Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific reasons with a linking word (e.g., "because" or "as"). Use correct plural/singular forms and articles ("math is the most challenging subject"; "many challenges" not "many challenge"). Keep it under five sentences.

例: I think math is the most challenging subject at school because it requires high concentration and abstract thinking. For example, solving algebra problems needs careful steps and strong logical thinking, which many students find difficult.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words ("actually," repeated). Use one clear topic sentence and one supporting detail to explain why, with a linking word (e.g., "because"). Correct awkward phrasing ("I like you, a challenge" should be "I like a challenge").

例: Yes, I enjoy challenging myself because overcoming difficulties gives me confidence. For instance, when I complete a difficult project, I feel proud and more motivated to try harder tasks.

提案: Reduce hesitations and redundant words. Give a clear opinion in one sentence then add a specific reason using a linking word ("because" or "as"). Use correct word forms and smoother phrasing ("nowadays" not "in nowadays"). Limit to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I do, because modern life brings constant changes due to technology, so people face new challenges every day. For example, learning new apps or adapting to remote work often requires quick skill updates.

提案: Give a clear, structured response: start with a topic sentence describing your main strategy, then add one specific example or step using linking words ("first," "then," "if"). Fix grammar ("I get ready" or "I prepare myself", "I'm not afraid"), and avoid repeating phrases like "actually".

例: I usually prepare in advance for likely problems and stay calm if something unexpected happens. For instance, I plan my schedule and backup options, and if I face an unprepared challenge, I stay calm and tackle it step by step.

× I think math is it challenging, is the most challenging subject at the school because we have challenge, many challenge in maths and we have to use our brain very much and I think the math is very challenging and important.

✓ I think math is the most challenging subject at school because we have many challenges in math and we have to use our brains a lot; I think math is very challenging and important.

The original sentence has poor word order, extra words, and repetition. Errors include unnecessary 'it' after 'is', wrong article use 'the school' (use 'school' without 'the' in this context), noun count errors 'challenge, many challenge' should be 'many challenges', inconsistent singular/plural 'maths' vs 'math', and awkward phrasing 'use our brain very much' which should be 'use our brains a lot'. Combine clauses with punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: remove redundant words, use plural where needed, and simplify phrasing.

× Actually, yes, when I challenge myself I feel better and when actually when I win the challenge or success in the challenge, I feel very proud of myself.

✓ Actually, yes. When I challenge myself I feel better, and when I win a challenge or succeed in a challenge I feel very proud of myself.

Problems include repetition of 'actually' and incorrect noun forms: 'win the challenge or success in the challenge' mixes noun and verb forms. Use 'win a challenge' or 'succeed in a challenge'. Also add punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: remove redundant words, choose consistent verb or noun forms, and use articles correctly ('a challenge').

× And this field gave me a sense of self-confidence and I like you, a challenge.

✓ This experience gave me a sense of self-confidence and I like a challenge.

'Field' is an odd word here; 'experience' fits better. Tense should be past 'gave' is okay if referring to a past experience; keep consistent. 'I like you, a challenge' is incorrect pronoun placement and punctuation; it should be 'I like a challenge.' Suggestion: choose appropriate noun and correct pronoun placement; remove stray 'you,'. If referring to current preference, use present tense 'gives'.

× Actually, yes and uh, in, uh, my, uh, life, everything is challenging in nowadays, uh, because of the, the development of the technology, uh, you have to face many challenges, uh, all of the day in daily life and uh, we have to prepare ourselves for these challenges, uh, daily.

✓ Actually, yes. In my life, everything is challenging nowadays because of the development of technology; you have to face many challenges every day in daily life and we have to prepare ourselves for these challenges.

Remove filler sounds ('uh') and extra commas. 'in nowadays' is incorrect; use 'nowadays' without 'in'. 'the development of the technology' should be 'the development of technology' or just 'technological development'. 'all of the day' should be 'every day'. Simplify and combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: eliminate fillers, use correct collocations ('nowadays', 'every day'), and avoid unnecessary articles.

× Actually, I try to prepare myself for facing the daily challenges and I actually most of the time I ready for them and if one time I don't ready for the challenge, I don't have afraid and I fight with the challenges and most of the time.

✓ I try to prepare myself to face daily challenges, and most of the time I am ready for them. If one time I am not ready for a challenge, I am not afraid and I fight the challenge.

Multiple issues: 'prepare myself for facing' is awkward — use 'prepare myself to face'. 'I actually most of the time I ready' lacks a verb 'am' and has redundant 'actually' and 'I' twice. 'I don't have afraid' is incorrect; use 'I am not afraid'. 'fight with the challenges' should be 'fight the challenge' or 'face the challenges'. Also avoid ending with 'and most of the time' without completion. Suggestion: ensure correct auxiliary verbs (am), use 'to' + verb for purpose, and choose correct negation 'am not afraid'.