Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta es un poco confusa y contiene errores gramaticales, como el uso incorrecto de tiempos verbales y preposiciones. Además, la respuesta es un poco larga y redundante. Te sugiero que respondas directamente a la pregunta con una oración clara y luego añadas detalles específicos usando conectores para mejorar la coherencia.

例: I often visit websites like IMDb and YouTube because I am interested in learning about upcoming movies and the latest news about actors.

提案: La respuesta es vaga y contiene errores en la elección de palabras, como "really full application" que no es natural en inglés. Te recomiendo usar vocabulario más preciso y explicar por qué te gusta el sitio web con detalles específicos y conectores para que la respuesta sea más clara y natural.

例: My favourite website is Instagram because it offers a wide variety of content, from photos and videos to news and entertainment, which keeps me engaged on many topics.

提案: La respuesta es demasiado corta y poco clara, además de que la pregunta no se responde directamente. Te sugiero que respondas con una oración clara y luego expliques con detalles específicos usando conectores para que la respuesta sea más completa y natural.

例: No, I haven't changed the websites I visit recently because they already provide all the information I need, except for daily news websites which I check regularly.

提案: La respuesta es confusa y contiene errores gramaticales y de vocabulario, lo que dificulta la comprensión. Te recomiendo que estructures la respuesta con una oración clara y uses vocabulario adecuado para expresar tus ideas, además de añadir detalles específicos y conectores para mejorar la coherencia.

例: In my country, social media websites are more popular than traditional websites because people prefer to connect and share information through platforms like Facebook and Instagram.

× I visited like IMDb, YouTube and also social media in general because I was really intrigued into what is the next step of some actors and also what kind of movie it's gonna be released soon.

✓ I visit websites like IMDb, YouTube and also social media in general because I am really intrigued by what the next step of some actors is and also what kind of movie is going to be released soon.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'visited' when the question asks about websites the student often visits, implying present habitual action. Also, 'intrigued into' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'intrigued by'. Additionally, 'it's gonna be released' is informal and should be 'is going to be released' for clarity and correctness.

× It's Instagram because I think it's a really full application to basically every topic that you have in mind.

✓ It's Instagram because I think it's a very comprehensive application for basically every topic that you have in mind.

The phrase 'really full application' is awkward and incorrect. The adjective 'full' does not properly describe an application. 'Comprehensive' is a better adjective to express that the application covers many topics. Also, 'to basically every topic' should be 'for basically every topic' to use the correct preposition.

× Without counting the news of the day? No, really.

✓ Without counting the news of the day, no, really.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses a question mark incorrectly. It should be a single sentence with a comma to connect the clauses properly.

× It's most readable that the country, the people of the country have a connection with the social media more than that website.

✓ It is most likely that the people of the country have a stronger connection with social media than with that website.

The original sentence is confusing and incorrectly structured. 'Most readable' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'most likely'. Also, 'the country' is repeated unnecessarily. The comparison is unclear and needs to be rephrased for clarity.

× I think it's a very obsolete in the current period.

✓ I think it is very obsolete at the present time.

The article 'a' before 'very obsolete' is incorrect because 'obsolete' is an adjective and does not require an article here. Also, 'in the current period' is awkward; 'at the present time' is more natural.