Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“last holiday”出现两次，且句子结构较简单。可以增加更多具体细节描述，如海洋公园的体验，提升内容丰富度。

例: Last holiday, I returned to my hometown and spent quality time with my family. We enjoyed watching TV, playing mahjong, and even visited a local ocean park, which was quite interesting despite being a bit crowded.

提案: 回答自然且内容丰富，但部分表达如“I love holidays so much”较口语化，建议使用更正式表达。可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because they allow me to relax after busy workdays. During holidays, I usually travel, spend time with my family, or catch up with friends. Essentially, I save money throughout the year to enjoy these breaks fully.

提案: 回答中出现了“get my yard”可能是表达错误，应注意用词准确。建议增加更多细节描述节日活动，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: My favorite public holiday is the Spring Festival because I receive my year-end bonus then. I usually start preparing a month ahead by buying gifts for my family and selecting new clothes to wear during the celebrations.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“just to go back”应为“just go back”，句子未完整结束。建议注意语法准确性，避免句子残缺，并丰富细节。

例: If I feel tired during holidays, I prefer to return to my hometown and relax with my family by watching movies. However, when I have more energy, I visit my boyfriend in Shenzhen, where we enjoy tasting various local delicacies.

提案: 回答中存在表达不清和语法错误，如“when I paid”不合适，应为“when I stay at home”。建议注意句子结构和用词准确，避免模糊表达。

例: Most of the time, I enjoy staying at home because I have plenty to do, such as reading books, studying, or watching videos with friends. However, when I feel bored and restless, I prefer to go outside to refresh myself.

提案: 回答中“can't choose a leisure holiday”表达不清，建议明确表达偏好。句子结构简单，建议使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I enjoy both leisurely and busy holidays. A leisurely holiday allows me to relax without any rush, which is refreshing after long work hours. On the other hand, a busy holiday keeps me active and gives me a sense of accomplishment.

提案: 回答中“walking on hours”表达错误，应为“working long hours”。内容重复前一问题，建议丰富内容并注意用词准确。

例: I appreciate both exciting and peaceful holidays. After working long hours, a peaceful holiday helps me unwind without any pressure. Conversely, an exciting holiday keeps me engaged and provides a rewarding experience.

× Last holiday I went back to my hometown.

✓ Last holiday, I went back to my hometown.

句首缺少逗号，导致句子结构不清晰。应在时间状语后加逗号以分隔句子成分。

× Every time I go home, I prefer to stay all day.

✓ Every time I go home, I prefer to stay all day.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× That's what I did last holiday too.

✓ That's what I did last holiday too.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× I stayed with my family watching TV or playing mahjong, or we also went to an ocean park.

✓ I stayed with my family watching TV or playing mahjong, and we also went to an ocean park.

连接词使用不当，'or'应改为'and'表示并列动作。

× But it was just so so.

✓ But it was just so-so.

“so so”应连字符连接，表示一般般的意思。

× Yeah, I love holidays so much.

✓ Yeah, I love holidays so much.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× I look forward to them every work day because they make me really relax.

✓ I look forward to them every workday because they make me really relaxed.

“work day”应合写为“workday”；“make me really relax”应改为“make me really relaxed”，因为“make sb. + adj.”结构中形容词用过去分词形式。

× I can travel, stay with my family or chat with my friends.

✓ I can travel, stay with my family, or chat with my friends.

列举时应在倒数第二项前加逗号，保持句子清晰。

× The money I earn at work is basically for spending during holidays.

✓ The money I earn at work is basically for spending during holidays.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× My favorite is the Spring Festival holiday.

✓ My favorite is the Spring Festival holiday.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× That's when I get my yard and bonus and I start looking forward to it a month in advance.

✓ That's when I get my yard and bonus, and I start looking forward to it a month in advance.

连接两个并列句时应加逗号。

× I get to prepare lots of things like buying gifts for my family or picking out my new clothes for the festival.

✓ I get to prepare lots of things like buying gifts for my family or picking out new clothes for the festival.

“my new clothes”中“new clothes”通常不需要所有格，除非特别强调。

× If I am really tired, I usually just to go back to my hometown, stay with my family and don't go anywhere, maybe watch a movie.

✓ If I am really tired, I usually just go back to my hometown, stay with my family and don't go anywhere, maybe watch a movie.

“just to go”中“to”多余，应去掉。

× Sometimes if I'm not tired, I will go to Shenzhen to see my boyfriend.

✓ Sometimes if I'm not tired, I will go to Shenzhen to see my boyfriend.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× We will eat local delicious food and.

✓ We will eat local delicious food.

句子末尾“and”后无内容，造成句子不完整，应去掉。

× Most of the time when I paid because I have plenty to do at home, I read books, study, or watch group videos.

✓ Most of the time when I am free, because I have plenty to do at home, I read books, study, or watch group videos.

“when I paid”用词错误，应为“when I am free”或类似表达。

× Sometimes when I'm bored and fall off energy, I really want to go out.

✓ Sometimes when I'm bored and run out of energy, I really want to go out.

“fall off energy”表达错误，应为“run out of energy”。

× It feels like I have energy to burn.

✓ It feels like I have energy to burn.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× I like both. I can't choose a leisure holiday.

✓ I like both. I can't choose between a leisure holiday and a busy holiday.

句子不完整，缺少比较对象，应补充完整。

× It's a great break after working long hours.

✓ It's a great break after working long hours.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× No need to rush, just do whatever I want.

✓ No need to rush, just do whatever I want.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× But busy holiday makes me happy too.

✓ But a busy holiday makes me happy too.

缺少冠词“a”，应加上。

× I get to be busy every day and I feel a sense of achievement.

✓ I get to be busy every day and I feel a sense of achievement.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× I like both. I can't choose.

✓ I like both. I can't choose.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× A peaceful holiday is a great break after walking on hours.

✓ A peaceful holiday is a great break after working long hours.

“walking on hours”表达错误，应为“working long hours”。

× No need to rush, just do whatever I want.

✓ No need to rush, just do whatever I want.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× But an exciting holiday makes me happy too.

✓ But an exciting holiday makes me happy too.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× I get to be busy every day and I feel a sense of achievement.

✓ I get to be busy every day and I feel a sense of achievement.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。