Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'visited in a fun world' and 'situated in a pat in Patiala.' Try to be more precise and use correct prepositions. Also, avoid redundancy and irrelevant details like 'take a shower.' Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Last holiday, I visited a theme park located in Patiala with my family. We enjoyed many activities like dancing and listening to music. It was a wonderful experience, and I took many pictures with my sister.

提案: Your answer conveys your feelings but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing like 'hustle and bustle which I really happen in my life.' Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and correct prepositions. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I really like holidays because they give me a break from the busy daily routine. Moreover, I get to spend quality time with my family, especially my sister, which I usually don't have time for.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors such as 'take up and did a pray of my.' Be sure to use correct verb forms and sentence structures. Also, provide more specific details about the holiday and your activities, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: My favorite public holiday is Baisakhi, which is important in my religion. On that day, we prepare delicious foods like potato fries, decorate our house, and offer prayers together.

提案: Your answer includes relevant activities but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I did I did' and use correct articles and plural forms. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: On holidays, I usually cook meals and help my mother with household chores like cleaning and washing clothes. Additionally, I enjoy playing games with my sister since I don't get much time to spend with her during busy days.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'I did not want to go warned here.' Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant.

例: Yes, I enjoy spending time at home because it allows me to relax peacefully. For example, last year I chose to stay home instead of visiting my aunt because I wanted a calm holiday.

提案: Your answer communicates your preference but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing like 'I just because the holiday is a opportunity for us to get a chapter.' Use simpler sentences and correct articles. Also, avoid trailing off at the end and use linking words properly.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because it helps me reduce stress and feel comfortable. On the other hand, busy holidays make me feel frustrated since holidays should be a break from daily hustle and bustle.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors such as 'prefer to did on a day a lot of activities.' Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating phrases. Also, complete your sentences fully and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I always prefer an exciting holiday because it makes the day more memorable. During such holidays, I enjoy doing many activities like cooking, helping my mother, and visiting new places with my family.

× I visited in a fun world which is mainly situated in a pat in Patiala.

✓ I visited a fun world which is mainly situated in a park in Patiala.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used after 'visited'. The verb 'visit' is directly followed by the object without a preposition. Also, 'pat' seems to be a typo for 'park'.

× And I click a lot of pictures with my sister and did a lot of activities like dancing, listening music, take a shower.

✓ And I clicked a lot of pictures with my sister and did a lot of activities like dancing, listening to music, and taking a shower.

The verb tense should be past tense 'clicked' to match the past context. 'Listening music' requires the preposition 'to' after 'listening'. 'Take a shower' should be in gerund form 'taking' to match the list of activities.

× I really like a holiday because it is an opportunity for us to get a break from a hustle and bustle which I really happen in my life.

✓ I really like holidays because they are an opportunity for us to get a break from the hustle and bustle which really happens in my life.

'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays' to express general preference. 'A hustle and bustle' is incorrect; 'the hustle and bustle' is the correct idiomatic expression. 'Which I really happen' is incorrect; it should be 'which really happens'.

× I got a chance to spend with my family or a sister because all the time I just busy in my schedule due to which I hardly got a time to spend with them.

✓ I got a chance to spend time with my family or my sister because all the time I am just busy with my schedule, due to which I hardly get time to spend with them.

The verb 'spend' requires an object like 'time' and the preposition 'with' to indicate company. 'Busy in my schedule' should be 'busy with my schedule'. 'Got a time' should be 'get time' for general statements.

× Well, I like the Bisaki which is close to my religion.

✓ Well, I like Baisakhi which is close to my religion.

'Bisaki' is a misspelling of 'Baisakhi'. No article 'the' is needed before 'Baisakhi' as it is a proper noun referring to a festival.

× On that day, I did a lot of activities like preparing of delicious foods including the potato fries that is one of my favorite.

✓ On that day, I did a lot of activities like preparing delicious food including potato fries, which are one of my favorites.

'Preparing of' is incorrect; it should be 'preparing' without 'of'. 'Foods' is usually uncountable as 'food'. 'Potato fries' is plural, so 'that is' should be 'which are'. 'Favorite' should be plural 'favorites' to match 'potato fries'.

