Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and structured. Try to start with a direct response, then add supporting details with linking words to improve coherence.

例: I went back to my home country, Japan, for my last holiday. It was wonderful because I hadn't seen my parents since 2018, so we had a great time catching up.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organise your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like holidays because I have the whole day to myself. I can relax and do whatever I want. For example, if I have enough time, I like to travel overseas.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear opinion and explain it with reasons or examples. Keep your sentences concise and avoid hesitation.

例: I don't have a favourite public holiday because I usually don't pay much attention to them. I prefer to spend my time relaxing regardless of the holiday.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

例: On holidays, I usually sleep in and watch YouTube. I enjoy watching my favourite channel about Mochi Maru, which is a cute cat.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I like spending my days at home because I enjoy relaxing. Sometimes, I just stay in my room and watch YouTube instead of going out.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and connect your ideas smoothly with linking words.

例: I prefer leisurely holidays because I don't like being busy. I have always dreamed of going abroad and relaxing at a luxurious hotel, although I haven't done that yet.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more natural and fluent.

例: I prefer peaceful holidays because my workplace is always busy and stressful. Therefore, during my holidays, I like to relax and enjoy some quiet time.

× I went back to my home country, Japan, and I haven't seen my parents since 2018, so it was great to see each other.

✓ I went back to my home country, Japan, and I hadn't seen my parents since 2018, so it was great to see each other.

The sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present perfect 'haven't seen'. Since the action of not seeing parents happened before the past event of going back, past perfect 'hadn't seen' is appropriate to show the sequence of events.

× I went back to my home country, Japan, and I haven't seen my parents since 2018, so it was great to see each other.

✓ I went back to my home country, Japan, and I hadn't seen my parents since 2018, so it was great to see each other.

The phrase 'see each other' is incorrect here because the subject is singular 'I'. It should be 'see them' or 'see my parents' to correctly refer to the object of the action.

× Yes, I do, because 24 hours each day I can, The whole time is mine.

✓ Yes, I do, because I can have 24 hours each day; the whole time is mine.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and punctuation. The corrected sentence rearranges the words to a natural English order and uses a semicolon to connect related clauses.

× So if I have a certain period out of the holidays, I would go to the overseas.

✓ So if I have a certain period during the holidays, I would go overseas.

The phrase 'out of the holidays' is incorrect; 'during the holidays' is appropriate. Also, 'go to the overseas' is incorrect; 'go overseas' is the correct expression without 'the'.

× I don't have any preference for certain public holiday but even even like I I am try not to check the public holidays.

✓ I don't have any preference for a certain public holiday, but I try not to check the public holidays.

The phrase 'any preference for certain public holiday' is incorrect; it should be 'a certain public holiday'. Also, repeated words and incorrect verb form 'am try' are corrected to 'try'.

× I usually sleep until late time and I watch YouTube.

✓ I usually sleep until late and watch YouTube.

The phrase 'late time' is unnatural; 'late' alone suffices. Also, 'I watch YouTube' is better combined with the previous clause for fluency.

× I I watch my favorite channel.

✓ I watch my favourite channel.

Repeated 'I' is a mistake. Also, 'favourite' is the Australian English spelling.

× It's like about Mochi Maru.

✓ It's about Mochi Maru.

The phrase 'like about' is incorrect; 'about' alone is sufficient to introduce the topic.

× It's a cat YouTube.

✓ It's a cat YouTube channel.

'YouTube' alone is a platform; to specify content, 'YouTube channel' is appropriate.

× Yes I do because I am a lazy person so sometimes I don't go out not going anywhere just relaxing the house at the stay in my room just watching YouTube.

✓ Yes, I do because I am a lazy person, so sometimes I don't go out or go anywhere; I just relax at home and stay in my room watching YouTube.

The original sentence is run-on and confusing. The correction breaks it into clearer parts, fixes verb forms, and improves preposition use.

× just relaxing the house at the stay in my room just watching YouTube.

✓ just relaxing at home and staying in my room just watching YouTube.

'Relaxing the house' and 'at the stay' are incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'relaxing at home' and 'staying in my room'.

× I like leisurely holidays, I don't want to have a busy one.

✓ I like leisurely holidays; I don't want to have a busy one.

The sentence needs a semicolon or period to separate two independent clauses for correct punctuation.

× I always dreamed of going abroad, then relaxing at the luxurious hotel and spend my time, but not in real.

✓ I have always dreamed of going abroad, then relaxing at a luxurious hotel and spending my time, but not in reality.

'Always dreamed' should be present perfect 'have always dreamed' to express a continuing desire. 'Spend' should be 'spending' to match the gerund form. 'The luxurious hotel' is better as 'a luxurious hotel' since it is not a specific hotel. 'Not in real' is corrected to 'not in reality'.

× I prefer peaceful holidays because my workplace is always busy, there's no time to relax.

✓ I prefer peaceful holidays because my workplace is always busy; there is no time to relax.

The contraction 'there's' is acceptable but a semicolon improves sentence clarity between two independent clauses.