Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more coherent by clearly stating your situation and using linking words to connect ideas. Also, try to finish your thoughts fully.

例: I didn't go anywhere for my last holiday because my family was moving from the Emirates to Iraq. However, I stayed in the UAE to complete my studies last year. Now, I have graduated and hope to find a good job soon.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make it more natural and fluent.

例: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they provide a relaxing break from daily routines. Moreover, I prefer to travel to other countries during holidays so that I can explore different cultures and broaden my horizons.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Provide specific details about what activities you do and use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

例: I really like the summer holiday because it lasts a long time. During this period, I enjoy playing football and practicing other activities such as going to the gym and painting.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to organize your answer and provide more specific details about your activities.

例: During holidays, I usually watch football matches and play football games at Al Majaz park near my house. Additionally, I go to the gym and sometimes do activities like painting.

提案: Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more fluent by finishing your thoughts and using linking words to explain your preferences clearly.

例: It depends on what I plan to do at home. If there is a football match or a good movie, I prefer to stay at home and enjoy watching it.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by reducing repetition and using more varied vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your ideas flow better.

例: I prefer a busy holiday because I like to plan my time and set goals. This way, I can practice new skills and work on improving myself day by day.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Make your answer clearer by fully explaining your preference and using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I prefer exciting holidays because I like to set goals and try to achieve them. I believe that every day should be an opportunity to work on yourself and improve.

× Honestly, I I didn't go anywhere 'cause my family was was moving from Emirates to to the to Iraq.

✓ Honestly, I didn't go anywhere because my family was moving from the Emirates to Iraq.

The sentence contains repeated words and missing articles. 'was was' is a repetition error, and 'to to the to Iraq' is incorrect. Also, 'Emirates' should be preceded by 'the' as it is a proper noun referring to a specific place. The word 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in formal speech.

× So but but I stay in the UAE to study the last year.

✓ But I stayed in the UAE to study last year.

The verb 'stay' should be in the past tense 'stayed' to match the time reference 'last year'. Also, repeated words 'but but' should be corrected to a single 'but'. The article 'the' before 'last year' is unnecessary.

× So I'm now graduated and hope to find a good.

✓ So I have now graduated and hope to find a good job.

The phrase 'I'm now graduated' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I have now graduated' using the present perfect tense. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'job' completes the thought logically.

× Yes, I like it because it gives us a relaxed period of time and we enjoy the time we spend on holiday.

✓ Yes, I like it because it gives us a relaxing period of time and we enjoy the time we spend on holiday.

The adjective 'relaxed' is incorrectly used; 'relaxing' is the correct adjective to describe a period that causes relaxation. The preposition 'on' before 'holiday' is acceptable but 'during' could be more precise.

× But I prefer on holidays to travel another country so we can explore many cultures.

✓ But I prefer to travel to another country during holidays so we can explore many cultures.

The phrase 'prefer on holidays to travel another country' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'prefer to travel to another country during holidays'. The preposition 'to' is needed before 'another country'.

× I really like the summer holiday because it's it's a long period of time and I enjoy I enjoy the I enjoy spending the the time, the summer summer holiday playing football and practicing my activities.

✓ I really like the summer holidays because it's a long period of time and I enjoy spending the summer holidays playing football and practicing my activities.

The phrase 'summer holiday' should be plural 'summer holidays' to refer to the entire holiday period. There are repeated words that need removal. The sentence structure is improved by removing redundancies.

× I go such as going.

✓ I do activities such as painting and going out.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'do activities such as painting and going out' completes the thought and improves clarity.

× Mostly I watch football match and play football games in front of my house in a park named Al Majaz and I hit the gym.

✓ Mostly I watch football matches and play football games in front of my house in a park named Al Majaz, and I go to the gym.

'Football match' should be plural 'football matches' to indicate multiple events. 'Hit the gym' is informal; 'go to the gym' is more appropriate. Adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× Usually I I do some activities such as painting and.

✓ Usually I do some activities such as painting and other hobbies.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding 'and other hobbies' completes the sentence logically.

× It depends on what what I will do at home, if there is a football match or.

✓ It depends on what I will do at home, if there is a football match or not.

Repeated word 'what' should be corrected to a single 'what'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'or not' completes the conditional clause.

× A beautiful movie I would stay at home and watch it so can so I can enjoy the time I spend at home and.

✓ If there is a beautiful movie, I would stay at home and watch it so I can enjoy the time I spend at home.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. Adding 'If there is' at the beginning and removing repeated words improves clarity and correctness.

× A busy holiday is better. I prefer to to manage my holiday and put my goals so I can so I can practice and work to to improve myself and get better and better day by day.

✓ A busy holiday is better. I prefer to manage my holiday and set my goals so I can practice and work to improve myself and get better day by day.

Repeated words 'to to' and 'so I can so I can' should be corrected. 'Put my goals' is incorrect; 'set my goals' is the correct phrase.

× Exciting holidays better as I said, putting a goal and try to achieve.

✓ Exciting holidays are better, as I said, putting a goal and trying to achieve it.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' after 'Exciting holidays'. 'Try' should be in the gerund form 'trying' to match 'putting'. Adding 'it' clarifies the object of 'achieve'.

× Is it better than a piece holiday or a calm holiday? Every, every, every day you woke up, you should work on yourself, practice, work.

✓ Is it better than a peaceful holiday or a calm holiday? Every day you wake up, you should work on yourself, practice, and work.

'Piece holiday' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'peaceful'. 'Woke up' should be present tense 'wake up' to match the habitual action. Added 'and' before the last item in the list for correct conjunction.