× Moreover, we also decorated our house and take up and did a pray of my.

✓ Moreover, we also decorated our house, cleaned up, and said a prayer.

'Take up' is incorrect here; likely intended 'cleaned up'. 'Did a pray of my' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'said a prayer'. Verb forms should be consistent and appropriate.

× Yes, well I did a lot of activities on a holidays like cooking foods, helping the mother in a household, chores like cleaning, washing clothes or etcetera.

✓ Yes, well I did a lot of activities on holidays like cooking food, helping my mother with household chores like cleaning, washing clothes, etc.

'On a holidays' is incorrect; 'on holidays' or 'on a holiday' is correct. 'Foods' should be 'food' as uncountable. 'Helping the mother' should be 'helping my mother'. 'In a household' is better as 'with household chores'. 'Or etcetera' is redundant; 'etc.' suffices.

× Moreover, I also like to play a games with my sister because in my due to my busy schedule I hardly got a time to spend with her.

✓ Moreover, I also like to play games with my sister because due to my busy schedule I hardly get time to spend with her.

'Play a games' is incorrect; 'play games' is correct. 'In my due to my busy schedule' is incorrect; 'due to my busy schedule' is sufficient. 'Got a time' should be 'get time' for general statements.

× Of course, I really like to spend a time spend time at home.

✓ Of course, I really like to spend time at home.

The phrase 'spend a time spend time' is redundant and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'spend time' without 'a' or repetition.

× Last year I have to visited in my aunt home, but I have made an excuse because I did not want to go warned here.

✓ Last year I was supposed to visit my aunt's home, but I made an excuse because I did not want to go there.

'Have to visited' is incorrect; past tense 'was supposed to visit' fits better. 'Visited in' is incorrect; 'visit' does not require 'in'. 'Aunt home' should be 'aunt's home'. 'Go warned here' is incorrect; likely meant 'go there'.

× Well, I prefer a preferred leisure holiday because it help me to reduce my stress or anxiety level and I really feel cosy and moreover, whenever I got a busy holiday I really feel frustrated.

✓ Well, I prefer a leisure holiday because it helps me to reduce my stress and anxiety levels and I really feel cozy. Moreover, whenever I have a busy holiday, I really feel frustrated.

'Prefer a preferred' is redundant; use 'prefer'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject. 'Stress or anxiety level' should be plural 'levels'. 'Got a busy holiday' should be 'have a busy holiday' for habitual present.

× I just because the holiday is a opportunity for us to get a chapter to get a break from a hustle and bustle that is mainly happening in your life and.

✓ It's just because the holiday is an opportunity for us to get a chance to take a break from the hustle and bustle that mainly happens in our lives.

'A opportunity' should be 'an opportunity' because 'opportunity' starts with a vowel sound. 'Chapter' is incorrect; 'chance' is appropriate. 'A hustle and bustle' should be 'the hustle and bustle'. 'Your life' should be 'our lives' for general statement.

× Holiday well, I always prefer exciting when I always prefer exciting holiday because it helps to make our such a day become more memorable.

✓ Well, I always prefer an exciting holiday because it helps to make such a day more memorable.

Sentence structure is awkward; 'exciting when I always prefer exciting holiday' is redundant. 'An exciting holiday' requires the article 'an'. 'Our such a day' is incorrect; 'such a day' suffices.

× And moreover, whenever I got a holiday, I prefer to did on a day a lot of activities like preparing foods, helping my mother or visiting in any type of place place and there I did a lot of fun with my family and make such a.

✓ Moreover, whenever I have a holiday, I prefer to do a lot of activities like preparing food, helping my mother, or visiting different places, and there I have a lot of fun with my family and make such days memorable.

'Got a holiday' should be 'have a holiday' for habitual present. 'Prefer to did' is incorrect; should be 'prefer to do'. 'Preparing foods' should be 'preparing food'. 'Visiting in any type of place place' is incorrect; 'visiting different places' is correct. 'Did a lot of fun' should be 'have a lot of fun'. Sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring.