Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。具体的な内容を明確にし、文法を正しく使うことが必要です。また、冗長な表現を避け、簡潔に答える練習をしましょう。

例: I often visit YouTube to watch videos posted by well-known baseball players because I am enthusiastic about baseball. Their talks are very interesting to me.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、表現が不自然で文法的な誤りがあります。具体的な理由を明確にし、自然な英語表現を使うことが大切です。接続詞を使って文をつなげる練習もしましょう。

例: My favorite website is the MLB official site because it provides many statistics and historical information about baseball. I really enjoy spending time there.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。正しい時制と語順を使い、情報を明確に伝える練習が必要です。簡潔で論理的な回答を心がけましょう。

例: Yes, last year Twitter changed a lot because a famous entrepreneur took over the site, and its name was changed to X.

提案: 内容は理解できますが、「movies」や「efforts」の使い方が不自然です。より適切な語彙を使い、文を自然につなげる練習をしましょう。

例: In my country, many people use social media like TikTok and Instagram. Especially young people like to post videos and share their activities there.

× Almost every day I visit YouTube to what's many movies and posted by a well known athletes because I'm enthusiastic about baseball and players talk is very attractive for me.

✓ Almost every day I visit YouTube to watch many movies posted by well-known athletes because I'm enthusiastic about baseball and players' talks are very attractive to me.

The phrase 'to what's many movies' is incorrect; it should be 'to watch many movies' because 'watch' is the correct verb here and should be in base form after 'to'. Also, 'posted by a well known athletes' has a singular article 'a' with plural 'athletes', which is incorrect; it should be 'posted by well-known athletes'. Additionally, 'players talk is very attractive for me' should be 'players' talks are very attractive to me' to show possession and correct plural form and preposition.

× Almost every day I visit YouTube to what's many movies and posted by a well known athletes because I'm enthusiastic about baseball and players talk is very attractive for me.

✓ Almost every day I visit YouTube to watch many movies posted by well-known athletes because I'm enthusiastic about baseball and players' talks are very attractive to me.

The phrase 'a well known athletes' incorrectly mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'athletes'. It should be 'well-known athletes' without 'a'. Also, 'players talk' should be plural possessive 'players' talks' to indicate talks belonging to players.

× Almost every day I visit YouTube to what's many movies and posted by a well known athletes because I'm enthusiastic about baseball and players talk is very attractive for me.

✓ Almost every day I visit YouTube to watch many movies posted by well-known athletes because I'm enthusiastic about baseball and players' talks are very attractive to me.

The phrase 'attractive for me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'attractive to me' when expressing attraction or appeal.

× My favorite website is MLB offshore sites because there are numerous numbers of statistics and history where it goes over to baseball, which makes me very enjoyable.

✓ My favorite website is the MLB offshore site because there are numerous statistics and historical data about baseball, which makes me very happy.

'MLB offshore sites' is plural but 'My favorite website is' is singular; they should agree. Also, 'numerous numbers of statistics' is redundant; 'numerous statistics' is correct. 'History where it goes over to baseball' is awkward; 'historical data about baseball' is clearer. 'Makes me very enjoyable' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me very happy' or 'I enjoy it very much'.

× My favorite website is MLB offshore sites because there are numerous numbers of statistics and history where it goes over to baseball, which makes me very enjoyable.

✓ My favorite website is the MLB offshore site because there are numerous statistics and historical data about baseball, which makes me very happy.

'Makes me very enjoyable' is incorrect because 'enjoyable' describes things, not feelings. The correct expression is 'makes me very happy' or 'I enjoy it very much'.

× My favorite website is MLB offshore sites because there are numerous numbers of statistics and history where it goes over to baseball, which makes me very enjoyable.

✓ My favorite website is the MLB offshore site because there are numerous statistics and historical data about baseball, which makes me very happy.

'Where it goes over to baseball' is incorrect preposition usage; 'about baseball' is the correct phrase to indicate the subject matter.

× Yes, last year my favorite social media Twitter changed a lot because one of the most famous entrepreneurs you must started running at that site and name it had changed to X.

✓ Yes, last year my favorite social media Twitter changed a lot because one of the most famous entrepreneurs started running that site and its name was changed to X.

'You must started running' is incorrect; 'must' should not be used with past tense 'started'. Also, 'name it had changed to X' is awkward; correct passive form is 'its name was changed to X'.

× Yes, last year my favorite social media Twitter changed a lot because one of the most famous entrepreneurs you must started running at that site and name it had changed to X.

✓ Yes, last year my favorite social media Twitter changed a lot because one of the most famous entrepreneurs started running that site and its name was changed to X.

'Running at that site' is incorrect preposition usage; the correct phrase is 'running that site' without 'at'.

× In my country, Japanese people like to use some social media such as Tiktok or Instagram. Especially young people try to post some movies and efforts there.

✓ In my country, Japanese people like to use social media such as TikTok or Instagram. Especially young people try to post some videos and their efforts there.

'Some social media' is incorrect because 'social media' is uncountable; 'social media' without 'some' is better. 'Movies' is incorrect for short clips; 'videos' is appropriate. 'Efforts' needs a possessive pronoun 'their' to clarify meaning.