Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add a reason or example. For instance, mention the type of websites and why you visit them, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: I often visit news websites such as the BBC homepage because I want to stay informed about current events in the UK, especially since I started studying in London.

提案: Improve your vocabulary and sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific. Also, correct minor errors like 'statics' to 'statistics' and clarify your points.

例: My favourite website is the official MLB site because it provides detailed statistics. For example, I enjoy looking at Shohei Ohtani's records, who is one of the most famous athletes in the country.

提案: Work on grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your points clearly. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain the change you noticed with specific details.

例: No, the MLB official website hasn't changed much recently. However, over time, I have noticed that it has become easier to search for many records.

提案: Avoid unclear phrases like 'And how to alternate?'. Provide a clear and complete answer with specific details and linking words. Also, explain why some websites are popular and mention alternatives if relevant.

例: In Japan, websites like Yahoo Japan are popular for searching the latest news and trends. However, this site is not accessible in Europe or the US, where people use other news platforms instead.

× I usually visit, uh, BBC, the homepage because I have to gain a lot of knowledge about the UK because I started learning in London.

✓ I usually visit, uh, the BBC homepage because I have to gain a lot of knowledge about the UK since I started learning in London.

The phrase 'BBC, the homepage' is incorrect; it should be 'the BBC homepage' to correctly refer to the website. Also, 'because I started learning in London' is better expressed as 'since I started learning in London' to indicate the reason more naturally.

× My favorite website is MLBS official website because there are many statics of which I can enjoy a lot.

✓ My favourite website is the MLB official website because there are many statistics which I can enjoy a lot.

The word 'MLBS' is a typo; it should be 'MLB'. 'Statics' is incorrect; the correct word is 'statistics'. Also, 'of which I can enjoy a lot' is awkward; it is better to say 'which I can enjoy a lot'. Additionally, 'favorite' should be 'favourite' in British English.

× No, I don't think there are many changes in the MLB official website, but in the long run I realize that many records has been easy to search for.

✓ No, I don't think there are many changes on the MLB official website, but in the long run I realise that many records have become easy to search for.

The verb 'has' does not agree with the plural subject 'records'; it should be 'have'. Also, 'has been easy to search for' is awkward; 'have become easy to search for' is more natural. 'Realize' should be 'realise' in British English. The preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to a website.

× In Japan, many people search for the latest news and the current torrents by using Yahoo Japan, but in European countries and the US we can't use that homepage.

✓ In Japan, many people search for the latest news and current torrents using Yahoo Japan, but in European countries and the US we can't use that website.

The phrase 'by using' is unnecessarily wordy; 'using' is sufficient. 'That homepage' is better expressed as 'that website' for clarity. Also, 'the current torrents' is unclear; if 'torrents' refers to something specific, it should be clarified, but here it is kept as is.