Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and coherent. Avoid abrupt topic shifts like mentioning 'AS skills' without explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: I think mathematics was the most challenging subject during my school days because I found numerical problems quite difficult to solve. However, I have been practicing regularly to improve my skills, which has helped me gain more confidence.

提案: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and better coherence. Avoid incomplete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to express your thoughts more naturally and fluently.

例: Yes, I like to challenge myself because it helps me focus better. When I set a challenge, I prepare by making goals, creating charts, and writing notes to track my progress.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid unnecessary words. Also, explain your reasons fully and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Honestly, I would not like to live a life full of challenges because I am an introverted person and prefer a calm and peaceful environment where I can focus without much social interaction.

提案: Your answer has many incomplete sentences and lacks clarity. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about how you stay motivated and confident.

例: I usually deal with challenges by staying motivated and confident that everything will turn out well in the end. I believe that every problem has a positive solution, so I try to stay optimistic.

× I think mathematics was the most challenging subject during my school days because I found numerical problems quite difficult to solve.

✓ I think mathematics is the most challenging subject during my school days because I found numerical problems quite difficult to solve.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I think' with past tense 'was'. Since the student is referring to a past period 'during my school days', 'was' is correct. However, 'I think' is present tense expressing current opinion, so the sentence is acceptable. No correction needed here.

× However, I am currently focusing on improving AS skills, practicing regularly.

✓ However, I am currently focusing on improving my AS skills by practicing regularly.

The original sentence lacks a clear connection between 'improving AS skills' and 'practicing regularly'. Adding 'my' before 'AS skills' and 'by' before 'practicing' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.

× Unless I don't challenge myself, I don't properly focus on the particular thing.

✓ Unless I challenge myself, I don't properly focus on the particular thing.

Using 'Unless I don't challenge myself' is a double negative and incorrect. 'Unless' already implies a negative condition, so 'don't' should be removed to avoid confusion.

× But after challenging myself as thought preparing for it, I. Make a goal.

✓ But after challenging myself, as though preparing for it, I make a goal.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correcting 'thought' to 'as though' and combining the fragments into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× To achieve it, I make some charts and write notes on it.

✓ To achieve it, I make some charts and write notes on them.

The pronoun 'it' is used twice referring to different things. 'Charts' and 'notes' are plural, so 'them' should be used instead of 'it' to maintain agreement.

× Nora will definitely not like to live a life that has a lot of challenges because.

✓ I will definitely not like to live a life that has a lot of challenges because.

The student refers to 'Nora' instead of themselves, which is inconsistent. Changing 'Nora' to 'I' aligns the pronoun with the speaker.

× I'll tell you honestly.

✓ I'll tell you honestly.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× I'm an introverted person.

✓ I'm an introverted person.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× And I don't like to talk to people so much and I want it to be back on and.

✓ I don't like to talk to people much, and I want to be alone.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it to 'I don't like to talk to people much, and I want to be alone.' makes the meaning clear and grammatically correct.

× I often deal with challenges in daily life with motivation, had confidence that everything will.

✓ I often deal with challenges in daily life with motivation and have confidence that everything will be fine.

The original sentence is incomplete and mixes tenses. Changing 'had' to 'have' and completing the sentence improves clarity and tense consistency.

× Be good at last.

✓ Be good at last.

This fragment is incomplete. It should be combined with the previous sentence as 'have confidence that everything will be good at last.'

× If something is going through.

✓ If something is going wrong.

The phrase 'going through' is incomplete and unclear. 'Going wrong' is a more appropriate expression for problems or challenges.

× It will. Have a good or positive way out.

✓ It will have a good or positive way out.

The sentence is fragmented. Combining the parts into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.