Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors, which affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to directly state the subject you find challenging and explain why, using clear and correct English. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'searching for Korea' and 'which there is no'.

例: I find mathematics and science the most challenging subjects at school because they often have only one correct answer, which I find boring. In contrast, I enjoy literature and social studies because they allow for more discussion and interpretation.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct phrases like 'sense of conservation' to 'a conservative approach'. Also, avoid repeating 'difficult' unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I enjoy challenging myself, but at work, it's hard to take on new challenges because my boss has a conservative approach to tasks, which limits opportunities for innovation.

提案: Your answer conveys your opinion but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and use plural forms correctly. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I think a life full of challenges is very exciting because it offers opportunities to grow stronger. Therefore, whenever I can, I always take on new challenges myself.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using correct phrases such as 'ask for advice' and by adding linking words for coherence. Also, try to vary your vocabulary to avoid repetition.

例: When I face significant challenges, I usually ask experienced people for advice to help me overcome them. Without their support, it would be much harder to deal with such difficulties.

× I think mathematics and the science is very difficult for me because I feel bored when I I'm not searching for Korea and only one answer.

✓ I think mathematics and science are very difficult for me because I feel bored when I am not searching for Korea and only one answer.

The phrase 'mathematics and the science is' contains a singular verb 'is' with a plural subject 'mathematics and science'. The correct verb should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject. Also, 'the science' should be 'science' without 'the' as it refers to the subject in general.

× I think mathematics and the science is very difficult for me because I feel bored when I I'm not searching for Korea and only one answer.

✓ I think mathematics and science are very difficult for me because I feel bored when I am not searching for knowledge and only one answer.

The phrase 'searching for Korea' seems incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. It should be 'searching for knowledge' to make sense in context. Also, 'I I'm' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'I am'.

× On the other hand, I love to study literature and social studies, which there is no.

✓ On the other hand, I love to study literature and social studies, which have none of that.

The phrase 'which there is no' is incomplete and unclear. It should be rephrased to 'which have none of that' to indicate that literature and social studies do not have the difficulties mentioned earlier.

× Yes, I prefer doing challenges, but in my workplace it is difficult to make another challenge because my boss has a sense of conservation in the work, so it's difficult.

✓ Yes, I prefer taking on challenges, but in my workplace it is difficult to make another challenge because my boss has a sense of conservatism in the work, so it's difficult.

The phrase 'prefer doing challenges' is awkward; 'prefer taking on challenges' is more natural. Also, 'sense of conservation' is incorrect; the correct term is 'sense of conservatism' meaning resistance to change.

× Yes, I think life with a lot of challenges, umm very exciting because they can offer me the opportunities to grow much stronger.

✓ Yes, I think a life with a lot of challenges is very exciting because it can offer me opportunities to grow much stronger.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'life with a lot of challenges'. Also, 'they' incorrectly refers to 'challenges' when 'life' is the subject, so 'it' is correct. 'The opportunities' should be 'opportunities' as it is general.

× So when I can do it myself, I always do challenge.

✓ So when I can do it myself, I always take on challenges.

The phrase 'do challenge' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'take on challenges' or 'accept challenges' to indicate engaging with challenges.

× When I face big challenges in my life, I sometimes ask other experienced people advice so that I can overcome them.

✓ When I face big challenges in my life, I sometimes ask other experienced people for advice so that I can overcome them.

The verb 'ask' requires the preposition 'for' when requesting something, so it should be 'ask for advice'.