Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about why history is challenging.

例: I think history is the most challenging subject at school because it requires memorizing many names of ancient buildings, which can be quite difficult. Additionally, understanding the historical context adds to the complexity.

提案: Improve sentence fluency and grammar. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide clearer reasons for liking challenges.

例: Yes, I like to challenge myself because challenges motivate me to work harder. Moreover, they help me set goals and achieve something special in life.

提案: Avoid grammatical errors and unclear pronoun references. Use linking words to contrast ideas and provide clearer explanations.

例: No, I do not like to live a life full of challenges. Although some challenges can improve life, too many challenges can make a person feel depressed.

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and avoid repetition. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically and provide specific strategies you use to handle challenges.

例: I usually deal with challenges positively. For example, I stay calm and avoid rushing when facing difficulties. Then, I carefully think before making decisions.

× I think history is the most challenging at school because in history we have to learn lot of lot of name of buildings like of ancient period which are very difficult to memorize.

✓ I think history is the most challenging at school because in history we have to learn a lot of names of buildings from the ancient period which are very difficult to memorize.

The phrase 'lot of lot of name' is incorrect. 'Lot' should be preceded by 'a' to form 'a lot of', and 'name' should be plural 'names' because it refers to multiple buildings. Also, 'like of ancient period' is incorrect; it should be 'from the ancient period' to indicate origin or time.

× Yes, I like to challenge myself because if we get a challenge then we do work hard and we get aim in life and to achieve something special.

✓ Yes, I like to challenge myself because if we get a challenge, then we work hard and achieve our aims in life and something special.

The phrase 'we do work hard' is awkward; 'we work hard' is more natural. Also, 'we get aim in life' is incorrect; it should be 'we achieve our aims in life' to express reaching goals. The modal verb 'do' is unnecessary here.

× No, I do not like to live a life that has a lot of challenges. Even though challenges make her life perfect but lot of challenges makes the man depressed.

✓ No, I do not like to live a life that has a lot of challenges. Even though challenges make life perfect, a lot of challenges make a person depressed.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'her life' and 'the man' which are inconsistent pronouns. Also, 'lot of challenges makes' should be 'a lot of challenges make' because 'challenges' is plural and requires plural verb agreement. 'A person' is more general and appropriate here.

× I usually deal with challenges in my life positively. I never I never get in hurry when I when I face a difficulty. I keep ourselves kind, calm and myself calm and took that decision.

✓ I usually deal with challenges in my life positively. I never get in a hurry when I face a difficulty. I keep myself kind and calm and make thoughtful decisions.

The sentence has pronoun errors: 'I keep ourselves' is incorrect; it should be 'I keep myself'. Also, 'myself calm' is redundant after 'keep myself calm'. The phrase 'took that decision' is past tense and inconsistent with the present tense context; 'make thoughtful decisions' fits better. Repetition of 'I never' and 'when I' should be avoided for clarity.