Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp và tránh lỗi phát âm tên địa điểm. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về các hoạt động bạn đã làm.

例: During my last holiday, I visited Nha Trang, which is famous for its beautiful beaches. I enjoyed various activities there, such as swimming and kayaking, which created unforgettable memories.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ lặp lại và tiếng ừ, ờ quá nhiều. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, rõ ràng. Thêm vào đó, hãy mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách giải thích lý do cụ thể hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because they allow me to relax after long hours of studying. Moreover, I have the opportunity to travel to new places and experience different cultures.

提案: Bạn cần tránh lặp từ và sử dụng thì động từ chính xác. Hãy nói rõ tên ngày lễ bạn thích và giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể, có cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn.

例: My favorite public holiday is the Lunar New Year because it gives me a chance to relax and recharge after hard work. Additionally, I receive lucky money from my family, which is a special tradition.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sắp xếp câu trả lời theo cấu trúc rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ để nối các ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn về các hoạt động bạn làm.

例: During holidays, I usually travel to learn about new cultures. Besides that, I often hang out with my friends by playing sports or simply chatting to relax.

提案: Bạn cần tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy mô tả chi tiết hơn về những điều bạn thích làm khi ở nhà để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: Yes, I enjoy spending my day at home because it is peaceful. I usually relax by sleeping or having meals with my family, which makes me feel comfortable.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng tiếng ừ, ờ và nói rõ ràng hơn. Hãy phân biệt rõ giữa kỳ nghỉ bận rộn và thư giãn, đồng thời cung cấp lý do cụ thể và ví dụ cho lựa chọn của bạn.

例: I prefer a busy holiday because I enjoy spending time with my friends and family. We often play sports together or watch TV, which makes the holiday enjoyable.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, mạch lạc hơn. Hãy giải thích rõ hơn lý do bạn thích kỳ nghỉ yên bình và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể.

例: I would prefer a peaceful holiday because it allows me to relax in a quiet environment after busy days of studying. For example, I can sleep more and enjoy some calm time.

× In my previous vacation I visited Nietzsche where has many beautiful beaches.

✓ In my previous vacation I visited Nietzsche which has many beautiful beaches.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'where has' to describe a place with many beaches. The correct relative pronoun here is 'which' to refer to 'Nietzsche', and 'has' is the correct verb form. 'Where' is not appropriate in this context.

× I do many activities in the bridge like swimming and kayaking is memorable memory.

✓ I did many activities on the beach like swimming and kayaking; it was a memorable experience.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'do' should be past tense 'did' to match the past event; 'bridge' is likely a typo for 'beach'; 'is memorable memory' is incorrect and should be 'it was a memorable experience'. Also, 'in the bridge' should be 'on the beach' as activities are done on a beach.

× Oh, I really love holidays because in holidays I can, uh, be more relaxed after, uh, 10 hours of study and in the vacation, in the vacation I can, uh, go, uh, some more, more places.

✓ Oh, I really love holidays because during holidays I can be more relaxed after 10 hours of study, and during the vacation I can go to more places.

The phrase 'in holidays' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'during holidays'. Also, 'go some more, more places' is awkward and should be 'go to more places'. Repetition of 'in the vacation' is unnecessary.

× That is the holiday that I love most because that holiday that give me gives me a a chance to relax and recharge after tiring hours of studying and during my holidays I can get a lucky money.

✓ That is the holiday that I love most because that holiday gives me a chance to relax and recharge after tiring hours of studying, and during my holidays I can get lucky money.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'holiday'. The phrase 'a lucky money' is incorrect; 'lucky money' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. Also, repeated words like 'a a' should be corrected.

× I have so many activities due in my vacation like traveling that give gives me a chance to earn more knowledge or hang out with my friends like playing sports or just chatting.

✓ I have many activities during my vacation like traveling that give me a chance to gain more knowledge or hanging out with my friends, like playing sports or just chatting.

The phrase 'due in my vacation' is incorrect; 'during my vacation' is correct. 'Give gives' is a repetition error; 'give' is correct because the subject 'activities' is plural. Also, parallel structure requires 'hanging out' to match 'traveling' and 'playing'.

× Yes, I I enjoy the relaxing atmosphere at home. At home I can do I I I don't have to do more many activities just sleeping or eating with my family.

✓ Yes, I enjoy the relaxing atmosphere at home. At home, I don't have to do many activities, just sleep or eat with my family.

The phrase 'more many activities' is incorrect; 'many activities' is sufficient. Also, 'just sleeping or eating' should be 'just sleep or eat' to maintain parallel verb forms. Repetitions like 'I I I' should be removed.

× Uh, a busy holiday is the best choice for me because I went to I want a holiday with my friends, my family, just uh, watching TV's with them or playing sport with them.

✓ Uh, a busy holiday is the best choice for me because I want a holiday with my friends and my family, just watching TV with them or playing sports with them.

The phrase 'I went to I want' is incorrect and confusing; it should be 'I want'. 'TV's' is incorrect; 'TV' is uncountable and does not need an apostrophe. 'Playing sport' should be 'playing sports' for plural consistency.

× I would choose a peaceful holiday because I can enjoy a quiet atmosphere after busy hours of the the day. I study, I study and I can sleep more.

✓ I would choose a peaceful holiday because I can enjoy a quiet atmosphere after busy hours of the day. I study hard, and I can sleep more.

Repetition of 'the the' is an error. The phrase 'I study, I study' is repetitive and unclear; adding 'hard' clarifies the meaning. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow.