there are all the kinds of websites available.

✓ Actually, there are all kinds of websites available.

The phrase 'all the kinds of websites' is incorrect; 'all kinds of websites' is the correct expression to indicate various types. The definite article 'the' is unnecessary here.

× most people can get lots of information on the billing of an eye and Amazon, Twitter are really well known and most people around the world can get information and can buy lots of thing via Amazon.

✓ Most people can get lots of information in the blink of an eye. Amazon and Twitter are really well known, and most people around the world can get information and buy lots of things via Amazon.

The phrase 'billing of an eye' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'in the blink of an eye'. Also, 'lots of thing' should be plural 'lots of things' to agree in number.

× Amazon, Twitter are really well known and most people around the world can get information and can buy lots of thing via Amazon.

✓ Amazon and Twitter are really well known, and most people around the world can get information and buy lots of things via Amazon.

When listing items, 'and' should be used between the last two items. Also, avoid repeating 'can' unnecessarily for smoother sentence flow.

× And I I like this website and it doesn't have any technical hedge.

✓ And I like this website and it doesn't have any technical hitches.

The phrase 'technical hedge' is incorrect; the correct term is 'technical hitches'. Also, the repeated 'I' is a mistake.

× So it's really important for me I can use this search engine to be update.

✓ So it's really important for me to be able to use this search engine to stay updated.

The phrase 'to be update' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to stay updated'. Also, 'for me I can use' is awkward; 'for me to be able to use' is clearer.

× Actually they haven't changed too many items, they prefer to be update is really important for me and I appreciate this this subject.

✓ Actually, they haven't changed too many items; they prefer to be updated, which is really important for me, and I appreciate this aspect.

The phrase 'prefer to be update' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to be updated' (past participle). Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs punctuation for clarity.

× And also they sometimes change the background and they use different colors is really important and enjoyable because it prevents to be to get bored.

✓ Also, they sometimes change the background and use different colours, which is really important and enjoyable because it prevents boredom.

The phrase 'prevents to be to get bored' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'prevents boredom'. Also, 'and' is overused; 'which' introduces the explanation better.

× Most people can prefer to buy lots of things from this website and the the last but not least is opera.

✓ Most people prefer to buy lots of things from this website, and last but not least is Opera.

'Can prefer' is incorrect; 'prefer' is sufficient. Also, 'the the' is a typo. 'Opera' as a proper noun should be capitalised.

× Uh, most people can watch this website to.

✓ Uh, most people can watch content on this website too.

The phrase 'watch this website to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' and 'too' (meaning also) is the correct word, not 'to'.