Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the subject, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitation and repetitions and use correct nouns (e.g., “presentation,” “project,” “debate”).

例: I find English public speaking the most challenging subject at school because it requires preparing long speeches and speaking confidently in front of classmates. For example, we must write reports, practice presentations, and join debate activities, which demand both good organization and strong speaking skills.

提案: Answer directly and expand with one clear reason and a specific example. Replace vague phrases and fillers, and use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid unclear fragments like “be good *** with your classroom.”

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy small challenges because they help me develop useful skills. For example, preparing a classroom presentation taught me how to organize information clearly and improved my public speaking confidence.

提案: Give a concise, consistent opinion and support it with one or two clear reasons. Avoid contradictory statements and reduce hesitation. Use linking phrases like “however” if you want to present contrast.

例: I prefer a life with some challenges because, although they can be stressful, challenges help me grow and learn new skills. For instance, overcoming difficult projects at university taught me time management and problem-solving.

提案: Describe a clear step-by-step strategy using concrete actions and linking words (first, then, finally). Avoid vague phrases like “fix my emotion” and unclear endings. Give a specific example of an action you take.

例: First, I try to calm down by taking deep breaths and a short break. Then I make a simple plan to solve the problem, such as breaking the task into smaller steps and setting a time limit. Finally, I review my progress and adjust the plan if needed.

× Oh, there's some, there's a little subject I think is more challenging at school, such as, uh, you need to finish a report, a speech and a engagement.

✓ Oh, there are a few subjects I think are more challenging at school, such as when you need to finish a report, give a speech, and prepare an engagement.

The original uses 'there's' (there is) with a plural idea 'some'/'a little subject' which is incorrect. Use 'there are' for plural (Grammar Problem Type ID 3). Also 'a engagement' is wrong article and noun form; use 'an engagement' or rephrase. 'I think is' should agree with plural 'subjects' so change to 'I think are'. Suggestions: identify singular vs plural and match 'there is/there are' accordingly, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× a engagement

✓ an engagement

The noun 'engagement' begins with a vowel sound, so the indefinite article should be 'an' rather than 'a' (Grammar Problem Type ID 22). Suggestion: choose 'a' before consonant sounds and 'an' before vowel sounds.

× you need to take part of, umm, campaigns activities.

✓ you need to take part in campaign activities.

The verb phrase should be 'take part in' followed by a plural noun 'campaign activities'. 'Take part of' is incorrect preposition and 'campaigns activities' duplicates plural marking. This is a preposition and noun form error (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Suggestion: memorize fixed expressions like 'take part in' and use the correct noun form.

× Yes I do. I think a little challenge can make yourself learn more skills.

✓ Yes, I do. I think a small challenge can help you learn more skills.

Using 'yourself' after 'make' is unnatural here; the sentence should address 'you' or use passive/causative structures. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/reflexive pronoun (Grammar Problem Type ID 12 and 15). Also 'a little challenge' is better as 'a small challenge' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'you' when directly addressing the listener and avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns.

× For example you can learn how to be good *** with your classroom and you can learn some skills about some reports and speaking skills.

✓ For example, you can learn how to behave well in your classroom and you can learn skills for writing reports and speaking.

'Good with your classroom' is incorrect; say 'behave well in your classroom' or 'be good in class'. 'Skills about some reports' is awkward; use 'skills for writing reports'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and awkward phrasing (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Suggestion: use correct prepositions like 'in' for location and 'for' to indicate purpose.

× Uh, seems like, I guess I will to umm, I'll just live a life that has a lot of challenges.

✓ Uh, it seems like I guess I will, um, I'll just live a life that has a lot of challenges.

The original contains the extra infinitival marker 'to' after 'will' ('I will to'), which is incorrect; modal 'will' is followed by the bare infinitive. This is a verb form error (Grammar Problem Type ID 9). Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'to' after modal verbs and streamline filler words.

× Umm, because honestly, I don't like challenge, but but the challenge, uh, is good for your, umm, study and your life.

✓ Umm, because honestly, I don't like challenges, but challenges are good for your studies and your life.

'I don't like challenge' needs plural 'challenges' or 'a challenge'. Also 'the challenge ... is good for your study' is better as 'challenges are good for your studies'. This is an article/plural and subject-verb agreement issue (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 22/27). Suggestion: choose singular with 'a' or plural consistently and match verbs to plural subjects.

× You can learn lots of skills for, for.

✓ You can learn lots of skills from them.

The original sentence stops abruptly and repeats 'for'; it lacks a clear object or preposition. This is a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Suggestion: complete the thought by specifying the source: 'from them' or 'from these challenges'.

× Uh, let me think, uh, firstly I, I guess I feel it's bad.

✓ Uh, let me think. First, I guess I feel bad about it.

'I feel it's bad' is awkward; say 'I feel bad about it' to express emotion about a situation. This is a present tense/structure choice issue (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 26). Suggestion: use 'feel bad about it' for clarity.

× Uh, then I will, uh, fix my emotion and create some ways to deal with them.

✓ Then I will control my emotions and create some ways to deal with them.

'Fix my emotion' is not natural; use 'control my emotions' or 'manage my emotions'. This is incorrect verb collocation (Grammar Problem Type ID 26/13). Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'manage emotions' or 'control feelings'.

× For example, uh, I need to take a rest, then I will do a place.

✓ For example, I need to take a rest, then I will go to a quiet place.

'Take a rest' is acceptable but 'do a place' is incorrect; likely intended 'go to a place'. This is article/word choice and sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type ID 22 and 26). Suggestion: use 'go to a place' or 'find a quiet place' and be specific about the action.