Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Try to directly state the subject and explain why it was challenging using specific details. Avoid unclear phrases and improve sentence structure for naturalness.

例: I found philosophy the most challenging subject at school because it required understanding various complex ideas from different philosophers. This was difficult for me as it involved abstract thinking and critical analysis, which I wasn't used to.

提案: Try to reduce hesitation and use more confident language. Begin with a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy challenging myself because it helps me grow. For instance, I often try new activities that push me beyond my comfort zone, which builds my confidence and skills.

提案: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Use precise vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases like 'Sony excitement'. Explain your preference with specific reasons and link your ideas logically.

例: I prefer a balanced life with some challenges and some calm moments. While challenges bring excitement and help me grow, I also value quiet time to relax and recharge.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words. Provide specific examples of how you manage challenges to enrich your response.

例: I have improved in managing daily challenges by staying organised and staying positive. For example, when I face a difficult task, I break it down into smaller steps, which makes it easier to handle and learn from.

× I did them lied the fact of learning different approach for different philosophers.

✓ I disliked the fact of learning different approaches for different philosophers.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'did them lied' which is grammatically incorrect. The correct verb is 'disliked' to express a negative feeling in past tense. Also, 'approach' should be plural 'approaches' because it refers to multiple philosophers, each with different approaches.

× For me it was quite tense.

✓ For me, it was quite intense.

The word 'tense' is an adjective describing a state of nervousness or stress, but here the intended meaning is likely 'intense' to describe the challenging nature of the subject. Also, a comma after 'For me' improves clarity.

× I'm getting better, umm, and I think now I like more to challenge myself than before.

✓ I'm getting better, umm, and I think now I like to challenge myself more than before.

The adverb 'more' should be placed after the verb phrase 'like to challenge myself' to maintain correct word order in English.

× Uh, I think it's important to push myself out of my comfort zone when I'm experiencing this kind of challenges.

✓ Uh, I think it's important to push myself out of my comfort zone when I'm experiencing these kinds of challenges.

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' should be plural 'these' to agree with the plural noun 'challenges'. Also, 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'challenges'.

× I prefer to have a life that it has some.

✓ I prefer to have a life that has some.

The phrase 'that it has' is redundant; 'that has' is sufficient and grammatically correct.

× A 5050% of challenges or I would say that more equal life.

✓ A 50-50% balance of challenges, or I would say a more balanced life.

'5050%' is incorrectly written and unclear. It should be '50-50%' to indicate an equal balance. Also, 'more equal life' is awkward; 'more balanced life' is clearer and more natural.

× So Sony excitement is good, but at the same time I prefer to have some quiet space.

✓ So some excitement is good, but at the same time I prefer to have some quiet space.

The word 'Sony' is a typo and should be 'some' to correctly express quantity.

× I'm getting better in management, in managing challenges in my day-to-day life.

✓ I'm getting better at managing challenges in my day-to-day life.

The correct preposition after 'better' when referring to skills is 'at', not 'in'. Also, 'management' is a noun, but here the verb form 'managing' fits better.

× So now I understand that it's important to have challenges in your life because that is teaching you how to become better in certain aspects of your life.

✓ So now I understand that it's important to have challenges in your life because they teach you how to become better in certain aspects of your life.

The pronoun 'that' is singular but refers to plural 'challenges'. It should be replaced with 'they' to agree in number. Also, 'is teaching' should be 'teach' to match plural subject and present simple tense for general truth.