Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "very challenging" and "quite a challenging subject". Also, correct minor errors like "make Cal make complex calculations" to "make complex calculations". Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Math was the most challenging subject for me because I find calculations difficult, especially since my school didn't allow the use of smartphones or calculators for complex problems.

提案: Your answer shows good content but has some grammatical errors and redundancy, such as "keep helps me in keeping a healthy mindset mindset towards." Try to simplify and clarify your sentences. Use linking words like "because" to explain reasons clearly.

例: Yes, I like to challenge myself every day. For example, when I go to the gym, I try to exercise harder than the day before because it helps me improve and maintain a healthy mindset.

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear, but it can be more natural by avoiding awkward phrases like "gives me a joy". Instead, say "gives me joy" or "makes me happy." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy living a challenging life because overcoming difficulties gives me joy and motivates me to face even more challenges.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and clear, but avoid filler words like "uh". Also, you can improve coherence by using linking words such as "because" and "so" effectively. Try to be more concise.

例: I usually face challenges head-on because avoiding them only makes things worse. Therefore, I try to overcome them with patience and consistency.

× Well for me math was very challenging because I find calculating very hard and it was not allowed in my school to use smartphones or calculators to make Cal make complex calculations.

✓ Well, for me, math was very challenging because I found calculating very hard and it was not allowed in my school to use smartphones or calculators to make complex calculations.

The pronoun 'I find' should be in past tense 'I found' to match the past tense context of the sentence. Also, 'Cal make' seems to be a typo and should be removed for clarity.

× Yes, I like to challenge myself every day I whenever I go to the gym, I like to exercise a lot harder than the previous day, which gives me a lot of room to improve and keep helps me in keeping a healthy mindset mindset towards.

✓ Yes, I like to challenge myself every day. Whenever I go to the gym, I like to exercise a lot harder than the previous day, which gives me a lot of room to improve and helps me keep a healthy mindset.

The sentence had redundant words and incorrect phrasing such as 'keep helps me in keeping' which should be corrected to 'helps me keep'. Also, 'mindset mindset towards' is repetitive and incomplete, so it was simplified to 'healthy mindset'.