Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and unnecessary phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific details about your experience.

例: For my last holiday, I went to Birmingham in the UK with my family, including my parents and three sisters. We had an amazing time exploring the city, and it was a memorable experience for all of us.

提案: Focus on clear and complete sentences. Avoid incomplete thoughts and repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you like holidays.

例: Yes, I like holidays because they help me relax and relieve stress. Moreover, holidays give me a chance to spend quality time with my family and strengthen our relationships.

提案: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: My favorite public holiday activity is going to a nearby chalet by the sea, which is about an hour and a half from my town. We usually stay there for two or three days during short holidays, enjoying the peaceful environment.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words to connect your activities and by avoiding repeating 'enjoy my time'.

例: On holidays, I usually wake up late and go to the gym. Then, I have breakfast with my parents and sisters. Later, I like to visit malls to shop for clothes and perfumes, making the most of my free time.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically and provide a clear preference.

例: I don't like spending my day at home because there are many young children who often cry, and I find the noise unpleasant. Therefore, I prefer to spend time outside, usually at my friends' houses, where I can relax and enjoy myself.

提案: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to explain your preference and give specific examples of what you do during a busy holiday.

例: I prefer a busy holiday because I enjoy planning visits to different places. For example, I decide which city to explore first and make a schedule to see as much as possible.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and provide clear explanations. Use linking words to connect your ideas and give specific examples of what makes a holiday exciting for you.

例: I prefer an exciting holiday because I like exploring new cities and learning about their culture and attractions. For instance, visiting popular landmarks and discovering what makes the city unique.

× For my last holiday I went to the UK, specifically into to Birmingham.

✓ For my last holiday I went to the UK, specifically to Birmingham.

The preposition 'into to' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate a destination city is 'to'. So, 'specifically to Birmingham' is correct.

× I went with my family which consists of my father, mother and three sisters.

✓ I went with my family which consists of my father, mother, and three sisters.

A comma is needed before 'and' in a list of three or more items to clarify the separation of items. This is known as the Oxford comma and helps avoid ambiguity.

× For me personally, yes I like holidays since holidays gives me a relaxing vibe.

✓ For me personally, yes I like holidays since holidays give me a relaxing vibe.

The subject 'holidays' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' instead of 'gives' to agree in number.

× Going to a holiday will relax my and release any stress in my body.

✓ Going on a holiday will relax me and release any stress in my body.

The phrase 'relax my' is incorrect; it should be 'relax me' as 'me' is the correct object pronoun. Also, the preposition 'on' is used with 'holiday' when referring to going somewhere for a holiday.

× It will also give me a good time knowing my to know my family more.

✓ It will also give me a good time getting to know my family more.

The phrase 'knowing my to know my family more' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'getting to know my family more' to express becoming more familiar with family members.

× Dig deep and build good connection between me and my family.

✓ I want to dig deep and build a good connection between me and my family.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a subject and proper verb form. Adding 'I want to' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. Also, 'a good connection' requires the article 'a'.

× Sit with them have have.

✓ Sit with them and have fun.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains repetition 'have have'. Adding 'and have fun' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× For the public holiday I best like is maybe going to a nearby chalet, which is a house, a small house cabin in front of a sea.

✓ The public holiday I like best is maybe going to a nearby chalet, which is a small house or cabin in front of the sea.

The phrase 'I best like' is incorrect; the correct order is 'I like best'. Also, 'a small house cabin' is awkward; 'a small house or cabin' is clearer. 'In front of a sea' should be 'in front of the sea' because 'sea' is specific here.

× It's about 1 1/2 hour from the town.

✓ It's about 1 1/2 hours from the town.

When expressing duration or distance, the plural 'hours' is used for more than one hour. Also, 'from the town' is correct preposition usage.

× We usually stay two to three days over there if we had a small holiday.

✓ We usually stay two to three days over there if we have a small holiday.

The sentence talks about a habitual action, so the present tense 'have' should be used instead of past tense 'had'.

× Holidays are usually relaxed, wake up a bit late sometimes go to the gym, eat breakfast with my parents, sisters and enjoy my time.

✓ Holidays are usually relaxed; I wake up a bit late, sometimes go to the gym, eat breakfast with my parents and sisters, and enjoy my time.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper subjects and punctuation. Adding 'I' before verbs and proper punctuation improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For me I hate staying at home since we had a lot of kids, small sisters in my house and they're usually crying and I hate the sound of screaming and crying.

✓ For me, I hate staying at home since we have a lot of kids, small sisters in my house and they're usually crying, and I hate the sound of screaming and crying.

The verb tense should be present 'have' to match the current situation. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× So I prefer staying out of the house maybe with my friends and that their house and enjoy the time with them.

✓ So I prefer staying out of the house, maybe at my friends' houses, and enjoying the time with them.

The phrase 'that their house' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'at my friends' houses'. Also, 'enjoy' should be 'enjoying' to match the gerund form after 'prefer'.

× I like to be busy trying to figure out when should I go to this place or another place.

✓ I like to be busy trying to figure out when I should go to this place or another place.

The question word order 'should I go' is incorrect in a statement. It should be 'I should go' in indirect questions.

× I got something considered more we should view this city 1st or the other city.

✓ I have something in mind; we should visit this city first or the other city.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. Rephrasing to 'I have something in mind' and 'we should visit' clarifies the meaning and corrects grammar.

× For me, I prefer exciting.

✓ For me, I prefer exciting holidays.

The adjective 'exciting' needs a noun to modify. Adding 'holidays' completes the sentence meaningfully.

× For example, going to a city and exploring why this city is.

✓ For example, going to a city and exploring what this city is like.

The phrase 'exploring why this city is' is incomplete and unclear. 'Exploring what this city is like' is a correct and natural expression.

× What is the city? Popular world? How?

✓ What is the city known for? Is it popular worldwide? How?

The original questions are incomplete and unclear. Rephrasing them into complete questions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.